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Reviewer: dazzled eyes (Signed) · Date: February 17, 2009 06:41 AM · On: Chapter 16: Making Up
I understand your dilemma. It works either way. Write what you feel.
Author's Response: Thanks dazzled. I plan to only write for me.
Reviewer: mottmom (Signed) · Date: February 17, 2009 06:38 AM · On: Chapter 16: Making Up
I actually prefer the new way myself... nice job. And I find it very refreshing that you changed to be true to yourself.
thanks
Author's Response: I'm glad, and thank you.
Reviewer: Re-Re (Signed) · Date: February 17, 2009 06:35 AM · On: Chapter 16: Making Up
I didn't read the rewrite because I thought the first one was done tastefuly and I did enjoy the "half glass of lemonade" (I think that is how you put it.).
Sorry to hear that you are uncomfortable with writing those type of scenes but in my opinion, you did a fantastic job and I felt that it was necessary to the story and the characters that "YOU" have created. That is a small part of the reason why I liked this story so much is that you allowed them the freedom to explore their sexuality.
I don't see any reason not to include a little graphic sex every once in a while, when its fitting, but this is your story and obviously you are going to do as you please. Sorry that you felt it necessary to cut it out completely. I would much rather "read it" than imagine it, but that is just me.
I'll respect your decision either way but just wanted to let you know, once again, I did enjoy the 1/2 lemon and thought you wrote it perfectly. Sorry that one of your readers got a little indignant but I wouldn't let that discourage you. You can't please everyone. As long as you keep writing this, I will keep reading it. It IS a great story.
I do hope that you feel better. Head colds suck!! I know, I have one, too.
Author's Response: Thanks, Re-Re. I'm sorry you have a head cold--get better soon! Sudafed is my new best friend.
Reviewer: an_edward_chick (Signed) · Date: February 17, 2009 06:23 AM · On: Chapter 16: Making Up
I thought the original was hot, but this rewrite is beautiful. You still have my attention.
Author's Response: Thanks, AEC! Appreciate the kind words.
Reviewer: The Wicked One (Signed) · Date: February 17, 2009 06:18 AM · On: Chapter 16: Making Up
you know what... I like it just as much as I did the lemon. It changes nothing but what the mind thinks happened...
Be true to yourself... screw everyone else!!!
Author's Response: Thanks, my Wicked friend. That's what I hoped most everyone would say. Thanks for reading.
Reviewer: historicvampirelover (Signed) · Date: February 17, 2009 06:15 AM · On: Chapter 16: Making Up
My dear dear fangs, don't you dare listen to anybody who says that something you write isn't good enough. Write what feels comfortable to you, and if that's smut or no smut, angst or no angst, it is still perfect. The insinuations in the car are beautiful, wonderful, and so much closer to canon SM writing anyway.
Flamers stink, and I'm sorry that you had to deal with that at all. I for one LOVE your writing in any possible form.
Author's Response: Thanks for the kind words and advice, HVL! Yes--Flamers stink, but everyone is entitled to an opinion. But I'm not aiming to please anyone but me from now on. Thanks for reading.
Reviewer: Stellarrose (Signed) · Date: February 17, 2009 06:15 AM · On: Chapter 16: Making Up
OK.....rewrite was fine, but I actually preferred it before. Sorry...but those two NEED a little smut!
So what comes next??? Update soon!
Author's Response: They will act on their lust--I just let your imagination figure out what they did. That's what I'm comfortable with. Thanks for reading and for being honest.
Reviewer: venomousgal (Signed) · Date: February 17, 2009 05:55 AM · On: Chapter 16: Making Up
Wow Great job! I have to tell you, don't take that reviewer to heart. You are wonderfully talented, and I know it doesn't take much to be discouraged when you're putting your best out there and get bad feedback. Just remember, it is only one person.
I personally love this fic, and squeal everytime I see your update! You have a good following, you are doing everything right. Believe in yourself....I'll go get a big stick and start beating anyone that disses you.....LOL!
Keep your chin up Kristi!
Tammy
Author's Response: Thanks for being my personal bouncer, Tammy--lol! Thanks for the confidence boost.
Reviewer: Lynnlin (Signed) · Date: February 17, 2009 05:54 AM · On: Chapter 16: Making Up
Can't make everyone happy
Author's Response: Nope, you can't. I gotta' be me. Thanks for reading, Lynnlin.
Reviewer: Mayfair1285 (Signed) · Date: February 17, 2009 05:54 AM · On: Chapter 16: Making Up
I like the change. The first version kinda caught me of guard, like "whoa, that was quick!" This is better.....cause a build up is better ;). Can't wait for the next entry!
Author's Response: Thank you. I like it better too. Thanks for reading.
Reviewer: xparawhorextwerdx (Signed) · Date: February 17, 2009 05:53 AM · On: Chapter 16: Making Up
Honey, I honestly prefer this to the last one, gotta admit. While the first one was really good (loved it!), this is great.
I'm Bella's shrink now, eh? *puts on glasses in psychiatrist look* So vot is ze problem, my dear? Lol. Love ya babe!
Author's Response: Nope. There's a reviewer called "bella's shrink". Sorry if that confused you.
I feel better about this one. I actually lost sleep over the first chapter 16. Thanks.
Reviewer: twogoods (Signed) · Date: February 17, 2009 05:49 AM · On: Chapter 16: Making Up
Hmmm. I'm being honest and hot sure how I feel about this change in story tone. I'm no smut hound (okay, I am) but one of the things I liked about this story was the fact that Edward, while still being a vamp, was a typical teenager. I iked the fact that he lusts after Bella. I'll keep reading, but I have to be honest and say that this changes the story completly for me. Thank you for being true to yourself, though. That's very important.
Author's Response: They still act on their lust--I just don't spell out all the details. I'm just more comfortable that way. I hope you keep reading. Sorry it changes the story for you. Thanks for giving it a chance.
Reviewer: sizone (Signed) · Date: February 17, 2009 04:22 AM · On: Chapter 15: Complete Honesty
I love, love, love your story! :)
It’s a really cool version of Twilight. I simply just love Teenward. Acting 17 really suits him well. I’m glad Bella and Edward are working out their differences, it’s kind of tough to read about Bella with other boys, though I found it hilarious when she slapped Newton. He sure had it coming! All the angst in many of the great stories are killing me, the fact that you've made this so great without that much angst makes this story even better. It would have taken away a lot of the fun if you had let them act out on their lust, though I wouldn’t mind some juicy lemons, I find that I’m willing to wait to see what will eventually happen ;)
Keep up the great work, and update soon ;)
~Sizone
PS. I apologies for any typing errors or incorrect use of words.
Author's Response: Thanks Sizone. I doubt that I ever write anything too graphic. I'm much more an imagination person. My style is to write steam without spelling everything out. It's the way I'm most comfortable writing.
Thanks for the nice words and for reading.
Reviewer: femflorest5 (Signed) · Date: February 16, 2009 09:37 PM · On: Chapter 15: Complete Honesty
I completely love your story and the new twist you give the Twilight story and it's characters!! I can't wait to read more! Thanks for writing, make it your own.
Author's Response: Thank you.
Reviewer: agiismsxx (Signed) · Date: February 16, 2009 08:23 PM · On: Chapter 15: Complete Honesty
These last few chapters tugged at my heartstrings.
It was so terrible to think that even though Edward KNOWS, without a doubt, that Bella is his soulmate, that she would choose to not be with him. Her reaction completely threw me off. It was sort of the reaction Edward in SM's Twilight was expecting...at least your Edward knew that Bella loved him.
I did LOVE this chapter though. *sighs* you write impossibly well.
Author's Response: Thanks agiismsxx. I needed the confidence boost. After that review, I needed it.
It's tough to write them being apart. I does tug at your heartstrings, doesn't it? But they know, without a shadow of a doubt that they love each other. That's central to this version of the story. Thanks for reading.
Reviewer: Demize (Signed) · Date: February 16, 2009 06:10 PM · On: Chapter 15: Complete Honesty
aw hell that is so funi on how he is telling her how oldhe really is damn hahaha but this and the truth chapter was so enticing.
Reviewer: Lauribella (Signed) · Date: February 16, 2009 12:05 PM · On: Chapter 15: Complete Honesty
I just have to say that I still love how this story is being written and where it seems to be going...The fleshed out characterizations make the "happy" of this story so likeable.
It has been a nice change to have just short spurts of angst here instead of some of the more major/ long angst ridden stories..LOLGood luck with your crossroads...I am sure that what you do will be great...as this story has been wonderful already
Again
Thank you!
Author's Response: Thank you. I couldn't really stand book Bella, and I hated what was done to Edward in book 4, so mine are definitely different. Thanks for reading.
I did what was comfortable and rewrote chapter 16.
Reviewer: everwondering (Signed) · Date: February 16, 2009 10:40 AM · On: Chapter 15: Complete Honesty
I read this on another computer the other day, and I can't remember if I left a review for this chapter. So, this might be a duplicate. lol
Loved the Buffy comments. Ha. And Edward's naughty daydreams that apparently put Bella's comments to shame. Woohoo. :)
Author's Response: You cheer me up, everwondering. Thanks!
Reviewer: The Wicked One (Signed) · Date: February 16, 2009 09:59 AM · On: Chapter 1: Glimpses
OK... so that was good dirty. I really like how subtle it is. It is SOOO IC for everyone involved.
I can't wait to see where the story goes...
BTW, I am glad we can help in some small way...
Reviewer: jbluvs2sing (Signed) · Date: February 15, 2009 09:41 PM · On: Chapter 15: Complete Honesty
I am going to say this once because I think you need to hear it. I know that I do when I am writing. This is YOUR story. You write it for you not for the readers. If you want angst (which by the way, is what makes a story exciting) then by all means, add the angst. Please don't let your readers change the direction you had originally planned. I love your story so far. You have done a great job making the Twilight characters your own. I like the angle this story has taken. To have Bella leave Edward was an interesting twist.
I just found this story the other day and I have been reading like a mad woman to get to this point. Keep up the good work!
Author's Response: Thank you for the words of wisdom. Glad you are enjoying my story. Thanks for reading.
Reviewer: Phoenix Rising (Signed) · Date: February 15, 2009 08:18 PM · On: Chapter 15: Complete Honesty
I love your story! It's a different take on Twilight, and I like that it's not the same thing over and over. Great job! But I agree, please no more angst for a while. They are supposed to be soulmates, please don't torture them too badly. They just got back together! Wonderful job on the sexy scenes, by the way! Update soon!
Author's Response: Thanks you and thanks for reading.
Reviewer: cindysark (Signed) · Date: February 15, 2009 05:52 PM · On: Chapter 15: Complete Honesty
I like that he came clean to her about the whole soulmate thing. And I don't mind a little angst!
Author's Response: Me too!
Reviewer: twilighterx33 (Signed) · Date: February 15, 2009 05:38 PM · On: Chapter 15: Complete Honesty
you must update asap! i dont think i can go one much longer without knowing what happens to bella and edward
Author's Response: Thanks.
Reviewer: twilighterx33 (Signed) · Date: February 15, 2009 04:09 PM · On: Chapter 1: Glimpses
gahhh this is ahhhmazinggggg. okayyy i absolutely adore your version of twilight. :)
Author's Response: Thanks you. I'm glad that you like my version of Twilight, but I don't understand why you only gave me two stars. On Twilighted, 10 on the ratings means 5 stars, 9=4.5, etc. I mean, give me what you want, but I just thought I'd let you know. I know this because I didn't realize how the ratings worked and kept rating other authors' stories low. It was all a misunderstanding. Thanks for the review.
Reviewer: Sheeijan (Signed) · Date: February 15, 2009 02:04 PM · On: Chapter 15: Complete Honesty
Well thank goodness everything's out in the open. Oh wait, it's not is it? One tiny thing still out there... yeah...
If we get to vote, I say go the direction YOU want to go. It's your story and we've enjoyed it so far!
Author's Response: Are you talking about the whole changing thing? Just curious. Thanks for the vote of confidence in me, Sheeijan.
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