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Reviewer: adrenalinerush (Anonymous) · Date: January 13, 2009 06:11 PM · On: Relentless

I wasn’t lying; I couldn’t trust him…mostly because I was pretty sure I believed him. He might love me, but he also left me. And the leaving was all I could remember.

That brought tears to my eyes. I completely understand Bella's attitude towards Edward and, while I recognize your desire to make the story less angsty, I hope she doesn't let him off easy.

Reviewer: Tsumi (Signed) · Date: January 13, 2009 06:07 PM · On: Relentless

thank fucking god, about time edward grew some sensible balls! wonderful again, very angsty tho but we got hints of the good stuff with love declarations and kissy foreheads! i was going into withdrawal waiting for this, especially since the teasers on the forum came out so quickly :P you keep your readers on the edge of their seats m'dear, i can hardly wait for the next installment! hell to the yea!

Reviewer: starshinedown (Signed) · Date: January 13, 2009 05:53 PM · On: Relentless

Hellllooooooo angst.

Ok, so YES. Edward spilled his guts. I am glad about this. It needed to happen, and even though I sympathize with Bella squirming with the space invasion he had going on, the words needed to be said.

She'll need to some time to process. I HOPE TO GOD that she doesn't use said processing time twist his words and convince herself of bad things.

I hope for her mental state (and mine!) that there is some catalyst coming that gets Bella act; to have an epiphany and realize she can work with Edward to move forward or to up and run away from Forks or something. Just something.

Thanks for making me cry, Oxy!

Reviewer: sedrax (Signed) · Date: January 13, 2009 05:52 PM · On: Relentless

OH MY FREAKING GOSH!!!!!

THAT WAS HOW IT SHOULDE"VE BEEN IN NEW MOON!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Damn girl, you sure know how to write. If you ever write anything that gets published you SOOOOO have to let us here at Twilighted know, because you are, like, my new favorite author. No joke. That was THE BEST chapter I've ever read, HANDS DOWN! You had me at the edge of my seat the whole time, and it was like I was feeling everything that E/B were feeling all at the same time. Eyes watering, heart in my throat, hating my self and the world all at the same time, and completely helpless, yet maybe daring to hope.

Good God womman, you deserve the fricking Nobel Prize, or atleast the Nobel Prize for Fan Fic. (if there was such a thing, I would magically send it to you through internet teleportation... except then magical internet teleportation would have to exist too...)

Anyway, you TOTALLY rock!

MORE!!! (please? with like, a bagillion cherries on top, and whipped cream, and cupcakes, and brownies, and grande non-fat pepermint mochas with whipped cream and chocolate shavings....)

Reviewer: COLDASICEx3 (Signed) · Date: January 13, 2009 05:51 PM · On: Relentless

I forgot what number review I'm on. Sorry, Oxy. I failed you :(

 

But GREAT chapter!

Reviewer: wants_an_edward86 (Signed) · Date: January 13, 2009 05:45 PM · On: Relentless

UGH! Oxy, what are you doing to me!!!  That was by far so unbelievably sexy and painful all wrapped up in one!  Poor Bella, she's so hurt by Edward  and she's just fighting his instanticy (if that's even a word, haha) that he's sorry and now belongs to her.  I agree the angst is just getting too much.  But i'm glad he heard her say she loves him in her sleep.  Because she did that unconsciously and he knows she really meant it, and she knows because it was her dreams but somehow she needs to stop and give in, even if its not trusting him fully, but taking baby steps and maybe a kiss could help her ;)  Really love this and will totally be voting for you :)

Reviewer: SuburbanSun (Signed) · Date: January 13, 2009 05:41 PM · On: Relentless

Oh sweet, torturous, delicious angst. This was fantastic. I really do love this story more with each passing chapter. And don't worry about the melodrama-- if I were a girl in love with a wayward vampire and with an unpredictable Teen Wolf for an ex, my life would be pretty melodramatic too.

Two (three, really) bits that I loved in particular:

"...staring at me as if I were the lion rather than the lamb."

"...like an atheist eyeing a crucifix." I love love love interesting ways of saying things instead of resorting to tired cliches, so this wins in my book.

And of course, "nocturnal admissions." Hee.

Again, good show. I await future installments with delicious anticipation.

Reviewer: Debussy_This (Signed) · Date: January 13, 2009 05:41 PM · On: Relentless

After finishing this chapter I stared at this review box for way too long trying to figure out how to review a chapter that made me feel the way this chapter did.

Beautiful, heartwrenching, and for the first time I'm identifying with Bella. 

I can't tell you how much I enjoy this fic.  How absolutely beautiful it is.

So I'll IVO dance instead.

Reviewer: dazzledbride (Signed) · Date: January 13, 2009 05:34 PM · On: Relentless

sososoooso SO happy you updated. This was a great, angsty chapter... but I'm ready to see everything develope officially..

Reviewer: Lizzie (Signed) · Date: January 13, 2009 05:26 PM · On: Relentless

This was an incredible chapter! I was absolutely glued to the screen.  Nothing, I mean NOTHING could have distracted me while I was reading this chapter.  I don't know how you string such compelling words together into immensely engaging, intense, heart-pounding scenes.  You are so SO talented! Bravo! Just...bravo!

Reviewer: megs1313 (Signed) · Date: January 13, 2009 05:23 PM · On: Relentless

I can't wait to see how she's going to handle this. Brilliant as always, Oxy!!!

Reviewer: Syndie (Signed) · Date: January 13, 2009 05:22 PM · On: Relentless

I usually only rate instead of review but I wanted to tell you I really enjoyed the dialogue in this chapter. I could really understand "Bratty" Bella's POV cause when I'm pissed I know I love to pick a fight with my husband. She's being a Bitch because she can, but in the end I think she knows that it will resove itself.

Reviewer: NicoleRea (Signed) · Date: January 13, 2009 05:21 PM · On: Relentless

Man, Edward is a persistent mofo - good for him!  Once again, you made me think they would FINALLY kiss and then nothing.  Ugh, you know what you're doing, you little temptress you!  Okay, still loving the story.  Loving that Edward is being persistent.  And I'm ready for Bella to stop crying and start loving!  She's not a hard-ass.  She needs to just get over it and be happy and in love!

Okay, that's a long review.  And here's what I looked like while I read this chapter---> :-D

That's right, your story slap a stupid smile on my face.  I hope you're happy.  ;)

Reviewer: starsandthemoon (Signed) · Date: January 13, 2009 05:15 PM · On: Relentless

Holy crap you've done it again!  You have this awesome ability to literally glue my eyes to my computer screen when I read your work.  I swear, a tornado could tear through my room and I wouldn't know it.  

Brilliant, amazing, fantastic work!  I'm in love with this story, thank you for updating!

Reviewer: Siamecho (Signed) · Date: January 13, 2009 05:14 PM · On: Relentless

Great! Bella is getting a spine and Edward is not quite so martyred (thank freaking god, all that ever caused was more pain and heartache). Loving your story. More chapters. NOW! Seriously, liking the storyline.

Reviewer: notmyself (Signed) · Date: January 13, 2009 05:10 PM · On: Relentless

I hope this doesn't make you sad, but my favorite part of this chapter was the author notes where you said you were going to perk things up. Please please please. i want to be happy again. And reading your characters usually makees me giddy. But I become so absorbed in them that I hurt when they do too. So bring on the happy. Happy happy joy joy.

 

~Mia

Reviewer: geosgirl (Signed) · Date: January 13, 2009 05:10 PM · On: Relentless

BB - you did it again! I'm so glad that Edward didn't puss out! I was cheering him on!!! What he did was terrible and it sucked and Bella has every right to be pissed and to still be pissed, but I'm glad he kept  his eyes on the prize! He's got a lot of work to do to fix his mistake!! They are both so damn stubborn!!



Author's Response:

Oh, and he will WORK hard.  I enjoy Edward in pursuit of Bella, and I'm so excited to be able to start writing that portion of the story.  It was hard not having him around for so many chapters. 

Reviewer: vos es meus vita (Signed) · Date: January 13, 2009 05:09 PM · On: Relentless

I'm so happy that it's going to get happy again. Don't get me wrong, I loved the angst as well. Bella needed to work through some of her own issues.

Edward and Bella just belong together. So I'm eagerly waiting for that!

By the way, I love the banner!



Author's Response:

They DO belong together.  It will happen...eventually.  Like I said, that was the worst of it. 

Also, thanks for the complement on the banner! 

Reviewer: elfarmy (Signed) · Date: January 13, 2009 05:04 PM · On: Relentless

i already want more.



Author's Response:

me too.  it was hard to leave it there.  thanks for the IVO love!

Reviewer: Pastiche Pen (Signed) · Date: January 13, 2009 04:59 PM · On: Relentless

I love Bella's anger.

Although I got pissed at Edward when he was like, "you'll figure it out."

He needed to come out and say it!

Ah, but yeah, i love the angst but it's killin' me!



Author's Response:

Oh, she figured it out.  The "I belong to you" line was hard to misinterpret ;) 

The angst is killing me, too.  I've taken up smoking over it.  The next chapter ends well, so hopefully that will dull your pain. 

Reviewer: AppleDarling (Signed) · Date: January 13, 2009 04:54 PM · On: Relentless

holy shiiiiit, this was super amazing.

i think, actually, this is one my favorites. You did Bella PERFECTLY.

you are wonderfullll <3



Author's Response:

Thanks for the review...a shit with 5 "i"s makes me smile.  And multiple "l"s on wonderful.  You spoil me ;) 

Reviewer: sweeta8585 (Signed) · Date: January 13, 2009 04:50 PM · On: Relentless

once again this chapter had me dropping everything and running into the computer room(rather than on my laptop)  so i could read this in silence.  My husband probably thinks I"m crazy but I really can't get enough of this story and this chapter does not dissapoint.  I love this story!  Definately the best out there!



Author's Response:

Thank you!  And I agree:  IVO has to be read in silence.  At times, it's too painful to read in public. 

Reviewer: curls (Signed) · Date: January 13, 2009 04:31 PM · On: Relentless

That was an amazing chapter. When Charlie ran up with his gun, that had me laughing out loud. When Edward confronted Bella, that nearly had me in tears. Excellent job.



Author's Response:

Thanks, curls!  I too enjoyed Charlie with the gun.  I really love writing him...he's such a typical, less-is-more Dad type.  Which I love.

Reviewer: Bkwrm (Signed) · Date: January 13, 2009 04:29 PM · On: Relentless

Yippee! Finally, Cadward has decided to be honest and lay it on the line. Still, he needs to suffer a little more. He's got to SHOW her as well as tell her.

I was half afraid "Relentless" meant that Jake was coming back to whine about how Mean Bella's being to him and declare that he wouldn't stop until she loves him again. Edward was right; even the human Jake held Bella back.

 



Author's Response:

First to review the chap, Bkwrm.  Well done.  And no Jake for a little while longer (at least not in the next chapter).  We need to focus on the E&B drama.  Jake already had his turn. 

Reviewer: sweeteternity8 (Signed) · Date: January 13, 2009 08:46 AM · On: Uninvited

Wonderful Chapter!

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