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Reviewer: psvtiger (Signed) · Date: March 16, 2009 02:30 PM · On: Hallowed
Once again, what a great chapter! I really didn't want to take the time to review when I knew a new chapter was just a click away...BUT...even though I know you probably don't read the reviews from past chapters, I just want to say how brilliant that was! I LOVED that Edward replaced the pumpkin! I would say more, but I really want to keep reading!!!!
Author's Response: I read all my reviews, regardless of which chapter they come from. Thanks so much for yours :)
Reviewer: psvtiger (Signed) · Date: March 16, 2009 02:01 PM · On: Pumpkins
I love the rambling mess! I just started reading this story, so forgive me for reviewing so late in the game. I absolutely loved this chapter! Very well-written! I must say, I completely identify with Bella here -- you had me laughing out loud at the dialogue between her and Edward! Bravo! Can't wait to keep reading!
Reviewer: sommer (Signed) · Date: March 16, 2009 08:15 AM · On: Acquaintances
I followed that_writr's recommendation and looked your writing up. I like it :-)
Reviewer: KrisLH (Signed) · Date: March 15, 2009 08:01 AM · On: Sparks
This is my first time actually submitting a review for your story, but I'm enjoying it so much, I just had to tell you. So many stories are all love, joy, and romance. It's nice, but boring. I love stories with angst, drama, and conflict. That is why I LOVE your story. You make things difficult, complicated and messy. That's how life is and that's what makes things interesting. As a reader, I completely appreciate every minute of this. I get the sense that some readers just want to get Jacob out of the way quickly to move to the "happily ever after" with Edward. I'm team Switzerland...I like them both. More importantly though, I feel that the soul of the story is in the fact that there is a conflict. That she has feelings (though different) for both men. Thank you for not just throwing Jake under a bus to get rid of the "conflict" quick and easy.
p.s. - I love the Notting Hill reference (one of my favorite movies), and the "Steak 'n' Shake" reference (my parents live in Quincy, IL, and Steak 'n' Shake is a favorite). I get you girl!
Reviewer: Dr Jones (Signed) · Date: March 14, 2009 01:36 PM · On: Relentless
Okay, so after this chapter you can't leave us hanging like this!!! It's been 3 WEEKS!!
Author's Response: I know, I'm a terrible person. It's coming though. And it's been way more than 3 weeks, so you're actually being too lenient on me ;)
Reviewer: belle11 (Signed) · Date: March 14, 2009 01:09 PM · On: Preface & Chapter 1: Sixteen
I can understand real life jobs getting in the way.. My life is my job too! :) Cant wait for the update... you are an amazing writer!
Reviewer: dazzled eyes (Signed) · Date: March 13, 2009 07:08 PM · On: Relentless
Oh my, what a confession! My heart tugged for him even though he strung her out to dry.
Author's Response: Thanks SO MUCH for all your reviews! I just love seeing people's opinions as they progress through the story. Reading yours in a row was interesting. Hope you continue to read future chapters (and yes, they are coming soon) and thanks again for taking the time to read and review my epic angst-fest. :)
Reviewer: dazzled eyes (Signed) · Date: March 13, 2009 06:28 PM · On: Uninvited
Both the Quileutes and The Cullens have hurt Bella and I can understand her lack of trust in either side. I just think Jake won't stay away. He seems obsessed with her and even more because she loves Edward.
Reviewer: dazzled eyes (Signed) · Date: March 13, 2009 05:52 PM · On: Fine
I can't believe this. Jake loses his control and attacks Bella. Wow! He is truly psychotic.
Reviewer: dazzled eyes (Signed) · Date: March 13, 2009 05:16 PM · On: Survival
How depressing...
Reviewer: dazzled eyes (Signed) · Date: March 13, 2009 04:03 PM · On: Over
It's a shame that she crucified Jake the same way that Edward destroyed her, but she was doing him a favor. No one deserves to be someone who is not love with you. I think you did a great job conveying the angst of her decision and its effect on Jake. Alice's new position in the story is effective too.
Reviewer: dazzled eyes (Signed) · Date: March 13, 2009 02:17 PM · On: Monster
Well, this chapter was filled with well written dialogue and was planned very well. I laughed and wanted to shake Edward several times along the way. The numbers thing was cool because it piqued my curiosity. I must say that I love Brave Bella maybe more than the humor of Drunk Bella seen earlier in the story.
Reviewer: dazzled eyes (Signed) · Date: March 13, 2009 01:14 PM · On: Truth
"I needed to see you."---wow!
Leah just breaks your heart. She aches down to her soul. I love Bella's courage here to face Sam and an angry Leah to get her answers. Awesome. Are we ever going to learn about Sam imprinting?
Reviewer: dazzled eyes (Signed) · Date: March 13, 2009 12:36 PM · On: Supernatural
I like the foundation that is established in this chapter. At least, Jake knows that everything isn't as fine as wine and Edward knows that she will not give up their friendship.
Reviewer: dazzled eyes (Signed) · Date: March 13, 2009 11:27 AM · On: Crushed
Billy was extreme, but believable. His actions made sense with Jacob's earlier statements to Bella about being selfish. Like father, like son. I was shocked that he grabbed Bella's arm which made me think that Jake may turn abusive when he finds out that the myths are true and Bella's true feelings about Edward. I realized with this chapter that I had read this chapter as my first experience with fan fiction but forgot the title. I am glad that I found it again and have been obsessed with reading it from chapter 1 to the most current over these past couple days. Great story.
Reviewer: dazzled eyes (Signed) · Date: March 13, 2009 09:36 AM · On: Sparks
I liked Renee's analogy. It really gets to the heart of the issue.
Reviewer: Bella Quinn (Signed) · Date: March 13, 2009 01:12 AM · On: Relentless
I cannot wait until you get the next chapter up. I've read so many stories, each just as intruging as the next (sorry if I spelt that wrong), but yours tops it.
Not once had anyone put Jake in that spot, not once did anyone allow him to hurt her like that.
I am have hoping that Edward kills him, and the rest the the pups run off.
Later!!
BQ
Reviewer: dazzled eyes (Signed) · Date: March 12, 2009 08:56 PM · On: Hallowed
Jake and Bella are showing the strain in this chapter. Great epiphany at the end.
Reviewer: sweetierosy (Signed) · Date: March 12, 2009 08:25 PM · On: Relentless
I love this story!!! Please post the next chapter soon. I need my fix!!
Reviewer: dazzled eyes (Signed) · Date: March 12, 2009 07:26 PM · On: Pumpkins
I loved Alice asking Bella about what attracted her to her boyfriend along with Jessica's observation about love and how they made Bella think about her relationship with Jake and what it may be missing. Eddie and Bella's day off shows that they are in such denial about their feelings. Their casual looks and touches are like liquid heat. Finish that off with the truth about Edward's relationship to Rosalie and the hits just keep coming. You did a great job with plotting, writing and characterization.
Reviewer: deathbyscreams (Signed) · Date: March 12, 2009 06:06 PM · On: Relentless
omg you need to update soooone!!!
please this story is amazing...
Reviewer: BlueChina (Signed) · Date: March 12, 2009 04:14 PM · On: Preface & Chapter 1: Sixteen
Just wanted to say how much I've enjoyed reading this story. You are a fantastic writer.
Reviewer: dazzled eyes (Signed) · Date: March 12, 2009 03:17 PM · On: Friends
Bella is really kidding herself about the feelings that she has for Edward. The chapter was great in getting to her head about him. I just wished we could hear more about his thoughts too. Jessica's fall description was horrific. Miss Jealousy really reared its ugly head at the end. Nice misunderstanding!
Reviewer: dazzled eyes (Signed) · Date: March 12, 2009 02:21 PM · On: Acquaintances
Emmett and Jazz teasing Edward into coming into Newton's was very funny. Great chapter!
Reviewer: dazzled eyes (Signed) · Date: March 12, 2009 01:36 PM · On: Half Truths
Great writing...
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