I'm new to this site so I'm not sure when this was published or if you are going to continue it but I wanted to applaud you.  Yes it is disturbing.  It is also very well written and very original and brave of you to write.  I for one would continue to read if you continued the story.

Author's Response:

thank you so much - it's a relatively new story.  chapter 2 is awaiting validation, it should be posted in the next day or two i hope.  thank you for your kind review, I hope you continue to enjoy the story -

thanks again!

Wow. Very intense stuff here. I've read it a couple of times and it's truly haunted me. I'd like to see further exploration of the storyline to see how it plays out. You have such a great style. I hope you'll continue.

Author's Response:

chapter 2 is awaiting validation...  i hope you continue to to follow along.  :)

I'm not one for swearing, really I'm not, but Holy Shit! That was some...intro. Don't get me wrong though. The writing was magnificent and I can totally see Aro doing something like this. I agree with alot of your review replies, that SM didn't fully explore the evil that was the Volturi.

I have faith that you will make this better, that something good will become of this.

I'm speachless and slightly shaken, but also very riveted to the story. Very well done. Very, very good...

 

Author's Response:

Yay!  Holy Shit is a perfect response to this!

chapter 2 is awaiting validation...  hopefully it will keep everyone as engaged as the 1st chapter....  thanks for the stars!  :)

Oh my gosh, this is so good, even though its so dark...please continue!

Author's Response:

thanks so much!  i'm working on it....  :)

Hi, SP,

 

What an intriguing surprise... You know, my reviews tend to be lengthy, so I posted it on the old forum thread. If you do not have time, just skip over my remarks on MOM Ch. 3.

Cordially, E.

Author's Response:

i'm realy protective of this one - i've kind of overextended myself with 3 stories open at once...  i'm going back and forth as i write, i;ll hear snippets of a conversation for MOM, write it, and then instantly be drawn to finish a conversation or scene tin SY...  i'm trying to wrap up  those two...  this one os so intense it isn't playing nce with the others and won't share me when i try to work on it, it demands my undivided attention and i haven't had much of that to spare.   :)  i have read your comments on the board, but am so focused on wrap ups that i haven't had the brain energy to look over your most recent comments for MOM yet....  SORRY!  I will get to them, hopefully this weekend -

 

all best,     -SP

 Wow! This is a really interesting twist on New Moon!

 It is always threatened in the books that the Volturi have done and could do such dark and terrible things, but you never SEE it. This fanfic gives us an insight into their disturbed workings.

  Edward and Bella's scene on the bed was particularly disturbing but well done, with a good build up of tension. It's heartbreaking when she says to Edward:

' “I hate him!  He made you rape me!”  She choked on the words.  Tears were pouring from her eyes in rivers, her shoulders heaving with her sobs.'

  The slapping didnt seem OTT either, although im debating whether (using NM as source material) she would get angry and slap him like you have portrayed or become really quiet and 'zombie-like'.

 I love the idea that there is twins! I always thought Edward and Bella should have had a boy, and even though he's going to be taken to Volterra they will fight for him wont they?!

  Can't wait for the next bit.

Author's Response:

thanks so much - i know a lot of readers have the most trouble with the bed scene, i appreciate your kind analysis.  i tried to make bella sort of 'fake strong' like, c'mon, we can do this, lets just get it over with, take one for the team or whatever, but there's obviously no way a woman could really go through this without some major fallout.  if E hadn's been there, i think she would definitely have gone into a catatonic coping state.  but he's there, and keeping her mind present, talking to her, touching her, and she can't bury the rage because he's right in her face and she lashes out at whatever is nearest, which happens to be E, although she'd rather it were Aro she could hit.   i personally think she'll heal faster having expressed her rage, rather than collapsing in on herself.

I think if Sam had found her in the woods sooner, before she entered zombie land in NM, she woul dhave done the same to him, just for being there.  IMHO

 

thanks again for the review!

I know you've got some flack for this story, but I liked it very much.  This IS what Aro would do.  Edward should have never put himself or Bella under the Volturi's radar.  The only thing that disturbed me was the twin's, but I'm sure you'll resolve that when you continue :)

Author's Response:

thaks so much - I never once bought the benevolent peacekeeprs bit in the books from teh first time SM mentioned the word VOLTURI - too much like 'vulture' for me. I should google an italian to english translation...

Yeah, the twins....  this is my own little alternate universe, after all.  ~wink~

I really don't know what to say. This was incredibly distrubing, but amazing.

Author's Response:

thank you for taking the time to review - i understand your reaction.

Dark undercurrents, deeply emotive, with a stark glimpse at the depravity that usually gets glossed over by others. Still outshines the light-hearted fluffballs litering the AU category and something to be proud of. I wouldn't give up entirely (there are other well-done pieces that tack on Bella being forced into Aro's service as a subplot), but your vision is unique and a shame to deny others. Graphic and mature, possibly disturbing, yes, but still tastefully done. I applaud your courage.

Author's Response:

thank you.  my interest in writing Twi Fic has always been exploring BxE's relationship, especially darker aspects of it that SM never touched.  i hope i can do this one justice.

Its really interesting. It would be great to see where everything ends. Its really good idea.

Author's Response:

thanks - be patient with me, and stay tuned.

Awful story plot EXCELENT story telling and a tale worth of continuing. Great work really.

Author's Response:

thanks - i appreciate your distinction between the horrible subject matter and my ability to tell a story.  THank you!

Wow.  Part of me was hesitant to read this but it was so well-written and I honestly can't wait to see where it goes from here.  Though, I'm quite glad I do not have your nightmares.

Author's Response:

thank you for the kind complement.  Yes - that was a rough night for dreaming.

Very sick and twisted to be sure but also a very interesting story, I do want to see what happens next, please continue the story.

Author's Response:

thanks - i think the overwhelming response so far has been for me to continue.  :)