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Reviewer: Aggie (Signed) · Date: July 10, 2009 11:46 AM · On: Chapter 2 - Drunken Adventures
oops... Getting caught not good, but then you would not have much of a story! LOL :-)
Reviewer: Aggie (Signed) · Date: July 10, 2009 11:36 AM · On: Chapter 1 - They Don't Know What's Hit Them
Love me some bad ass Bella... adding to read per JayJayHale rec!
Loved the first Chapter!
Author's Response: I love new readers, welcome.
Thanks.
Alice.x
Reviewer: carlisleistoohot (Signed) · Date: July 07, 2009 11:25 PM · On: Chapter 27 - Oh Crap!
I love the story update please
Author's Response: Thank you.
I'm just waiting for a one shot to be validated, then I will add the next chapter once that has happened.
Alice.x
Reviewer: Eoin Cullen (Anonymous) · Date: July 07, 2009 03:52 AM · On: Chapter 18 - Visitors
Well, Edward's parents irritated me. I was right there with Bella and I seriously hope she gives them the finger at some point. Great chapter!
Btw, "Better Than Sex" cake is an actual recipe :)
Author's Response: Haha, metaphorically she does at one point. :P
Yeh, Ms Black sent me the recipe.
Thanks.
Alice.x
Reviewer: Eoin Cullen (Anonymous) · Date: July 07, 2009 03:16 AM · On: Chapter 17 - Payback's a Bitch
Well, how else did they think the ass kicking was going to end?
Great story!
Author's Response: Lol, true.
Thank you.
Alice.x
Reviewer: bysm1114 (Signed) · Date: July 06, 2009 03:31 PM · On: Chapter 27 - Oh Crap!
okay to start id lyk edward dipped in chocolate no more lyk a chocolate truffle haha :Þ
next id lyk u to hurry up please this is soo good i luvd it
so i hav to say this is one of my favorites
Author's Response: Haha, thank you.
I'm just waiting for a one-shot to be validated then I will add the next chapter right away.
Thank you.
Alice.x
Reviewer: supermanisgay (Signed) · Date: July 05, 2009 12:19 PM · On: Chapter 27 - Oh Crap!
wow, i love this story!
i'll have all the boys naked and covered in chocolate, haha, thanks! :)
Author's Response: Thank you, I'm glad.
Haha, that does sound good. :P
Alice.x
Reviewer: sambo021 (Signed) · Date: July 05, 2009 10:59 AM · On: Chapter 27 - Oh Crap!
i hope they get back at aro for catching them :)
Author's Response: Lol,that would be good.
Thanks.
Alice.x
Reviewer: LittlePixieStick (Signed) · Date: July 02, 2009 10:26 PM · On: Chapter 27 - Oh Crap!
Can't say I didn't see it coming. They're just lucky their not all stuck until their dead!
I did have a comment though, aren't the kids all like 17 years old? In the US a person is a legal adult at the age of 18, I don't think they'd be able to be held at a juvenile detention facility like that after their birthdays. Not sure, I'm no lawyer by any means, but it was just a thought.
Anyway, love the way things are going and can't wait to see what new kinds of mischief everyone manages to get themselves into now that their back in boot camp.
Author's Response: I did think about that, for the sake of this story I'm making it that they can't add time to their sentence after the age of 18.
Thanks.
Alice.x
Reviewer: LittlePixieStick (Signed) · Date: July 02, 2009 09:43 PM · On: Chapter 26 - Newsflash
Oh silly children, getting wasted off your butt right after you've realized your faces are plastered all over the news is not a way to remain stealth. (Of course everything couldn't be a nice and easy for our fierce-some six - after all, the story is called boot camp) but they should know better. Mistakes are much easier to make when judgement and reaction times are impaired! It looks like those six can kiss their short lived freedom goodbye!
Author's Response: Lol, they do tend to live in the now, and that leads to problems for them. :P
Thanks.
Alice.x
Reviewer: LittlePixieStick (Signed) · Date: July 02, 2009 09:13 PM · On: Chapter 25 - New Shoes
Fun filler chapter, not really a whole lot going on, but that has to be the case with stories sometimes. You need the filler chapters to get to the next action scene. And, being someone in the hospitality business (and a complete shoe whore) I love the detail you gave both the hotel and the shoes. Thanks for the fun!
Reviewer: LittlePixieStick (Signed) · Date: July 02, 2009 09:13 PM · On: Chapter 25 - New Shoes
Fun filler chapter, not really a whole lot going on, but that has to be the case with stories sometimes. You need the filler chapters to get to the next action scene. And, being someone in the hospitality business (and a complete shoe whore) I love the detail you gave both the hotel and the shoes. Thanks for the fun!
Reviewer: LittlePixieStick (Signed) · Date: July 02, 2009 09:13 PM · On: Chapter 25 - New Shoes
Fun filler chapter, not really a whole lot going on, but that has to be the case with stories sometimes. You need the filler chapters to get to the next action scene. And, being someone in the hospitality business (and a complete shoe whore) I love the detail you gave both the hotel and the shoes. Thanks for the fun!
Author's Response: Lol, shoes are amazing. :P
Thank you.
Alice.x
Reviewer: Kali M (Signed) · Date: June 30, 2009 09:40 AM · On: Chapter 8 - Sounds Like a Plan
Wow, your an amazing writer, I've read a lot of fan fics on this site and this one stands out as the best. I have just finished the eighth chapter and i am already addicted to your story, you have a real talent and if you change the names in your story (for copyright purposes of course) you should wright it up and take it to a publisher, I think they would be very interested in your work.
All the best,
Kali M
Author's Response: Thank you very much, that's one of the nicest things someone has said about my writing.
Hope you enjoy the rest of the story.
Alice.x
Reviewer: Eoin Cullen (Anonymous) · Date: June 30, 2009 04:49 AM · On: Chapter 16 - A Midnight Wander
I freaking KNEW Aro had a way of knowing about the envelopes being taken out of the office!
I also had a feeling they would get caught and that it would be because of Lauren...she better have eyes in the back of her head...
I LOVE this story! I am starting to wonder whether or not Bella is going to change. I thought she might, but now I have doubts...then again, there are several more chapters to go. :)
Author's Response: Haha, there's not much that Aro doesn't know about, but he doesn't know everything, that would just be freaky.
I would feel sorry for Lauren if i didn't dislike her so much. :P
Thank you.
Alice.x
Reviewer: antipyro (Signed) · Date: June 29, 2009 02:54 PM · On: Chapter 27 - Oh Crap!
All of those choices are indeed delectable! Too bad my photo of the bananas didn't come out here.
I'm really surprised that the girls especially, were really mad at being caught and sent back. Like, what did they expect??? Now if they had something on one of the guards or even Aro, maybe some leniency might be in order!! It almost hurts that the girls will be confined, if all goes well that is, two months longer than the guys.
Chocolate Hazelnut Toffee Cake, with whipped cream and Edward serving it with suggestive clothing on. Grrrrrrr...
Author's Response: Yeah, they are just really annoyed that their fun in San Francisco is over.
Thank you.
Alice.x
Reviewer: harmonyrenesmee1 (Signed) · Date: June 29, 2009 08:40 AM · On: Chapter 10 - Roomies
LMAO - Lauren is the roomate - Yeah, I figured that.
If I were Bella, while Edward was there - I would have went up to Lauren and said "Ohhhhh, So you're the one that doesn't know how to flush a toilet.
Amazing freaking story, I can't stop laughing - How did you come up with this idea, if you don't mind me asking...?
Author's Response: Lol, that would have been funny.
I was inspired by an episode of 21 Jump Street.
Thank you. Glad you're enjoying it.
Alice.x
Reviewer: deepblueyes (Signed) · Date: June 29, 2009 06:20 AM · On: Chapter 27 - Oh Crap!
Can I have a tonne of ice cream - its tooooo hot down in south england. Whoop Scotland! Part scottish raised to be a bit patriotic!
I'm loving the whole fact that they've not done anything too overly bad and yet they are causing the worst trouble :) I'm going on holiday soon like next week any chance of an update before then. Awesome!
Author's Response: It's quite warm up here too, but it's probably warmer in England.
I'm not sure, I've got a one shot in the queue and I'll have to wait for that to be validated, so it really depends on how long that will take and if I can complete the next chapter soon. Hopefully there will be an update soon though.
Thank you.
Alice.x
Reviewer: Eoin Cullen (Anonymous) · Date: June 29, 2009 04:42 AM · On: Chapter 15 - Tales From the South
Good stuff, good stuff...
I hope they don't get caught!
Reviewer: Eoin Cullen (Anonymous) · Date: June 29, 2009 04:32 AM · On: Chapter 14 - Lost and Found
I was wondering what was in the texts that were making Jasper scowl! Hmm...
Great of course and still stoked that I do not have to wait for an update (yet) :)
Author's Response: Haha, yeah, waiting kinda sucks.
Thanks.
Alice.x
Reviewer: Eoin Cullen (Anonymous) · Date: June 29, 2009 04:14 AM · On: Chapter 13 - Defiance
I think it makes the story flow better when you have the little things like their schedules actually written out. Great job!
Author's Response: Haha, it was really just a result of being bored, but they came in handy.
Thanks.
Alice.x
Reviewer: Eoin Cullen (Anonymous) · Date: June 29, 2009 04:00 AM · On: Chapter 12 - Rise and Shine
This was good! I have a feeling Bella is going to change a bit...
Reviewer: Eoin Cullen (Anonymous) · Date: June 29, 2009 03:44 AM · On: Chapter 11 - Boys will be Boys
I like how you write the characters! Their personalities are so funny! I can't wait to see how they get altered if at all...
Author's Response: Thank you, I like it when people find my story funny...it makes me smile.
Alice.x
Reviewer: Eoin Cullen (Anonymous) · Date: June 29, 2009 03:32 AM · On: Chapter 10 - Roomies
Good chaptere of course!
I have to say I am surprised that Bella and Lauren haven't come to blows, although I am sure it is coming! :)
Author's Response: Haha, they will in time.
Thank you.
Alice.x
Reviewer: aaa (Signed) · Date: June 28, 2009 07:13 AM · On: Chapter 27 - Oh Crap!
Its a great story!..... but im sad that they got caught :(
Author's Response: Thank you.
Yeah, it is sad, but it had to happen.
Alice.x
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