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Reviewer: twilightfan1969 (Signed) · Date: February 18, 2009 03:05 PM · On: Chapter 18: Twenty-nine Steps

Great chapter... i am glad to see the Cullen family stand up to Edward when his is a bonehead

Reviewer: Mayfair1285 (Signed) · Date: February 18, 2009 02:33 PM · On: Chapter 18: Twenty-nine Steps

Meh!  Update soon please!  My heart is broken!

 

 

He he.....Go ask Alice!

Reviewer: loveroftwilight (Signed) · Date: February 18, 2009 02:31 PM · On: Chapter 18: Twenty-nine Steps

*puts away torch and pitchfork* Yeah thats what I thought, he had better make this apology good or so help me.... Great chapters! Update soon!



Author's Response:

Did you put away the tar and feathers too?  I hope so.  The apology will be interesting to say the least.  I'm working out the bugs in chapter 19, and hope to have it up in the next day or two.  Thanks for reading.

Reviewer: newtothis (Signed) · Date: February 18, 2009 02:27 PM · On: Chapter 18: Twenty-nine Steps

wow. that was awesome.  i love that you did not make esme the stepford wife that everyone else makes her out to be.  edward did have his head up his ass.  please post soon!

Reviewer: Morgan (Signed) · Date: February 18, 2009 02:23 PM · On: Chapter 18: Twenty-nine Steps

Voted out like survivor, priceless. Great chapter.

Reviewer: RoseArcadia (Signed) · Date: February 18, 2009 02:10 PM · On: Chapter 18: Twenty-nine Steps

I love, LOVE the family's reaction to the breakup!  Can't wait for the next chapter!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Reviewer: Melolabel (Signed) · Date: February 18, 2009 02:06 PM · On: Chapter 18: Twenty-nine Steps

I second Carlisles sentiments.  Edward is being an idiot.  Though I'm glad you didn't go the "I don't want you anymore" route like it New Moon.  I also thought having the family kick Edward out was genius!  Can't wait for the next one!



Author's Response:

Thanks Mel.  I thought that my Bella would never believe Edward if he tried to convince her he didn't love her.  My couple is much closer than SM's B/E are.  I think mine talk more as equals.  My Bella stand up to him and for herself.  Glad you like my twist about the family kicking him out.  He deserved it.

Reviewer: krisandrob (Signed) · Date: February 18, 2009 02:01 PM · On: Chapter 18: Twenty-nine Steps

It's about time he came to his senses. Great Chapter!

Reviewer: reviewgrl (Signed) · Date: February 18, 2009 02:00 PM · On: Chapter 18: Twenty-nine Steps

hmmm...i wonder how he is going to make it right...update soon

Reviewer: Laila Cullen (Signed) · Date: February 18, 2009 02:00 PM · On: Chapter 18: Twenty-nine Steps

I love this story can't wait for the next chapter yo have me addicted to this.

Reviewer: MisguidedAngel (Signed) · Date: February 18, 2009 02:00 PM · On: Chapter 18: Twenty-nine Steps

Okay, I'm off to raid the ice cream because after all that angst I need my buddies "Ben & Jerry".

As always you did a wonderful job of making your audience feel what the characters are feeling...great job. Also, tyvm for not drawing this off for months on end...love that you had the rest of the family stand their ground and kick him out. Seriously that's what they should have done in SM's version;-)

 

 



Author's Response:

You are most welcome.  I did not like all the angst in NM.  I hated where Edward left and all we got is Jacob (ick!) for months on end.  I wanted to do something different.  Thanks for reading, and save a scoop for me!  What flavor, btw?

Reviewer: Phoenix Rising (Signed) · Date: February 18, 2009 01:35 PM · On: Chapter 18: Twenty-nine Steps

Haha Emmett is one of my favorite characters, and I love how he put Edward in his place.  If it had to be done, ithad to be done, but I'm not happy about it!  At least Edward didn't lie to her like he did in New Moon.  And I like how your Bella has a backbone.  Unangst it soon, please! :-)



Author's Response:

The de-angsting starts in Chapter 19, but not immediately.  The worst is over.

I originally did have him lying to her and saying he didn't love her, but I found that for my characters, that wasn't plausible.  When I wrote my Bella with more of a backbone, I knew that Edward could never convince her that he didn't love her.  Thanks for reading.

Reviewer: historicvampirelover (Signed) · Date: February 18, 2009 01:33 PM · On: Chapter 18: Twenty-nine Steps

Thank goodness his exile seems only to last for this and maybe a couple more chapters - I can't take it.  I'm so proud of the rest of the Cullens for standing up to assward.



Author's Response:

The way I see it, in this story, it was a family effort to get Bella and Edward together, and they are really pissed that he would just throw that effort away.  Plus, all of them are attached to Bella.

Chapter 19 is where things start to turn around, so just hang in there.  Thanks for sticking with me.

Reviewer: lisa54aa (Signed) · Date: February 18, 2009 12:59 PM · On: Chapter 18: Twenty-nine Steps

Promise that the worst is over? Because I am all sorts of sad right now.....



Author's Response:

Sorry to make you sad, lisa, but it is the worst.  I'm working out the bugs in chapter 19--don't worry.

Reviewer: Val (Signed) · Date: February 18, 2009 11:59 AM · On: Chapter 17: The Monster Within

OMG! that was great! I can't wait for an update!

Reviewer: Morgan (Signed) · Date: February 18, 2009 11:46 AM · On: Chapter 17: The Monster Within

If he tries to pull the New Moon bullshit "I don't love you anymore" she totally has to call him out. This Bella wouldn't take that crap. Great chapter.

Reviewer: demeterloves2 (Signed) · Date: February 18, 2009 11:38 AM · On: Chapter 17: The Monster Within

Great chapter! Of course, I know not to expect anything less from you :) Very well done. I don hope Edward doesn't LEAVE her, though. No leaving is allowed :Dlol.

Can't wait for the next chapter! :)

Reviewer: FearlessNot (Signed) · Date: February 18, 2009 11:35 AM · On: Chapter 17: The Monster Within

New Moon revisited.  Before you update I'll need to stock up on tissue and chocolate.

Very nice chapter.



Author's Response:

I'm sending you a virtual box of Godiva's chocolate's dear!  Thanks for reading.

Reviewer: sizzlinghotcat (Signed) · Date: February 18, 2009 11:26 AM · On: Chapter 17: The Monster Within

Please do not let him be an IDOT this next chapter. If he has to be please solve it in the same chapter!! I don't know if I can handle Edward being stupid again for a few chapters!

Reviewer: where9 (Signed) · Date: February 18, 2009 11:03 AM · On: Chapter 17: The Monster Within

Please please please update soon! I can't stand cliff hangers!

Reviewer: binki (Signed) · Date: February 18, 2009 10:57 AM · On: Chapter 17: The Monster Within

This is so good!  I have a feeling he is going to try and leave and I hope that doesn't happen.

Reviewer: iwantedwardtobemine (Signed) · Date: February 18, 2009 10:45 AM · On: Chapter 17: The Monster Within

So...is the angst you told us about??? :(( I am with ya and hope you dont let him leave her. I know that she left him the first time when she found out what he was, but it was still terribly hard on her. Not again.....

Hurry back please.

Reviewer: an_edward_chick (Signed) · Date: February 18, 2009 10:36 AM · On: Chapter 17: The Monster Within

Here we go again. 2 chapters ago she left him, now he's gonna leave her?  Can I ask how many chapters this NM style break up will last?  I ask because I think I will let the chapters build up before I read so I don't have to wait for resolution.  Or is this basically the direction the rest of the story will go, so I should just wait 'til it's completed?  I really like this story, and I WILL read it through to completion, but I'd rather the getting back together portion be posted before I continue on.  Any hints would be appreciated. This is not a slam against your story or your writing, just my personal preference.  I understand if you can't answer.  I'll just read reviews after each chap is posted, and that will usually give me clues as to the chap. content.

On another note, the Mike Newton/Edward interaction is great.  Couldn't Edward have lost control by attacking Mike?  I would have appreciated that better.



Author's Response:

I bring things around in Chapter 19, so don't worry--I don't prolong this "NM episode thingy" too much.

Glad you like the Edward vs. Mike thing.  But Edward won't risk his family's exposure to snap Mike's neck, no matter how tempting.  Thanks for reading.

Reviewer: k8ew8e (Signed) · Date: February 18, 2009 10:34 AM · On: Chapter 17: The Monster Within

noooo! I hope he wont dump her!

Reviewer: 13halle (Signed) · Date: February 18, 2009 09:56 AM · On: Chapter 17: The Monster Within

oh my god!  its awesome..  and you are really good at updated fast! i love it!

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