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Reviewer: silvaneous (Signed) · Date: May 14, 2013 02:06 PM · On: Chapter 15: All I Want for Christmas is You (vjgm)

are you going to finish the story?

Reviewer: Bigh98 (Signed) · Date: April 23, 2012 05:15 PM · On: Chapter 15: All I Want for Christmas is You (vjgm)

Is this the end?!?!?

Reviewer: kayariley (Signed) · Date: August 23, 2011 05:20 PM · On: Chapter 15: All I Want for Christmas is You (vjgm)

i just found this story and read it straight through. i am really hoping you have more written! i would really like to see how this all turns out.

Reviewer: Stellarrose (Signed) · Date: April 08, 2011 09:54 PM · On: Chapter 15: All I Want for Christmas is You (vjgm)

Wow!  I was afraid you'd quit writing.  SO glad to see this new chapter!  Will there be more soon?

Reviewer: revliesel (Signed) · Date: January 11, 2011 12:09 PM · On: Chapter 15: All I Want for Christmas is You (vjgm)

I hope this story hasn't been abandoned.  I'm really looking forward to the next chapters although I see it's been almost a year since the last update.

Reviewer: sconnolly318 (Signed) · Date: June 28, 2010 01:02 PM · On: Chapter 15: All I Want for Christmas is You (vjgm)

Sorry I'm late in reading...

 

Awesome, as always!!

Reviewer: cilou6 (Signed) · Date: May 28, 2010 02:47 PM · On: Prologue

I want jailward back !

I want jailward back !

I want jailward back !

I want jailward back !

I want jailward back !

I want jailward back !

I want jailward back !

I want jailward back ! I want jailward back ! I want jailward back !

*hopes she made her point clear!*

:)

 

please?

Cécile

Reviewer: LetMISAlive (Signed) · Date: April 22, 2010 02:57 AM · On: Chapter 15: All I Want for Christmas is You (vjgm)

Hi Amy,


You caught me on a quiet day.  I’m all caught up!  Just wanted to let you know.


You write well and I’m enjoying following your story.  I especially like the little moments that are disarming/sweet; touching or make me chuckle  ;)


I’ll look out for your next update!


Nix

Reviewer: cilou6 (Signed) · Date: April 19, 2010 01:36 PM · On: Chapter 15: All I Want for Christmas is You (vjgm)

THAT was a christmas!!

*grins widely* :)

So, when will the next chapter come?
You should aks Jen (pbswimmer), I'm not the most patient person on earth!

So please update soon!

*tap*

Cécile

Reviewer: cilou6 (Signed) · Date: April 19, 2010 01:07 PM · On: Chapter 14: Home for the Holidays (vjgm)

I gasp too!
Super!
*runs to read the next chapter*

:)

Oh! And by the way, I agree Mimiteh rocks! And this fic won the 'best use of a parent' award. So if anyone had any doubt, just try it! You'll love it!

:)

Reviewer: cilou6 (Signed) · Date: April 19, 2010 12:47 PM · On: Chapter 13: Gone Fishing (VJGM)

Wow! How nice!
We got insightful details on Charlie's youth and he and Ed have much more in commun that I'd have expected!
Introducing Carlisle, and the medical project during this fishing trip was great!
I'm happy Ed had a men's quality time, with Emmet, Charlie and Carlisle. Must be disturbing having people trusting him after such a desperating childhood and youth!
You leave me smiling here, and I'd like to thank you for that!

Reading is a hobby in which I dearch strong feelings and having a positive one is frat!!

:)

Reviewer: cilou6 (Signed) · Date: April 19, 2010 10:18 AM · On: Chapter 12 - Birthdays and Other Surprises

I'm glad finally Jazz had the gut to ask Alice out.
And what a cute moment Bella jumping at her boyfriend!

See, I told you Charlie was the good ellow :)

Nice chapter, we can feel the characters' angst/joy!

Reviewer: cilou6 (Signed) · Date: April 19, 2010 04:54 AM · On: Chapter 11: The Chief

I love Chief Swan
Everything seems just fair enough!
:)

Reviewer: cilou6 (Signed) · Date: April 19, 2010 04:37 AM · On: Chapter 10 - Sins of the Father

I agree with Charlie for grounding Bella (she lyed to him and all...) And "yeahhh" to Bella's defense on Edward! None should be judged on the behalf of his parents!
:)

Reviewer: cilou6 (Signed) · Date: April 18, 2010 09:08 AM · On: Chapter 9 - Farewells and Complications (vjgm)

*gasp!*

;)

Reviewer: cilou6 (Signed) · Date: April 18, 2010 07:55 AM · On: Chapter 8 - Get a Room

Officer Pattinson!! LOL!

Wow who would have thought Rosalie would let Bella drive her BMW ?!?

No comment on the private scene *Awwe!*

:)

Let them have some privacy again! *please!*

Reviewer: cilou6 (Signed) · Date: April 18, 2010 07:09 AM · On: Chapter 7: Violation

Tough chapter!
Poor poor poor Edward. I just can't imagine what he's been through!!
Emmet is the good guy, and allowing him and Bella some privacy...so gentle.
I hope Ed will use this private time to tell Bella what's wrong!!
*how did she came here? Did she ditch school?*

very well writed chapter
Thank you!

Reviewer: cilou6 (Signed) · Date: April 18, 2010 05:55 AM · On: Chapter 3 - Friends

So the attorney is named Michael...will the prison doctor be named Sara?
:)
Sorry, just refering to another addiction of mine, and the prison ambiance just sent me back there!
:)
What a lovely chapter! I love it Jasper is in!
And Bella's letter, her scent, everything feels so right here! Bravo!
*runs to read next chapter*
Cécile

Reviewer: cilou6 (Signed) · Date: April 18, 2010 05:54 AM · On: Chapter 5: Love at First Touch

Sweety sweet chapter!
A hug!
Perhaps Bella could bring him some food too?
*sigh*
:)

Reviewer: cilou6 (Signed) · Date: April 18, 2010 04:42 AM · On: Chapter 4 - Through the Looking Glass

Wow!
*speechless*
They are so kind to each other. Ed must really have had a red curtain of ire falling in front of his eyes when he killed Bella's attackers. Such a lovely boy becoming a violent killing machine? Incredible...are you sure he's really guilty?

Reviewer: cilou6 (Signed) · Date: April 18, 2010 03:30 AM · On: Chapter 2: Setbacks (v)

Argh! Parent's signature required...hopefully Charlie would be happy to help his daughter visit the boy who saved her vertue and life!
*crosses fingers*
:)

Reviewer: cilou6 (Signed) · Date: April 18, 2010 01:50 AM · On: Chapter 1 - Orientation (V)

I love how yopu placed your story in the Twilight storyline. With the awkward first glance and the bio lab...
Well done so far!
:)
Cécile

Reviewer: cilou6 (Signed) · Date: April 18, 2010 01:22 AM · On: Prologue

Well well well
Nice debut!
:)

Reviewer: LetMISAlive (Signed) · Date: April 17, 2010 09:52 AM · On: Chapter 8 - Get a Room

<< I came close to telling him that I loved him, but held back. …I really wanted to tell him in person. You only get one chance to profess your love for the first time… >>

 

*warm fuzzie*  That’s true… and if she told him on the phone, he may always wonder whether she said it in order to comfort him, as opposed to meaning it fully.

 

<< I wondered how on earth little Alice Cullen could possibly help me find out what happened to Edward… >>

 

Cullen!  Of course!

hee hee, Alice has her… means… of knowing things that she hasn’t witnessed!  ;)

 

<< Rose. Maybe Jasper had called her today and mentioned something? >>

 

Her friendship with Rose and Alice – it’s providence!  It arrived ust when she needs them the most.

<< Just tell him you are having female problems. Throw in words like bloating, cramping, and heavy flow. Your dad will likely run away screaming >>

 

hee hee.  And it worked!  The Swan family have a weakness when it comes to blood…

 

<< Emmett... “The world needs big guys too.” >>

 

*is fond of big, kind Emmett*  :)

<<”I have received permission for you and Edward to have one hour in this room.” >>

An hour behind closed doors: an incarcerated teenage boy and his girlfriend!  :O

 

<< Emmett … said if my dad found out he had allowed a private visitation, he would be in as much trouble as me. >>

 

I’D SAY!!!!!  ;)

 

<< …Don’t forget that it was violence that got him put in here.” >>

That’s true.  People around him don’t get to see Edward’s “POV”; don’t know for certain what he’s like inside.  (Well, not straight away).  Nice that Emmett’s looking out for Bella too.

 

<< He looked broken yet beautiful >>

 

I liked this  :) 

*not in a sadistic I-like-him-to-be-broken way. I liked your words*  :)

 

<< Edward flinched, seeming to realize something. “Wait a minute. Bella, you’re supposed to be in school. You’re gonna get in trouble!” >>

 

His concern for her… :)  So many people are self absorbed.

<< I thought of you and what you went through… Bella. …It was the same feeling I had that night in Port Angeles. … “I can’t bear to see people assaulted that way, Bella. It just brings out the worst in me… >>

Oh wow!  *suddenly understands Edward’s actions in Port Angeles better* 

<<  He smiled gratefully, like he had just received a beautiful gift, and his eyes welled up with tears.   …“I love you too, Bella.” >>

 

Those two are very sweet!

<< I could feel his arousal through his thin jumpsuit…  …He adjusted himself and looked at me, blushing. “Sorry about that. I can’t really control it.” >>

 

Eek!  At least he didn’t jump her!  Not exactly intentional.

<< “I’ll carry the memories of this moment forever, Bella. Just knowing you love me, being able to see your face, holding your hand—that will carry me through the next three years. And then I’ll be able to court you properly and smother you daily with kisses.” 

“I can’t wait for that day, Edward.” >>

 

Quite a presumption!  That she’ll wait for him all those years! 

Okay, that’s just ME coming out; she told him that she loves him.  (And he can believe that with such certainty that he verbalises future plans? this unlovable monster of man?  There’s no way that she just feels grateful to him for saving her life; that she’s being kind to him because of his crying on the phone…?  *ME again* ;)  I suppose she said it first.

  

I’m so glad for them that they’re on the same page.  Edward needs something to hold onto – some hope for the future  :)

 

Thanks Amy!

Reviewer: LetMISAlive (Signed) · Date: April 16, 2010 02:54 AM · On: Chapter 7: Violation

Wow.  What an intense chapter!  So powerful and terrifying (and wonderful) at the same time!    

 

*glad she’d decided to be ‘concise’ this time*

 

I’m so glad *for Demitri* that Edward was there; that Edward stepped in – just in time.

 

<< A part of you dies when you are violated like that, and you can never get it back. I didn’t want him to become empty . . . like me.” >>

*speechless*

 

He was honest with them.  He didn’t need to expose his soul like that, but he did!  I suppose that part of him wants to stop keeping it in; the inward festering.


<< Emmett… “I’m here if you want to talk. And this is about as private of a conversation as you will ever get here.”  >>

 

I love this guy!

<<  I didn’t answer. I just hid my face and cried for my lost childhood. >>

 

*heart wrenching*

<<  “I, for one, am glad you were born, Edward. And I’m betting Isabella Swan feels the same way.” >>

 

I think that that’s the nicest thing anyone can ever say to another person.  (I try to say that to people I love on their birthdays :)

<< Emmett:  I was adopted and for the first time I knew what it was like to be loved?to be part of a family.” >>

 

I’m so glad for Emmett got to experience the love and safety of belonging to a family.   Maybe that’s (part of) why he’s able to love/care for kids like Edward! 

(It’s particularly special when you’re “chosen” as a 13 year old – they chose YOU, not just some baby who ended up being YOU!  ;) 

I now also have a soft spot for Carlisle (and Esme).  :)


<<  “I figure I’ve already broken all the inmate/officer rules anyway …I’m Emmett . . . Emmett Cullen.” >>

Aw, I love that he cares… is making a connection.


<< Emmett… I’m pretty sure that Bella loves you too.”
For the first time in a long while, I smiled. >>

 

:)

<<  …I couldn’t bear the thought of telling Bella. Would she even want to touch me after what those boys did to me? I was damaged goods. >>

 

It’s terrifying to tell some one your deepest, darkest secrets – to make yourself so incredibly vulnerable to them!  But I’m guessing he can put his faith/trust in his Bella.

<< my problems caused Emmett to miss lunch >>

 

Emmett – such a caring guy!


<< I’m hoping I can sweet talk the ladies in the cafeteria to feed us something before supper.” >>

 

Aw, how nice of him to keep Edward under his wing for a while longer.

<< James... He thinks Jasper is the one who ratted on him, so hopefully he won’t come after you when he gets out.”  Luckily Jasper would be home free long before James would return to the general population.  >>

 

Whew!  *with just a hint of suspicion/wariness*  I was worried about where you were taking this!  I don’t see James taking to him too kindly when he gets out in a month, though…  Hopefully he’ll have a little respect for Edward for fighting him… that the worst he will do is threaten / try beat him up again.  (Look out for Edward, Emmett!!) ...*but Emmett can't be everywhere at once!* :s

<< He did warn me if I tried to pull a stunt like that again, I could lose my visitation privileges with Bella. That was all I needed to know. Next time I would get an officer. >>

Thank goodness!  Close call!  It sounds like Emmett pulled a few strings! 

(Hopefully there isn’t a next time… he didn’t exactly have time to call an officer!)


<< Demetri…  seemed to be doing pretty well, considering. I breathed a sigh of relief at the news. >>

I love how Edward cares about others too  :)


<< Explaining that he had broken the rules by telling me his first name, Emmett insisted that I continue to call him Officer Cullen. He also was adamant that I consider speaking to the prison psychologist. He explained that he saw a psychologist as a teenager and it really helped him with his abandonment issues. … “Dr. Jen >>

 

LOL.  (Ruunnn!!)

 

Counselling a group of incarcerated teenage boys? – they’re all going to fall in love with her!  :o

 

<< as unsure if I really wanted to dig deeper into the memories I’d fought so hard to repress >>

 

I feel you, Edward!  But I think you're gonna have to, in the hands of this Amy and her mind-shrinking beta!  *ruffles his hair in an effort to comfort him*

 

<<  Edward, … don’t you fucking tell anybody, Jasper. Do you hear me?  Not your sister, not Alice, and definitely not Bella.” >>
<<  Your secret is safe with me. And, just so you know, I think it really sucks that you went through that.” >>

 

Jasper’s a good friend.  :)

<< I needed Bella. I longed to touch her; to hold her. …I just wanted to talk to her, about anything or nothing at all. I felt that if I could just hear her voice, it would somehow make everything better. >>

 

Aw, hence the phone call! 

I’m glad he’s got this little shining light in his life; something to hold onto; something to look forward to when he gets out!

<< I eventually choked out that I would never be okay, and then continued to cry into her ear. She whispered words of encouragement to me, promising that she couldn’t wait to see me on Saturday. I barely spoke ten words during the entire exchange, but I did manage to thank her for everything before I hung up. >>

 

So THAT’S how the phone call went down!  I’m glad she didn’t hound him with questions; knew that she should just be there for him.  :(

<< Bella… Her eyes looked puffy. Had she been crying too? >>

 

She loves you Edward!  When you’re in pain, she’s in pain!

<< Officer Cullen…  “Edward, this is a situation that will likely never be repeated. I’ll be standing right out here. You have one hour. I expect you to behave like a gentleman.” >>
<< He shut the door and for the first time ever, I was alone with Bella Swan. >>

 

Aw, what a lovely ending!  (beginning!)

 

<< I promise he will not be sexually assualted ever again. >>

 

Whew!  Thank freaking goodness!

(That was “the worst” I’d thought of… and your chapter title didn’t help!  *dirty look* ;)

 

(Okay, even more concise next time  ;)

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