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Reviewer: katmom (Signed) · Date: May 11, 2009 10:50 AM · On: Chapter 36: Newborn

Ah...pink spandex....You may have just ruined Jasper for me...LOL!

Kathie



Author's Response:

I snorted at your comment.  Thanks for making me smile.

Reviewer: xparawhorextwerdx (Signed) · Date: May 11, 2009 10:46 AM · On: Chapter 36: Newborn

BAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!!!! Classic, just classic! SEQUEL, SEQUEL, SEQUEL, SEQUEL! Can you tell I want one bad???

Reviewer: liltennisfreak56 (Signed) · Date: May 10, 2009 06:21 PM · On: Chapter 2: New Arrival at Forks High

ok so i just wanted to comment back to you from your other comment. and i just wanted to say that the first chapter edward was creepy but i still love your story. :) thank you so much. i didnt mean to sound attacking or anything. haha and you are a really good writer!

Author's Response:

Thanks.  Hopefully he will seem less creepy to you as the story progresses.  Thanks for reading.

Reviewer: mountaintop (Signed) · Date: May 08, 2009 09:12 PM · On: Chapter 1: Glimpses

I love your Edward



Author's Response:

Thanks, mountaintop.  I'm glad.  Some people are creeped out by him.  I'm glad you aren't one of them.  Thanks for reading.

Reviewer: plinky108 (Signed) · Date: May 08, 2009 02:34 PM · On: Chapter 35: Changes

i refuse to let you be done with this story please say you have more i want to hear the comments from emmett after hearing that please post just one more chapter please please please

                                                 your anxious fan

                                                                         jj

Reviewer: plinky108 (Signed) · Date: May 08, 2009 02:11 PM · On: Chapter 34: Seattle

sequel 

sequel

sequel i must have sequel

 your now on edge #1 fan

                                 jj

Reviewer: plinky108 (Signed) · Date: May 08, 2009 12:53 PM · On: Chapter 31: Play

that was a good chapter i really liked the comment about the "fast balls"lol and about your contacts as a contact wearer my self my eye doctor said if my contacts bother me to much and removing them dosent help i need to switch brands for i could cause damage to my eyes im saying this because i dont want you to go blind because try typing with your eyes closed sometime its very hard

                your now slighty concerned # 1 fan

                                              jj

(also i feel like ive been kinda writing alot im starting to worry that i might be becoming a pest tell me and ill lay off the review



Author's Response:

After two months of suffering with hard contacts, I got soft (yesterday).  What a huge comfort difference!  I just couldn't tolerate the hard lenses.

You aren't a pest.  Thanks for reading, jj.

Reviewer: plinky108 (Signed) · Date: May 07, 2009 06:59 PM · On: Chapter 30: Man vs. Monster

YaY lemons i love lemons and i like how you went into detail but not a minute by minute play by play i really hope theres more and ive heard about some nasty comments about another time you put in lemons but that person had no idea what good writing is and you should just scroll by people like that u r an excellent writer lemons and all:)

                           none other than your #1 fan

                                                                    jj



Author's Response:

Yep.  The person who wrote the review had no business reading NC-17.  She was a complete prude.  But, with it being my first step into that, it jarred me enough to make me change my story.

My lemons will never be that graphic.  I have a wicked imagination, and I don't like to spell everything out.  I want other people's imaginations to fill in the gaps.  Usually what our minds can come up with is better than reading it all anyway.  At least it is for me.  I've been criticized for not being graphic enough, but that's life.  Can't please everyone.  Thanks for reading jj.

Reviewer: plinky108 (Signed) · Date: May 07, 2009 05:55 PM · On: Chapter 28" Yes...But...

has any one ever told you your a 100xbetter at writing then stephine meyer becuz you are twilight would be alot better if you wrote it:)

                           as always your #1 fan

                                                           jj



Author's Response:

jj--I don't know about being better than Steph.  She came up with this stuff--with Edward--one of the best male characters ever.  And though I started writing fanfic because of certain issues I had with the characters (the self-loathing from Bella was depression, plain and simple, to me--being a person who suffers with it--to me, Bella needed therapy) and because of how much I HATE book 4, it's still her brain child.  I hope to write my first novel starting this summer.  I've always loved writing, and I will have more time this summer and fall to write.

Thanks for the kind words.  I hope I continue to do my story justice.

Reviewer: plinky108 (Signed) · Date: May 07, 2009 04:17 PM · On: Chapter 25: Telling

WOW nothin like a good tell off to make a great story better i loved it i hope maybe there will b another telling off in this story that would be awsome

like you havent already guessed ur biggest fan

                                                                     jj

(your tell off chapter inspired me for my new closer:)



Author's Response:

Thanks, jj.  You are too sweet.

I had so much fun with telling Lauren off.  Glad you liked it too.

Reviewer: Nympho_Cullen (Signed) · Date: May 07, 2009 02:55 PM · On: Chapter 35: Changes

LOL okay so yes I liked how she was changed.. good touch.
And I just love the fact that her little nympho brain clicked in as soon as she "woke" up.. lol
Nice.. Cavewoman Bella..
Priceless..



Author's Response:

Thanks.  Glad you liked it.

Reviewer: plinky108 (Signed) · Date: May 07, 2009 12:56 PM · On: Chapter 23: Resolutions

that was so sweet and slightly disgusting(only the part about carlisle and esme ive never thaught about theyr relationship that way its like thinking of your parents doing it *shivers with disgust*)still my fav author though

                       your #1 fan

                                  jj

(is the #1 fan thing getting old im trying to think of sumthing more original)

Reviewer: plinky108 (Signed) · Date: May 07, 2009 12:33 PM · On: Chapter 22: Changes

wow this is a great story im rereading the twilight series and this edward and bella outdo sm edward and bella ten times!

          your #1 fan

                          you guessed it,jj

Reviewer: mldewolf (Signed) · Date: May 07, 2009 06:00 AM · On: Chapter 35: Changes

GREAT last chapter!!  Thoroughly enjoyed this story.  I'm putting it in "my favs".  I think I'll read Cinderbella next.  I believe you wrote that too.  Good luck and take care.  Keep writing those lemons (smirk)!



Author's Response:

That's not the last chapter.  I still have a few more to go.  Thanks for reading and for thinking so highly of it.

Reviewer: mldewolf (Signed) · Date: May 07, 2009 02:09 AM · On: Chapter 29: Be MIne

Who wouldn't want to read a lemon?  Crazy people.  That's why I like this website so much b/c it does have lemons that satisfies the adult in me.  They are fun.  Personally, I wish yours was a little more graphic.  But none the less, I love reading your stories.



Author's Response:

After rewriting that chapter, I realized that the person shouldn't have been reading NC-17, because of what they described that they found acceptable.  Too late. 

I don't like to spell everything out too much.  I like leaving a lot of it to the reader's imagination.  I could write graphic, but to me and in my mind, I find that my mind runs away with things much more and it is more satisfying, to an extent, when things are left a little nebulous.  Does that make sense?  Anyway, thanks so much for your honesty and for reading my story.  You are very kind.

Reviewer: EllieCullen (Signed) · Date: May 07, 2009 01:32 AM · On: Chapter 35: Changes

That was a beautiful story. This chapter made me cry. You are a wonderful writer.



Author's Response:

It's not over yet.  I still have a few chapters left.

Reviewer: plinky108 (Signed) · Date: May 06, 2009 06:12 PM · On: Chapter 19: Road Trippin'

thank you sooo much i almost died with the giddyness i felt when they started making out

your forever #1 fan

                           jj

Reviewer: liltennisfreak56 (Signed) · Date: May 06, 2009 06:06 PM · On: Chapter 1: Glimpses

ok no matter what you say. edward is a creep in this story atleast for this first chapter. omg it is soo creepy

Author's Response:

I'm sorry you feel that way.  It wasn't my intention to write him that way at all.  It hits a minority of people as creepy.  The majority don't feel that way.  But then again, I found the imprinting in the books creepy, but didn't feel I made my Edward like that.  Sorry.  I hope you give the story a chance, but if you are too creeped out, I understand.  Not my intention at all.  Maybe reading on will change your mind.

Reviewer: MelMasen (Signed) · Date: May 06, 2009 06:05 PM · On: Chapter 3: Thwarting Mike

I very much enjoy this story- I love that you have original ideas yet you still include original Twilight staples within... I can't wait to read on!

Reviewer: plinky108 (Signed) · Date: May 06, 2009 05:47 PM · On: Chapter 18: Twenty-nine Steps

*cry* *cry* that was completely depressing i started crying when he said "like me she was surviving not living" that kinda struck home with me with some of my personle demons im living with (looonng story short i found out i mean nothing to the guy that ment everything to me)

sincerly your depressed #1 fan

                                          jj



Author's Response:

Oh plinky.  I'm so very sorry.  It's his loss--trust me.  Good guys are out there--don't settle.  I know you're hurting, dear one.  I had a lot of those growing up, but I finally found my prince.  We've been married for a long time and have two amazing kids--your happily ever after will happen--I know it.  You deserve it.

Reviewer: plinky108 (Signed) · Date: May 06, 2009 05:06 PM · On: Chapter 16: Making Up

disappointed with chapter 16 the smut is the best part thats what makes stories on here so exciting they are real not like just a story like acutualy being there but i still luv ya so dont get the wrong idea but you could of taken just little farther

       your 4ever fan jj



Author's Response:

Again, this was my first time venturing into this territory, and I got a review that scared me into taming the scene.  It gets better.  Lots of steamy moments.  I'm still not terribly graphic--just not my style.  My I can steam things up, and I do, with time.  Thanks for hanging with me, plinky.

Reviewer: plinky108 (Signed) · Date: May 06, 2009 04:36 PM · On: Chapter 14: Truth

that was the best chapter so far but i hate you for almost giving me a stroke and i love how you used the hold on spider monkey line it made me smile

ok i dont hate you you are the best author on this site just plz if you do that again remember to warn us my heart can only take so much stress:)you biggest fan jj

Reviewer: simplicity (Signed) · Date: May 06, 2009 04:06 PM · On: Chapter 35: Changes

Loved it totally!! Thanks for your hard work!!

Reviewer: yuriinsane (Signed) · Date: May 06, 2009 03:39 PM · On: Chapter 35: Changes

they are amazing when are the next ones coming?

Reviewer: mldewolf (Signed) · Date: May 06, 2009 02:20 PM · On: Chapter 22: Changes

When I started reading this story I stared to rate every chapter b/c I was so impressed.  But then I thought I'd just wait until the end to rate.  BUT I'm rating this chapter b/c I wanted you to know how much I liked it and I'm not done reading, yet but I've been pleased so far.  Just thought I'd let you know.  Take care.



Author's Response:

Thanks so much for the kind words.  I really appreciate all the nice things you say.  You take care too!

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