i'm glad to see you updated again.  i really like looking at the story from this perspective.

 

i'd love to read edward's point of view.  i can imagine what was going on in his perspective, but i'd love to read it.  :-D

Oh Bella Bella, what a sorry state of affairs. I like that you found a way to work in Bella's months of misery and despair into your story. And you did it very effectively. I always thought that had Edward been aware of Bella's demise during New Moon he would have come back for her wellbeing. You on the other hand have him bare witness without taking any action. Watching her seperate herself from reality, the weightloss and disregard for her outward appearance. Interesting.

 

OF COURSE!! Who wouldnt want to read EPOV. Please, i would be more than thrilled to take a look.

Wow. I know that was a really difficult transition to make and usual you handled it like a pro. The disjointed scenes made it flow, but still took us everywhere we needed to go in just one chapter. Quite a feat!

It's probably going to be different for everyone, but I only really got sad at the following "On February 20th, I slipped in the parking lot after school and drove myself one-handed to the ER, already knowing that I’d sprained my left wrist when I used it to catch the rest of me as I slammed against the concrete."

You have Bella point out later that she has to be careful because no one is there to catch her, but that one whole sentence made me freak out. I guess I won't know for sure until you send out Edward POV, but I usually have it hovering in the back of my mind anyway. I could just see him watching her and conciously choosing to let her fall and it made me get all worried like a moron that he will never catch her again and it's all over and she's doomed to end up with Mike ...(and various other insane ideas were mixed into the tailspin ). Then I got a hold of myself and continued reading only to have Mike holding her at the end of the friggin chapter! lol Thank God for note number one.

And as a final note I know discussions on the board got very...indepth ( thats what happens when you leave us to our own devices for 2 weeks. lol), but I was really relieved to feel like Bella is still your Bella as I was reading.

I do want to read your other 5,000 word masterpeice, but I want to assure you I would have reviewed anyways like a good stalker- I mean fan :D

love this chapter! (and would love EPOV for ch 27)

Hey!  *I* like Nickelback!  What are you trying to say?  o.O

:D  Heehee, I'm kidding, only kidding.  Besides, I think my excellent taste in fanfiction should clearly make up for any fail taste in music that I may possess.   

I so loved this chapter.  i think you wrote Bella's breakdown brilliantly...New Moon zombie in front of Edward's eyes.  And Edward...that apathetic observer! (ok, I'm sure he's really not, but through Bella's eyes he is).  I want to hit him and break my hand doing it.

I also, though, kinda want to smack Bella, just a little.  I love her (more your version of her than canon Bella, actually) and I really do feel and understand what she's going through.  I think it was very necessary for her to hit this wall and hard too.

 I am really hoping, however, that Bella discovers that life does not revolve around Edward's feelings for her, or Jake's happiness, or even Charlie.   The pinnacle of her life has to be her.  I know I'm not saying that very eloquently, but I think you know what I mean, so I'll stop that before I break into the a chorus of Whitney Houston's 'The Greatest Love of All' and make you hurl.  I mean, I want Edward and Bella together BAD but...I guess I'm just saying that I hope that she has that strength and self worth in herself and that it isn't all centered on whether he wants to be with her or not.

Anyway, this was an absolutely fantastic chapter and I'm all fangirl excited waiting for the next.  And I so definitely want Edward's POV chapter...please?

 

 

Okay, so first let me just say, WOW! for this chapter. That was probably the most indepth, in cannon, and REALISTIC- in real life- chapter that I've ever read. Not to mention HANDS DOWN the best scene of Bella after Edward breaks her heart. with that out of the way, I'd also like to say that, had SM tweaked her plot so that it matched your story more, (like having Edward stay after he told her he didn't want her, and having bella actually break up with jake- she never really ACTUALLY did that, by the way. bella always just put it off, even in the scene where jake was hurt after the fight in Eclipse. but he did know E/B were getting married so it kinda ended things, but even when she knew they were about to become mortal ennemies she never broke it off.... Friking Reneesme! that pisses me off.... but enough of that) anyway, what I'm trying to say, is that SM's cataconic bella in NM, or any other angst she wrote has absolutely NOTHING on YOU. And I seriously mean that. I love SM and all, but man, your writing KICKS ASS! you should really write original stuff, it'd be amazing. AND I MEAN THAT FROM THE BOTTOM OF MY HEART. I totally loved the way you did the 2ish praragraph scenes, because they totally worked for how you wrote it. It was really involving, and the stuff with bella waking up and Angela and Mike and Lauren, and the Edward staring war were all perfect. this is so totally something I could imagine. It was really intense, adn kept me on the edge of my seat the whole time. You're awesome at capturing the human persona, and if the story didn't actually involve vamps, this is something that really coul've happened in real life. I hope you contine writing, not only fanfiction, but your own stuff as well. You're absolutley amazing.

And if you would be sooo kind, I would LOVE to be able to read Edward's POV of this chapter. That had to be hell on him too, and I can't wait to see how you write it.

Can't wait for the next chapter!

~sedrax

I'm glad Bella is moving on..she deserves to. And I would like Edward's version of Chapter 27!

I got sooo excited when I saw the new chapter.  I stopped everything I was doing and sat and read.  This story is really beautiful and I LOVE your version of Bella.  I think you did a great job of showing zombie Bella and the choppy scenes were PERFECT... they really got the point across.  I am so excited for the next chapter and I would love to read that chapter from Edward's POV.  Pretty Please?!?!  : )  Can't wait!

oh, was so excited to see you updated. you had some really lovely images in this chapter. the final image was just wow... even though mike is an ass, the embrace was really lovely.

 

would be keen to have a look see at edwards pov

xx

looking forward to more angst and happier times head. 

good chapter, i have reviewd on FF for a couple of chapters but since this one is up first and i was reading...

anyway, i liked the way you did this and understood completely why there were as many scenes as there were...perfectly handled...

So, i would love to read ch 27 in edwards pov...the pain and worry he must have felt watching her if his love is everything that it usually is...

so good...love this chapter and can't wait for the next!

 

As depressing as this story can be, it's all necessary and believeable -- I always knew that a much as Jake would have liked to have ended up with Bella, it could never have really happened; yes, he helped heal her and all, but they weren't meant to be in that way... especially with her insane obsession with Edward (lol). I'm glad you included this chapter, and I think it's more than just a transitory chapter. It was nice to hear more about how she thought and functioned than the basically blank pages of "New Moon."

 I do really love your story and I was really, really glad that you updated. I'd love to read Edward's version of chapter 27 -- can't wait for that version and the next chapter!!

Bella's zombie days were perfect. Not to drawn out and not to short. I liked the way she addressed Lauren at lunch. Mike was a good choice at the end in the hall. It would really piss off Edward and it actually helped Bella fell "human" again.
I must have Edward BOV!
This is another great chapter. We talk about the posts at work and go over each chapter paragraph by paragraph.