Cute!

Author's Response:

Thanks.

You know what? I don't think it's necessary for you to write a sex scene and be smutty. You have to be comfortable, of course, but I'll bet if you allow yourself to write it the way YOU would like to and when you would like to, a scene with Bella and Edward making love would probably be amazing! :) I thought words of encouragement might do better than ragging on you .... nicely done. I love this story :)

Feel better! :HUGS:

Author's Response:

Thanks for the encouragement, demeterloves2.  You are really kind.  I'm glad you read my story. 

I'm not sure if I'm able to respond to your response to my review (yes, that's very muddled!), but here goes..

I'm sorry if you thought my review was negative, I honestly didn't mean it that way at all.  Both versions of this chapter were great.  It wasn't that I didn't like the re-write, just that I preferred the original.

You definitely have to be comfortable with what you're putting out there.  At the end of the day it's your work and you have to be happy with it. 

Keep up the good work, I love your story!

Author's Response:

Don't worry, IndecisiveMe.  It wasn't you who I was talking about.  You're fine.  I didn't think it was negative at all.  It was someone else.  We're good.  Thanks for your concern, and I love having you as a reader.

Hi:  I firmly believe that you have to do what you are comfortable with. 

Having said that, I also have to say that while the rewrite is nice, [for me]the original was better -- it had more punch, and in my opinion, it was appropriate without being at all smutty.  Smutty to me is gratuitius, graphic sex -- what you wrote fit with the story. 

I think if you had taken out the "manipulation" at the end, that would have been enough.  I liked the part about what his plans had been for the night of her birthday, as well as his plans for the trip to the ski lodge. 

And PLEASE, do not let one narrow minded idiot change the story you want to write, or get you all upset -- you have over 600 reviews telling you that you are writing a wonderful story.  Please keep it up and write the story you want to write. 

 

Author's Response:

Thanks for your honesty, Suggieo.  I appreciate what you had to say.  I liked my original ending for sixteen better as well, but I like my new take on the sex scene better.  As you said, I have to write what I'm comfortable with.  Thanks for sticking with me and for reading and supporting me. 

Whelp-  I was happy:) with the original and I understand that you got to be comfortable.  Just a little disappointed, but I will survive.

Author's Response:

Thanks for sticking with me Azrielstar.  I appreciate your reading.

I was lucky enough to read both versions of this chapter.  I'm sorry someone felt the need to call you a bad writer because of the sex you had written, because honestly, I much preferred the first edition.

Author's Response:

Thanks for your honesty.  But I did the rewrite because it made me more comfortable in my own skin.  I didn't think it was that much over-the-top, but it still was wrong for me.  Thanks for reading.

Actually I like this much better too. It fits with the tone of the story.

Author's Response:

Thanks Morgan.  I feel better about it.  It's much more "me".  Thanks for sticking with me!

I have to admit, I'm a big fan of lemons (if properly placed and in the right context), but a writer has to write what they are comfortable doing.  I like the chapter both ways.  Seems like we have a ski vacation to look forward to!  

Author's Response:

Thanks!  Yep!  The vacation should be interesting to say the least.  We'll see.  Thanks for reading.

I know it's not easy to hear when someone doesn't like your work, but this is YOUR story, not theirs.  I love your story, regardless.  If I hadn't read the previous post I would've never known the difference.  Be proud of your writing and write what you are comfortable with.  Don't worry about the haters.  :) 

BTW  I was dissapointed this wasn't a new chapter, but you are very much forgiven.  I can't wait for the next update.

Author's Response:

Thanks mistydawn!  I appreciate you!

First of all, there is absolutely NOTHING wrong with this story. There will ALWAYS be a few bad seeds trying to spoil it for everyone else. Take them with a grain of sand and a shovel full of sugar.

As a writer, I've had my detractors, but I've also had several hundred others backing me wholeheartedly. Write what you want, write what you feel. It's YOUR story. If Laurell K. Hamilton listened to the negative reviews some of her books have for sex and violence, neither of which bother me, she wouldn't be the successful, imaginative, and innovative writer that she is. Never doubt your abilities. If someone doesn't like something, they do not have to read, but that by no means makes you a bad writer. The best writers in the world do their own thing, they do not allow anyone else to make the determination for them. And if anyone reads this review and has a problem with it, or if anyone gives you shit about YOUR writing, PLEASE message me. There's a reason I have the nickname and the reputation that I do.  

Author's Response:

Wow!  Now I have two bouncers--lol!  Thanks for that, Miss Poison.  I really appreciate you and the others like you who are being so supportive.  I'm glad you all read my stuff.

I'm really enjoying your story.  I like the whole fated-to-be-together, love written in the stars romantic vibe of the story.

I'll repeat what others have said and just and say that you've got to write what you're comfortable with.  Not that I don't like well-written lemons, but I really don't really care what the rating is as long as the story is good.  For example, Stephenie Meyer doesn't write graphic lemons in the series; the #2 favorite story Seducing Miss Swan doesn't either. 

Be true to yourself.

Don't let some Troll get you down.

I hope you are feeling better soon.

Thank you for the frequent updates.

Author's Response:

Thanks for the kind words and advice, Diana.

I must say that both ways that you wrote and presented this chapter were great. You write very good and enjoyable pieces. 

I agree that you should write what you are comnfortable with.. ...It is after all your creation....That being said..DO NOT let that one person's review upset you or deter you from writing more "lemons"..That is obviously her problem and her likes/ dislikes..

Your writing was very good on that other piece and not over the top. 

It is good to  write new things and try your hand at different approaches.  You, my dear do have talent.  Be proud that you can write differnt things and do not let one small minded person keep you from expanding your horizons!

 

Thank you

Author's Response:

Thanks for the kind words and advice, Lauribella.  I appreciate you.