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Reviewer: bommarkm (Signed) · Date: May 03, 2009 06:41 PM · On: Chapter 3: Thwarting Mike

This story is great so far.  I'm really enjoying it.  I also did not think the first chapter was creepy or anything.  It set-up the story and was necessary.

Thanks!

Reviewer: kay321 (Signed) · Date: May 03, 2009 06:35 PM · On: Chapter 34: Seattle

oh my god, can't wait for the update!

Reviewer: trutwilightfantasy (Signed) · Date: May 03, 2009 06:22 PM · On: Chapter 34: Seattle

SEQUAL!!!!! I MUCH prefer EPOV to BPOV anyway! And I'd MUCH rather read more of thier future together than the same story AGAIN! (sorry, but that just gets aggravating in stories, I'm sure ya' know what I'm talking about if you read much fanfiction)

Reviewer: Bkwrm (Signed) · Date: May 03, 2009 08:55 AM · On: Chapter 26: The Meeting

Jake looked bored. "We can handle them."

Yeah, that's Jacob Black to a T. "We can handle a group of ancient, experienced warrior vampires who outnumber us 10 to 1. We're Super Wolves!"

Reviewer: Grace Ryan (Signed) · Date: May 03, 2009 05:37 AM · On: Chapter 34: Seattle

Fantastic! I imagine Victoria wouldn't be too thrilled about him choosing Bella over her. I think Victoria should come into the picture and fight james as well. Hell hath no fury like a woman scorned. Then the rest of the coven can show up and finish her off while she wants to go after Bella.

Reviewer: whiteroses (Signed) · Date: May 02, 2009 05:54 PM · On: Chapter 1: Glimpses

Oh no..i didnt think of it as pedophile-ish in any way! And I work with kids all the time :)

He's a vampire, lonely for sooo long! It's but normal to touch something/someone  that you've waited for so long yet have materialized in front of you. It was a fantasy come true.

He's got strong feelings for her, that's  for sure. but not the creepy kind. you can't expect him to behave like a human does/nor should we judge him as if he's human -- because he's not.

He's a vampire, judge him as vampire --- all these things, his yearning for her, her blood and scent attracting him, his heightened senses just makes it all the more potent to desire to be with her...that's just natural for him.

And i think it's awesome!



Author's Response:

Thank you so very much, whiteroses.  I have had a small handful of people tell me he seems creepy in a pedophile way, and that makes me incredibly sad because I don't feel I've written him that way.  You got exactly what I was trying to say in that first chapter, and I appreciate you voicing it so well.  Thank you, and I hope you like where I take the rest of it.  Thanks for reading, and I hope you continue.

Reviewer: Blair Weston (Signed) · Date: May 01, 2009 07:38 PM · On: Chapter 34: Seattle

love this story, but hate where this one ended. such a nasty cliffy.

Reviewer: my1edward (Signed) · Date: May 01, 2009 05:43 PM · On: Chapter 34: Seattle

Damn, I meant to give you a 10 before, but I hit the wrong button and sent it before I could stop it.  Sorry!!

Reviewer: my1edward (Signed) · Date: May 01, 2009 05:42 PM · On: Chapter 34: Seattle

OMG, you've got to update fast!!  Poor Bella!  Poor Edward!  Evil James!!  You can't let him bite her!!

The Charlie diaog @ the computers was great fun and struck me as so true to his character--I can just hear Billy Burke's voice drawling out those lines.

I love this fic, and have been here since the very beginning with you.  I'm OK with it ending--not always, but often sequels/continuations aren't as good--the original idea gets worn out, unless you've got something particular in mind to work with.  So I think quitting while you're ahead is a very good strategy.  But if you do continue, please do a sequel in the EPOV--he's more interesting, and you do him so very well.  Looking forward to more!



Author's Response:

I'm glad that you liked the Charlie dialog.  I'm a very visual writer.  If I can't see the scene, I can't write it as well.  I'm actually struggling with that issue in the next chapter.  Thanks for the advice on the sequel.  I am starting to wonder if I have enough to continue this story.  I'll write several chapters before I post it if I do.  Thanks, my1edward.

Reviewer: Snowball Sniper (Signed) · Date: April 30, 2009 08:55 PM · On: Chapter 34: Seattle

Oh Wow! This story is awesome. Why do I get the feeling that it's almost over? Is it?

Keep up the great work!

Reviewer: annettelovez (Signed) · Date: April 30, 2009 06:06 PM · On: Chapter 34: Seattle

WHOA. What's going on??? James, I hate you so much but I love that I can hate you so easily.

Reviewer: lilmamaday (Signed) · Date: April 30, 2009 05:53 PM · On: Chapter 34: Seattle

please update soon! I am so in love with this story!

Reviewer: Cepstein1980 (Signed) · Date: April 30, 2009 04:48 PM · On: Chapter 1: Glimpses

I loved it. It was endearing and creative.

Reviewer: LilMoCullen (Signed) · Date: April 30, 2009 11:49 AM · On: Chapter 25: Telling

*LOL* I thought i was cool that Edward said "baby" I think SM should have let Teilight Edward say at least once... That was Awesome :D

Reviewer: LilMoCullen (Signed) · Date: April 30, 2009 11:17 AM · On: Chapter 24: Don't Hate Me Because I'm Beautiful

Chpater 24.... HS!!!

Reviewer: LilMoCullen (Signed) · Date: April 30, 2009 10:24 AM · On: Chapter 23: Resolutions

Aww chapter 23 sweet :)

Reviewer: kng1986 (Signed) · Date: April 30, 2009 10:03 AM · On: Chapter 30: Man vs. Monster

I loved this chapter.  Their lovemaking was beautifully and tastefull done. 

Reviewer: kng1986 (Signed) · Date: April 30, 2009 08:41 AM · On: Chapter 26: The Meeting

I'm glad Jake is sorry he put Charlie and the pack in danger and almost started a war because he can't get a date.  Stupid teen werewolf. 

Reviewer: kng1986 (Signed) · Date: April 30, 2009 08:22 AM · On: Chapter 25: Telling

Billy is supposed to be Charlie's best friend but he put him in so much danger by telling him about vampires.  I hope Charlie comes to his senses. 

The upside-down kiss was great.

I absolutely loved that Edward and siblings -especially Rose - took Lauren down a peg or three in front of the entire school.  What a b****!  

Reviewer: kng1986 (Signed) · Date: April 30, 2009 07:22 AM · On: Chapter 23: Resolutions

In that moment, I accepted our fate and finally found what I had been looking for…peace.  New Years Eve was perfect. 

Reviewer: kng1986 (Signed) · Date: April 30, 2009 06:59 AM · On: Chapter 22: Changes

Edward!  You and Bella need to cool down!  Jasper is…well…um…Jasper…baby…wait…ungh…well…we’re going hunting for the evening.  So unless you two want to be teased mercilessly by Emmett… That was hysterical - roflmao.  It's really great that the family kept Bella's change from Edward for so long to honor her wishes,  I am so proud of them.

Reviewer: sweetpea1118 (Signed) · Date: April 30, 2009 06:53 AM · On: Chapter 34: Seattle

Evil, evil cliffie fangs! Please keep going on this story or write a sequel. I love, love, love this story so much.

Reviewer: kng1986 (Signed) · Date: April 30, 2009 06:37 AM · On: Chapter 21: Sentimental Reasons

It looks like Bella is changing into a vampire.  Did Bella know and is that why she didn't want to open her mouth to Edward's kisses?

Reviewer: AliciaZA (Signed) · Date: April 30, 2009 05:58 AM · On: Chapter 34: Seattle

OH MY GOD!!! (Pause for dramatic silence) That was the BEST chapter yet! So completely unexpected cos things were going so well for Edward and Bella. This chapter was beautifully written, I was actually gripping my mouse cos it was so nerve-wracking. I'm so nervous about what happens next. I want Edward to bite her, not that creep James!

In other bits, I really enjoyed the Charlie and Bella moments - think thats one of the best things about Twilight.

About the story, my vote goes to ending the story at its natural conclusion (which is whatever you decide, whenever you decide to do it but not TOO soon please - lol) BUT ABSOLUTELY WRITE A SEQUEL cos this is one of my FAVOURITE fanfics - and by the numbers of reviews this story gets, its a lot of other peoples' favourite too.

Also, think that in the sequel you should consider alternating writing in Edward and Bella's POV (and maybe even guest characters like Charlie's POV - to give it some spice). I ADORE Edward's POV cos he's always an emotional rollercoaster and privy to so much more cos he reads minds. But I think that alternating POVs (which might seem repetitive - but its not!) fleshes out the characters and adds depth to the story.

I have to tell you that you are an AMAZING writer and truly talented. I can't wait for you to post the chapter but please ... we all like happy endings (smile)...

AliciaZA



Author's Response:

Thanks, Alicia.  You say such kind things.  I'm glad that you liked the chapter, even if it was rather nerve-wracking. 

I have several stories that alternate POV's, so this story is an exercise in sticking to one.  I think if I do a sequel, I'll stick with Edward's POV.  He's my favorite.  Thanks for reading.

Reviewer: kng1986 (Signed) · Date: April 30, 2009 04:58 AM · On: Chapter 19: Road Trippin'

I am so happy that you made the Cullens supportive of Bella when Edward was away.  I loved that Esme held her at night.  I'm glad they made up but also that Bella told him she doesn't trust him yet.  The joke on Emmett was precious. 

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