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Reviewer: maryalice (Signed) · Date: January 31, 2009 09:07 AM · On: prologue
I am new to Twilght fanfiction and although I've fallen in love with many of the stories on this site, I actually registered just so I could comment on yours. I think your writing is brilliant; it's captivating and has excellent flow. I absolutly adore your characters as well; I really like how you write both Bella and Edward (and the supporting cast). I find that too often Bella is written as a passive, docile and weak woman incapable of surviving without Edward's (skewed) love. However, you portray Bella as a complex character with plenty of fiest and sass, which makes her inherently more realistic (and likeable). You've also done an amazing job with Edward's character; I realize he's human in this story but you do him justice because he talks and reacts like a typical boy who is afraid to expose his vulnerability (and feelings) to the girl who he's been infactuated with for eons. I'll admit that I usually wait for a story to be finished before I read it (I'm very impatient and like to have the while story ASAP) but I made an exception for this...and you've got me on tenderhooks until the next chapter is posted! I imagine that you've plotted this thing out and I don't want to sound pretensious but I hope that Bella doesn't just give into Edward. He's put her through her own personal hell, so I hope she raises a little hell of her own!
Author's Response: You know the best thing? It's getting someone to de-lurk... You know what's even better? If they de-lurk especially for you, And what really makes my day is a long reviewwwwww. Agh. Love it. Thanks for your insight on the characters, I like it :)
Reviewer: jen79 (Signed) · Date: January 31, 2009 12:48 AM · On: Chapter 5
Bravo! I am loving these two.
Reviewer: jen79 (Signed) · Date: January 31, 2009 12:08 AM · On: Chapter 4
Great chapter! I really feel her pain. I mean, you made my heart hurt.
Reviewer: broken_fate (Signed) · Date: January 30, 2009 10:56 PM · On: Chapter 2
Total rollercoaster ride on that one. First, I think I laughed for five minutes straight..and continue to giggle moments after just thinking about this line: “Did you manage to spy Rudolph’s nose with Rosalie’s little eye?” And Jasper and his cigar and then falling asleep at the table. So funny. Gah, then the whole dinner/choclate angst. You are brilliant.
Author's Response: haha no im not.. but thanks for reading ;)
Reviewer: alaskangirl (Signed) · Date: January 30, 2009 10:11 PM · On: Chapter 5
ooh loving this. i cant wait for the next update. adding to my favs!!
Reviewer: icrodriguez (Signed) · Date: January 30, 2009 09:49 PM · On: Chapter 5
"It’s the fricking car version of the Mary Poppins's bag." - Sorry, but that had me roaring in laughter!!!!
Reviewer: WndrngY (Signed) · Date: January 30, 2009 09:26 PM · On: Chapter 5
Still loving this story. I read this chap over on ff, but I re-read when I got the alert here. Edward is making me want to throttle him and not in the good way. What is his damage? Can't wait to find out!
Reviewer: robbsweetangel (Signed) · Date: January 30, 2009 08:09 PM · On: Chapter 5
More more more this is really getting good damn its about time.
Reviewer: historicvampirelover (Signed) · Date: January 30, 2009 06:55 PM · On: Chapter 5
Oh my goodness. I was muttering throughout this entire story: Here's a brief play by play - Enough Bella! Go Rosalie! Oh Edward. HAHA to the Vanquish. No, yes, no , yes, no and finally one very big YAY.
So howsa bout these two crazy kids get over themselves and their history, and ditch Tanya. I love this story so much :)
Author's Response: haha. i like that play by play ;)
Reviewer: Siamecho (Signed) · Date: January 30, 2009 06:50 PM · On: Chapter 5
Thanks for the update. Edward is (in all universes) still screwed in the head. I just want to beat him over the head with a loaf of bread! (can't use anything hard-might hurt that gorgeous bed head)
Author's Response: so true.....
Reviewer: Drea (Signed) · Date: January 30, 2009 04:11 AM · On: prologue
This story is great. Bella's internal monoluge are hilarious. Keep it coming!
Reviewer: Siamecho (Signed) · Date: January 29, 2009 06:52 PM · On: Chapter 4
Wow. Complete asshole Edward. Where's a nice Jacob?
Reviewer: newtothis (Signed) · Date: January 29, 2009 05:12 PM · On: Chapter 4
whoa... bella needs to get more off her chest. she clearly has tons of unresolved issues.
amy
Reviewer: historicvampirelover (Signed) · Date: January 29, 2009 01:55 PM · On: Chapter 4
Oh boy. Am i right to assume that to keep Tanya happy Edward has to be a dick to Bella because Tanya is jealous? Dude needs to take a reality pill and just get over himself and with Bella.
sheesh.
Reviewer: lovelikethemovies (Signed) · Date: January 29, 2009 10:25 AM · On: Chapter 4
Oh, god. Your Edward is such a dickwad, but lord help me, I love reading about how he tortures Bella with his ignorance. I was so listening to Boys of Summer by Ataris while reading this.
Reviewer: seattlegirl (Signed) · Date: January 29, 2009 09:27 AM · On: Chapter 4
Hey, just found this story. Interesting premise. I am a little confused by some of the details though. Edward is at UCLA and Bella at USC, right? Where do Alice and Jasper go to school? I got the feelings that Alice and Bella don't see each other much, but then Bella says Jasper is her supplier. Is the cottage in Washington?
I look forward to the next chapter. Oh - last question. Did Edward say Bella's name while having sex with Tanya? Is that why she is mad?
Author's Response: Ah, I guess I forgot to post this here. Initially it was for my head, but then I posted it at FF.net. So, Emmett is 23, Rosalie, Alice, Jasper are 21, Edward amd Bella are 20 and 19. Alice is at USC studying Graphic design and Fashion, Bella is at USC studying International journalism and creative communications, Jasper is at USC doing law and philosophy, Edward is a pre-med student at UCLA.
Emmett, Alice and Edward are siblings. Emmett and Rosalie are married and live in Seattle. Jasper and Alice have been dating for two years.
As for why Alice and Bella dont see each other much is because Alice is one year ahead of Bella. The cottage (in my head) is around 40 minutes out of Forks (no one else knows this...but since you asked...). As for the Ed/ Tanya situation - explanations soon...
Thanks for reading!
Reviewer: robbsweetangel (Signed) · Date: January 29, 2009 07:00 AM · On: Chapter 4
I really think they need to talk already. and someone needs to hit Edward with a mack truck LOL. Edward please swallow your pride and tell Bella that your in love with her. Great chapter I can't wait for the next update.
Reviewer: MrsRobertPattinson (Signed) · Date: January 29, 2009 05:16 AM · On: Chapter 4
Gah. Boys still irritate me.
Reviewer: EmilyCullen (Signed) · Date: January 28, 2009 09:36 AM · On: Chapter 3
So I'm guessing he called out Bella's name when he and Tanya were......together? That would be hilarious. I like this. Keep it coming. :)
Reviewer: historicvampirelover (Signed) · Date: January 28, 2009 09:06 AM · On: Chapter 3
Hmmm. Stubborn, very stubborn - the both of them.
Tantalizing, you are. I love it :)
Author's Response: tantalizing: I like that word.
Reviewer: lovelikethemovies (Signed) · Date: January 28, 2009 09:02 AM · On: Chapter 3
Uh. Edward should be hit over the head with a heavy log.
Reviewer: hpandtwilight (Signed) · Date: January 28, 2009 07:21 AM · On: Chapter 3
ugh,
edwards such a bitch.
lol
update soon =)
Reviewer: robbsweetangel (Signed) · Date: January 28, 2009 05:48 AM · On: Chapter 3
excellent. great story. you keep me in suspense. I just wish Edward would get it together. I think he said Bella's name when him and Tanya were in the bedroom. Just dump Tanya already lol I can't wait for updates
Author's Response: aw thankies.
Reviewer: keepingupwiththekids (Signed) · Date: January 28, 2009 02:29 AM · On: Chapter 3
Oh - this is wonderful! I cannot wait for more!
Reviewer: MrsRobertPattinson (Signed) · Date: January 27, 2009 08:49 PM · On: Chapter 3
Prick! Gah! Boys are impossible!
Author's Response: Tell me about it...
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