"My jakey" - cara. Oh dear god... please x3, don't take this path. He belongs w/ leah end of story.

This story reads like an abridged version of a better one. There is sooo much left to squeeze out here.

How did the allies feel about janes presence?, How is jane relationship w/ the family now?, What are the future plans for the next move? How does jane feel about charlie getting so close to the truth?, Should masen just 'make' charlie feel that his just need to know is the best he will or should get to the truth?, Does jane secretly mourn alec?. Does she get sympathy points for her lost? Does bella ever befriend her and if so on what bases?. Leah and jane are getting alone on the fringe of things so are they going to keep in contact w/ one another???

I mean, there is soooooooooo much left unanswered. You could write a book  to fill all of this in.  I think you story is about 30k words too short of where it should've been.

Still makes no sense. I don't see the need for jacob to be their, That weak line about edward assuming he would crush her chest w/ compressions was just that, weak!. We all know he woulda done fine. It seems to me your keeping JB around for the imprinting route [The one I always hated. that was always so sicckkkk to me] Other than that, he really doesn't need to be so involved in the everyday affairs. Every 3 days fine, but he is there EVERRRRYYY DAY. good grief. To make matters worst. He is not the best smelling house guest.

Again, not making any sense.... I would understand Edward's new acceptance of all this closeness between Bella and Jake, if Jake's mind once resembled seths, or that he wasn't so persistent about a relationship w/ bella. But I would never allow this if I was Edward, knowning what Jake thought about at one point & time. I would never allow him to be so involved or invited into their home and most intimate sanctuary no matter what the reason. Wtf is in your head when you are writing this?. And now he's gonna take a bath in his house in their personal shower? The F outta here. There is no quick turn around like that when it comes to dealing w/ vampire mates. He was a threat to their relationship at one point!!!. There should be limits to how involved he remains in their lives. All this trash about being in their room, with her head on his lap, is utter foolishness. Then you top it off w/ blanket acceptance [wtf]. when edward walked in finding bella head in jakes lap, in their bed,  you mean to tell me that wasn't even a little upsetting for him??? That his bride, pregnant w/ his baby, has found comfort in the crouch of another man, and spurned suitor of all things, wasn't even slightly upsetting???. [and he was not even on the egdes of the bed either, he was flush against the headboard, feet kicked up smelling like wet dog]. Come on, I know this is Fiction but good grief, your character actions arent making sense.

P.S. this is not about my own personal feeling towards jb/bella relationship. I also know that edward feels more secure in his relationship w/ bella. But as man given what that three way triangle was between the Edward,bella, and JB; If i were edward I would not appreciate what I walked into. I also wouldn't have made the initial decision for him to be a comforter for her. He would still be outside, not smelling up the joint.

U make NO sense!.

I don't get it.... I know you have a story to tell. But from a strategic standpoint, the volturi are idiots. They sent Jane and Alec to the cullens. If this is going to end in a battle anyway, why doesn't  carlise order thier execution to give his allies a better chance?. Catch them by surprise. Im sure jasper can come up w/ a plan and alice can confirm it. Without Jane or Alec on the battlefield, all that is left is mostly fighter and #'s.  Fights over!.

Alec is an eternal child, with his constant taunts and bravado. I always pictureed him as the more rational of the two. I see you decided to take some liberties and flip this, making jane the sane one.

At least jake is trying to be a friend... But all that closeness is still sending mixed signals to me. I don't like it. Seems to me that JB is still trying to 'cop a feel' at every given opportunity.

Bella u dumb whore. You know he has feelings, stop sitting on his lap for hours on end.

And...the battle begins.

"I get that you love him, Bells, and I believe he loves you. Truly, I get that. I don't like it, and I'd fight him to the death if I thought you could love me as much as you love him, but jeez, Bella. I - I mean, why not just go, why do this to me? You could have just left and been done with it, and here you are, what? Trying to have it both ways?" -Jacob

This bitch is emotionally greedy!.

"Jake, you're family. You're probably the only person that truly understands the choice I'm making. You're the only link to Charlie I'll have after I'm changed. You're... my brother, Jake. I love you. I want you in my life, if you can handle all this. That's all."

 

"Ooooh. I get it now. Yeah - I should have seen that coming. The 'love you like a brother' bit. I forgot, you've said that before, more or less. 'Jake, you're family to me'... Just not quite the kind of family I had in mind for us, Bella."

 

"I'm so sorry, Jacob. Truly. I mean, if I'd never met him..." [What the F was she thinking giving him a 'what if' scenerio.]

 

"No, Bella! You do not get to do that if you expect me to ever be able to sit in the same room with him again. Just back that shit up, 'cause I don't need to hear it. If it's over for me, just let it be over. Don't drop a bomb like marriage on me and then do this half-assed shit where you get to make yourself feel all better and I'm left with a fucking broken heart, hating you both. It's already bad enough with all my own 'what might have been' bullshit, without hearing it from you, too. You can take that to your grave with you, I don't want to hear it. Well, grave, coffin, whatever it is you all have."

 Perfect... Idk a better way to have said it. Except maybe, "you can't have us both in your life, you have made your choice; Now LET ME GO!".

Wait... even thou she may have lost this child, wouldn't aro still want her first-born?. To him a deal is a deal, right?. I highly doubt they are going to get away on a technicality.

Gr8 Writitng for this chapter. It seriously looks like bella has to be the man n woman of this relationship. All edward knows how to do is retreat from anything troubling. Either he retreats in distance or retreats within himself, either way he pushes her away. She deserves better. Aro was right about one thing... Edward Cullen, is a coward.

 a poignant,  wonderful story of pain, love, friendship and how a group could stand together and succeed for justice and love and use of free will. The twin was great, love both their powers.  Edward and Bella grew up a lot during the story and it was nice to see Leah and Jane protrayed in a more favourable way.

Loved, loved, loved it!  And the added surprise of Edward hearing Bella!  And Jake being so wonderful.  Ah, I love warm fuzzies!

ugh..

 I have been reading this story for awhile andamsoglad to seein completed  I was afraid you had not completed it but you have and it was wonderful thanks for the read.