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Reviewer: Micm (Signed) · Date: February 27, 2012 06:31 PM · On: Chapter 17: The Monster Within

Wow, so we're at New Moon already! The gym scene was utterly sensuous; I loved it; hooray for you for taking you're writing nerve back! Smiles! I wish Carlisle was around Edward more---it would help Edward a tremendous amount right now!

Reviewer: Micm (Signed) · Date: February 27, 2012 05:41 PM · On: Chapter 16: Making Up

I'm surprised that at the time when you originally wrote this, that there was so much turmoil about these characters having sensual and sexual natures! Everyone has these natures within themselves. The web site has disclaimer notices to protect itself and to warn readers of what may be represented here! Writers' previews give you direct warnings of what you'll be reading; you have the free will to read what you will! Therefore others' rights to do the same should be respected...this is truly freedom of speech! I'm sorry if you were intimidated somewhat; write as you feel comfortable with: I've enjoyed many varieties of writing styles on this site! This chapter was rather "tame," yet, it's had tense and sensual moments, too. I've enjoyed this entire story nonetheless and it's premise will remain in my favorites! For the record, I have some hot stories in my favorites too; I'm way past the age of consent and I exercise my free will!

Reviewer: Micm (Signed) · Date: February 27, 2012 05:03 PM · On: Chapter 15: Complete Honesty

Excellent canon bits; but I'm still a tiny bit upset that Edward didn't "come clean" sooner! Bella sounds more like the one we love and root for too! I'd love to see how you put Billy's book into Bella's hands without Charlie becoming this in future chapters? 

Reviewer: Micm (Signed) · Date: February 27, 2012 03:06 PM · On: Chapter 14: Truth

'Whew' is hitting the nail on the head! The sacrifice scene was so tense, I barely breathed! I liked that you kept your Ch 13 like the canon "Confessions" chapter like SM's, which started it all for us!! Smiles!

Reviewer: Micm (Signed) · Date: February 27, 2012 01:57 PM · On: Chapter 13: Bella's Party

I forgot the canon piece with Tyler's van! Oh, why didn't Edward move to reveal himself at Bella's party a little quicker!? I can't wait to see how you'll resolve this mess!

Reviewer: Micm (Signed) · Date: February 27, 2012 01:28 PM · On: Chapter 12: Officially a Cullen

I could feel the love and comfortable atmosphere throughout this chapter! I can't wait to hear more about Bella's dress and to hear Edward reveal who he and the Cullens are! Ohh, for a guy like Edward in my life.....!

Reviewer: Micm (Signed) · Date: February 27, 2012 03:09 AM · On: Chapter 11: Acceptance

I thought that Edward was going to get the sex talk too! It's exciting to see the plan for Bella's Cullen crest jewelry. I forgot to tell you in previous chapters; I have to compliment you about the way you have portrayed Rosalie in this story! She is far more approachable, empathetic and full of kindness in regards to Edward's demeanor, need and love for Bella! It's totally different than many of the fan fiction inclusions of Rosalie's and Edward's brother and sister relationship; it's made me look at her with more respect.  Thank you! 

Reviewer: Micm (Signed) · Date: February 27, 2012 02:35 AM · On: Chapter 10: Testing Limits

My deepest sympathy for your loss! Be at Peace! 

Bella and Edward are playing with fire and are lots of fun to watch! They are so hot for each other; it's exquisite!

Reviewer: Micm (Signed) · Date: February 27, 2012 02:11 AM · On: Chapter 9: Bella Moves In

Girl Power, Bella!!  (You know, maybe Esme is doing a bit of coaching too! LOL!)  Excellent chapter!

Reviewer: Micm (Signed) · Date: February 27, 2012 01:22 AM · On: Chapter 8: Accident Magnet

Edward, in this story, certainly has numerous, tempting thoughts to act the bad boy like Emmett (---Edward just hides his lust quieter!?) doesn't he!? Smiles! I was afraid you put Bella into a coma for a few days; I'm glad you didn't.....!

Reviewer: Micm (Signed) · Date: February 27, 2012 12:59 AM · On: Chapter 7: Making Out 101

Flirty Bella is nice to see! Her confidence is  growing; yes, I think Alice and Rosalie are giving Bella tips!! I'm dying to start seeing Bella's suspicions about the Cullens' identities; it's time! 

Reviewer: Micm (Signed) · Date: February 26, 2012 09:06 PM · On: Chapter 5: Seventeen

I shed some joyful tears over these 2 chapters because Edward finally got to experience what the Spanish influenza had cheated him out of ---being 17, a little devilish, and in love for the first time! I got a little worried about the the lap sitting and backseat maneuvers, but Bella handled it all OK, LOL! Happy Edward! Happy Bella!

Reviewer: Micm (Signed) · Date: February 26, 2012 08:32 PM · On: Chapter 4: Truth or Dare

Fantastic chapter...Mike, Lauren and Jessica must be having apoplexy! Good! I like this spin on Twilight; the dinner date, the keg party and Truth or Dare!

Reviewer: Micm (Signed) · Date: February 26, 2012 07:58 PM · On: Chapter 3: Thwarting Mike

I loved the Cullen males outside of Victoria's Secret scene! So naughty, Alice, to tease poor Edward with Bella's revealing lingerie selection like that! Where was Esme at this moment, lol?! She'd have a fit! Carlisle should have led all the guys away, lol! This was a very sweet shopping outing for Bella's self-esteem; she really needed this attention. It's time Edward bolstered his courage and told Bella how incredible she is! I always disliked that Lauren, whether in SM's Twilight or here in fan fiction!

Reviewer: Micm (Signed) · Date: February 26, 2012 07:16 PM · On: Chapter 2: New Arrival at Forks High

Right, Edward...pull out that charm we all love so well! LOL! I like the rivalry setting up! 

Reviewer: Micm (Signed) · Date: February 26, 2012 06:57 PM · On: Chapter 1: Glimpses

I was profoundly moved by this first chapter! No, this Edward you write about is no pedophile; he's just so relieved, grateful and in love with his new destiny--Bella! It's a realization that his loneliness, self-loathing and unhappiness were almost at an end. Edward gazing Bella in the nursery and his touching her hair showed Edward that time wasn't so cruel; some of eternity finally evolved---in his favor, in a tender, miraculous and merciful way! I absolutely loved your imaginative premise of the whole family chronicling Bella's birth to her 16th year using pictures and a few personal items saturated with her scent to ease Edward's transition! I'm going to savor this story!  

Reviewer: gykinga (Signed) · Date: February 13, 2012 01:34 AM · On: Chapter 38: Worth the Wait

Ah, thank you so much for this wonderful story. I loved it all the way through. You kept me surprised all the way as well.

Well done.

Reviewer: k1942 (Signed) · Date: October 17, 2011 04:55 PM · On: Chapter 38: Worth the Wait

This has been one of the best stories I've ever read. I so love Twilight, in all it's incarnations, the Cullens, Charlie, Bella and Edward, even the wolves! You had such a unique take on all this and did a great job of keeping us all on the edge of our seats. This last chapter was wonderful. The wedding Edward ' orchestrated ' for him and Bella  was just fabulous! I'll picture them as happy forever after, thanks to your words. Thanks so much.

Reviewer: k1942 (Signed) · Date: October 17, 2011 09:42 AM · On: Chapter 37: Trips

Edward fell back into his old pattern of self-hate there for a bit. He would so love to give Bella a child. She is truly wise, to accept what can't be changed and go on . Nice to have some time with Renee and Phil and the baby.

Reviewer: k1942 (Signed) · Date: October 17, 2011 09:21 AM · On: Chapter 36: Newborn

Hunting, hot sex, new undies! What's not to like? Charlie spilled about telling Edward to finish Bella's change and kind of took her by surprise. Bella is doing so well, I'll bet the whole family is proud of her. Getting to keep her dad in her life is just the best present !

Reviewer: k1942 (Signed) · Date: October 17, 2011 08:53 AM · On: Chapter 35: Changes

Nothing like nearly losing Bella to get Edward motivated. Having Charlie plead with him to finish the change to protect her didn't hurt, either. Glad the burning didn't las t long and she could divorce her mind from it. The bed destroying was pretty hot! I liked it! 

Reviewer: k1942 (Signed) · Date: October 17, 2011 08:29 AM · On: Chapter 34: Seattle

Has anyone ever told you, you're an evil woman?  Well, maybe not evil, just mean! How can you let that piece of scum, James, anywhere near Bella? YUCK!

Reviewer: k1942 (Signed) · Date: October 17, 2011 08:01 AM · On: Chapter 33: Loose Ends

Sounds like another episode, except it was so fleeting. Bella is so close to having this change over with and yet nothing about it is 'normal'. At least she still hates the smell of human blood, so shopping in Seattle should be no problem.

Reviewer: k1942 (Signed) · Date: October 17, 2011 07:43 AM · On: Chapter 32: Primal Need

I guess we're almost at the end of Bella's change, if this last episode is any indication. She seems to be at least as much vampire as human. Funny what it took to convince Edward to finish the job. Hoping there's a good way to do this and keep James away from her.

Reviewer: k1942 (Signed) · Date: October 17, 2011 07:14 AM · On: Chapter 31: Play

You can hardly blame Edward and Bella for getting carried away. This is all so new and wonderful and addictive. Carlisles explanation of the bonding between vampires cleared up a few questions, too. So, now to deal with the nomads!

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