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Reviews For La Vita Nuova
Reviewer: crmom (Signed) · Date: May 23, 2009 12:35 PM · On: Preface

Great start, nice writing style! Add more!

Reviewer: conzieu (Signed) · Date: May 11, 2009 07:26 PM · On: Preface

I think the story could be really great if you fleshed out the part after "That face".  It seems a little too flimsy to actually pull him back from death.  Maybe he would want to remember all of her face, to see it in his mind one more time before dying?  Her smile, her laugh, her dimple, and he cannot get it all at once, and has to keep trying, keep concentrating and stay alive?  Maybe when he finally gets it all together, she smiles at him, and tell him to come back to her?

Obviously, I was inspired by your short story.  Please do not take my suggestions the wrong way.  You did manage to flesh Him out in record time, with the choice you made of his memories.  That was very well done, technicaly really good

I really liked this.  You should do more!

Reviewer: twimommy (Signed) · Date: May 08, 2009 12:48 PM · On: Preface

I loved it and would like more.  Great style!

Reviewer: Word Play (Signed) · Date: April 10, 2009 05:15 PM · On: Preface

That was nice!

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