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Reviewer: saphire1113 (Signed) · Date: April 11, 2009 03:16 PM · On: Chapter 29: Be MIne

Good chapter, Little weird thinking of Bella in a wrap dress & heels & Edward in suit for school.  I can't wait for the baseball game.  Update soon



Author's Response:

He's wearing the suit casually--no tie.  You know those Cullens, all of them are fashion plates--lol!  Thanks for reading.

Reviewer: MyBloodSmellsBetter (Signed) · Date: April 11, 2009 12:22 PM · On: Chapter 29: Be MIne

The more lemony the better!

Reviewer: sarah0robinson (Signed) · Date: April 11, 2009 12:02 PM · On: Chapter 29: Be MIne

really goos i loves it :)

cnt wait to carry on :)

10/10

Reviewer: jbluvs2sing (Signed) · Date: April 11, 2009 10:29 AM · On: Chapter 29: Be MIne

Good job!

Reviewer: Cullen Concession (Signed) · Date: April 11, 2009 09:35 AM · On: Chapter 9: Bella Moves In

Exciting chapter!

Reviewer: fletchmartin (Signed) · Date: April 11, 2009 07:38 AM · On: Chapter 19: Road Trippin'

I was in hysterics imagining Emmett in a fuzzy pink bathrobe.  Oh my gosh, I had tears in my eyes reading that whole scene!  He's so funny!  Still reading and loving your story!

Reviewer: snowwolf (Signed) · Date: April 11, 2009 07:37 AM · On: Chapter 29: Be MIne

Rob Pattinson huh? haha

Reviewer: Cullen Concession (Signed) · Date: April 11, 2009 05:37 AM · On: Chapter 8: Accident Magnet

Great chapter!

Reviewer: iwantedwardtobemine (Signed) · Date: April 11, 2009 03:17 AM · On: Chapter 29: Be MIne

Newton sure is full of himself. Still dont like the kid. :D

I am really glad that Bella and Charlie are okay now, I know how hard all that was on her.

Cant wait to see how the night alone goes. :P

Reviewer: Cullen Concession (Signed) · Date: April 11, 2009 02:58 AM · On: Chapter 6: Afterglow

He really does love her!

Reviewer: Daylen (Signed) · Date: April 11, 2009 02:41 AM · On: Chapter 29: Be MIne

Well the inclusion of Rob was cute :)

I wonder what could possibly happen at the baseball game hehe

 

Reviewer: nox76 (Signed) · Date: April 11, 2009 12:29 AM · On: Chapter 29: Be MIne

Aw a really sweet chapter, I'm so glad Bella anf Charlie have sorted things out. Bring on the lemony goodness xxx

Reviewer: the shrew (Signed) · Date: April 10, 2009 11:40 PM · On: Chapter 29: Be MIne

OMG!  Fangs, I love this chapter so faching much!

Hmm... Where do I begin?  Um, first of all, I have and will always believe that any description, detailed or otherwise, of the physical expression of love between two consenting people will always be tasteful.  How can it be otherwise?  I love the way that you write their intimacy.  It's never just physical, so it is always beautiful! I hope to God that no one is giving you crap over the way your write the intimacy bwteen these two?!  It's always gorgeous and loving!  Some people!  What's this story rated again?  Geez!  They would have an epileptic fit and die if they read my stuff!  Even though I like explicit, yours is fantastic!  So sayeth the shrew.  Boo-yaw!

Second, your Esme rocks this chapter somethin' fierce!  I was just the littlest bit unclear about what she actually told Charlie though.  She was joking about telling him that they were "sleeping" together as well as that they were engaged, right?  That's how I read it, and I think that is how you intended, but I just wanted to be sure. The comment from Edward was so touching that I sighed at the pretty! :)

Third, I love that you have Charlie's major concern be for tempting Bella with his blood, and not because he is afraid of her.  It is the perfect connection between father and daughter.

Fourth, "Naked Saturday"!!!!  Nuff said! 

Fifth, and I cannot tell you how much I really love this, but you have Rob Pattinson giving Bella a Valentine's Day card!  Holy Shit!  That cracked me up good!  And then You had Rob being all cute thinking that he was just as good looking as Edward, but Edward made her happy, so he needed to find someone else!  OMG!  I was talking to my computer explaining to him the situation, "Yes, Rob.  Bella belongs to Edward as Edward belongs to her.  Now, go find your Kristen, so that you two can have beautiful sexy-haired babies when you want a break from your fabulous acting careers!"  Just saw Bad Mother's Handbook...*thud*  Rpattz is the shiznit for that.  So faching adorable I was squeeing through all of his scenes.  Had to pause some of them, so I could remember how old I am supposed to be.  NGL, had a cougar moment or two, but he is that adorable in it.

Six, I barked a laugh soooo loud at this line that I thought I woke the house up:"Alice came bouncing down the stairs.  “You rang, dear sister?”"  Perfect Alice moment.  You have really got me wanting them to be completely honest with her about the nomads and that she is drained.  I understand why they aren't, but I have a suspicions that it's going to come back to bite them in the ass, ...or elsewhere.

Excellent chapter as always.  Thank you for sharing this story with us!  The only thing wanting is MORE!  :)

Ms. Shrew



Author's Response:

Thanks, Ms. Shrew.

Esme is teasing Edward.  She never actually tells Charlie those things--he'd have a coronary!  Hope that explains things.  Glad you liked the chapter.

Reviewer: fletchmartin (Signed) · Date: April 10, 2009 09:59 PM · On: Chapter 5: Seventeen

Another great chapter!  I love what goes through Edward's mind.  So funny! 

Reviewer: fightinsurfgrl (Signed) · Date: April 10, 2009 09:59 PM · On: Chapter 29: Be MIne

Can't wait for more!

Reviewer: fletchmartin (Signed) · Date: April 10, 2009 09:46 PM · On: Chapter 4: Truth or Dare

Wow, I am enjoying this immensely!  This is great!  Thank you!

Dead puppies, Emmett in drag, funerals...that was hilarious!

Reviewer: fletchmartin (Signed) · Date: April 10, 2009 09:25 PM · On: Chapter 3: Thwarting Mike

OMG! This was great!  The interactions between the brothers and sisters are awesome!  They just cracked me up!

Reviewer: fletchmartin (Signed) · Date: April 10, 2009 08:43 PM · On: Chapter 1: Glimpses

Just started reading this and I'm liking it!  Your Edward is a sweetheart.  Can't wait to read the rest! 

 

Reviewer: FearlessNot (Signed) · Date: April 10, 2009 08:24 PM · On: Chapter 29: Be MIne

Rob Pattinson asked her out?!! LOL... I’m as good looking as he is. What a riot!  LOL.

Very funny stuff.

Good chapter.  I love this story.

Reviewer: smisa (Signed) · Date: April 10, 2009 08:21 PM · On: Chapter 29: Be MIne

love it! great chapter.

Reviewer: TeamJasper13 (Signed) · Date: April 10, 2009 08:05 PM · On: Chapter 29: Be MIne

You were right, this chapter definitely had a little bit of everything! And it was awesome. I loved the lemony parts and the fluffy parts and the angsty parts and the Jealousward parts (don't quite know why Edward being jealous is so hot to me but it is) and all the others parts too, lol. And it wasn't a cliffy which was nice, but it still did leave me anticipating Edward's weekend plans. And I definitely liked seeing Bella go off on Edward for keeping stuff from her, but at the same time I was annoyed with Jacob for telling her....maybe I'm just too Team Edward but I felt like Jacob probably mentioned it just to try to cause problems with B & E. Then again, I may just be treating poor Jacob unfairly in my thoughts again, lol. Well, whatever the case may be, I totally enjoyed the chapter and I'll be looking forward to more angst, and lemons, and fluffy good times!



Author's Response:

The down side of this being from Edward's POV is that we don't know how Jacob broke the news to Bella.  I have a feeling it was a foot-in-mouth moment.  He probably said it not realizing she didn't know, so don't be too hard on him.  He's young and immature.

Thanks for the kind words, TJ.

Reviewer: nidka (Signed) · Date: April 10, 2009 06:56 PM · On: Chapter 29: Be MIne

LOL. I loved the RPatz bit. Genious, I could picture them in CGI. LOL.

Great chapter, I love the way you weave the story in. Awesome.

Can´t wait for next chapter and Lemon.

 

sincerely,

Karina.

Reviewer: agiismsxx (Signed) · Date: April 10, 2009 06:49 PM · On: Chapter 29: Be MIne

=D YAYY!!!!

You've done an amazing job with building up sexual tensions.

As always, you rock my life.

Reviewer: Melolabel (Signed) · Date: April 10, 2009 06:39 PM · On: Chapter 29: Be MIne

So I'm sure you were saving the special activities for the weekend, but actual Valentines day seemed a little skinny on events.  I would've thought he'd take her out to dinner or something, but never mind.  Cute chapter and I look forward to the next one!



Author's Response:

Hi Mel.  I am so far behind on Blood Crystal.  I'm waiting until May when I have some traveling to do and some time alone so that I can read fanfic.  I just don't get them time right now with the kids and all.

I guess the fact that B/E didn't celebrate much on Valentine's Day is a bleed-over from my own experiences.  My husband is in education, and he often has things going on that prevent us from celebrating on the actual day.  Our anniversary is coming up, and graduation is on it.  Sorry that nothing particularly fantastic happened (at least nothing I wrote about--who knows what those crazy kids do when I'm not spying on them--lol!) on the day.  The weekend will be worth it.  Thanks as always for reading.

Reviewer: krisandrob (Signed) · Date: April 10, 2009 06:12 PM · On: Chapter 29: Be MIne

Loved it! Now he knows not to keep things from her but I knew she would forgive him. I loved all the cards that really got him going but she proved to everyone also that her heart belongs to Edward can't wait to see what happens next it is always a pleasure to read your writing. Your writing skills are totally intriguing and compelling to where a reader feels every characters emotions. Excellent Work!!!!!!!!! Update Soon!!!!!!!!!!!



Author's Response:

You said such kind things about my writing, krisandrob.  Thank you.

I really try to visualize each scene when I write it.  If I can see it in my head, I can write it much better.  That's what works for me anyway.  Thanks for reading.

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