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Reviewer: effleurage (Signed) · Date: May 13, 2009 01:45 PM · On: Chapter 21: The Wedding
Chapter 21: The Wedding. Wonderful, wonderful, wonderful. I honestly wish that Stephenie Meyer had written about Jacob's imprint (to an adult!) and his gift to Bella, as you've done.
This chapter is sexy and sweet with sentiment, whereas, your other chapters are ripe with smut and wit. You are always generous with word-painting details, including picture links (you rock!). Obviously, I look forward to further installments.
There is something missing from Chapter 21: THE LIST!! I know, I know... Bella was enjoying herself, getting hitched, being in the moment, not focusing in on THE LIST. But I must say, for the sake of continuity, please post it at the end of every chapter. We like it!!!
By the way, I plugged your story on thetwilightsaga.net.
Love it!! Keep it coming.
Reviewer: jasleenkaytina (Signed) · Date: May 13, 2009 01:17 PM · On: Chapter 20: 5, 4, 3, 2, 1
Jacob would see and I would mouth ‘mine.' Fucker.
LOL.
Oh, how I love Possessive Edward. :)
Reviewer: Elizabella (Signed) · Date: May 13, 2009 01:10 PM · On: Chapter 21: The Wedding
This chapter was absolutly amazing. I cried through the first half of it and ... well the second half was just.. Gripping to say the very least!!!
Reviewer: Moni_MD (Signed) · Date: May 13, 2009 12:49 PM · On: Chapter 21: The Wedding
WOW! This was incredible!! WOW, just wow!!
Seriously, I was panting here! And I really liked the fact that their first was from Edward's POV so you could see his struggles to keep his control at bay.
WOW! Now the serious stuff will start!! Gosh, I cannot wait!! Bella cowgirl next, I take it?
Since they are going to the Island, on the beach too! YAY!
Please, please please update soon???
xoxo,
Monis
PS- I am sorry for your loss and hope your children are feeing better.
Reviewer: love2read (Signed) · Date: May 13, 2009 12:37 PM · On: Chapter 1: Frustrated
you have outdone yourself! Sensual and yet romantic! Awesome combination! and I can not wait until Monday! I'm hoping for some real cowgirl action!
Reviewer: ChoccyJoJo (Signed) · Date: May 13, 2009 12:26 PM · On: Chapter 21: The Wedding
OMG. OMG. OMG.I need some alone time now. If you hear buzzing do not be alarmed! That's all I'm going to say. Hot!
Reviewer: lomitch (Signed) · Date: May 13, 2009 12:25 PM · On: Chapter 21: The Wedding
Absolutely amazing story!!!! I have spent the last 3 days reading this and the last 3 nights showing my husband how amazing this story is!!! Thank you and I can't wait for MORE.
Reviewer: MrsJasperHale (Signed) · Date: May 13, 2009 12:24 PM · On: Chapter 21: The Wedding
Loved it!
The description of the wedding made me cry!
Loved Jake's wedding present to them, so sweet.
Can't wait for more.
Reviewer: xtothey (Signed) · Date: May 13, 2009 12:16 PM · On: Chapter 21: The Wedding
You did good!
Reviewer: goddess (Signed) · Date: May 13, 2009 12:14 PM · On: Chapter 21: The Wedding
love your story-can't get enough, one of my favorites. Will you e-mail me with updates? bigmommaj.pickens511@suddenlink.net
Reviewer: ShojiOxlow (Signed) · Date: May 13, 2009 12:08 PM · On: Chapter 21: The Wedding
Wonderful chapter - SM should take notice - this was how it should have been done! Bravo!
Reviewer: littlelady (Signed) · Date: May 13, 2009 12:03 PM · On: Chapter 21: The Wedding
You! Are! Brilliant!
I loved it. What an imagination you have. The heartbeat recording was brilliant, the letter from Jake was brilliant. I could never even think these things up! And they are just so perfect. It's like the tatoo and the vial of Bella's blood. Just amazing and perfect! And the toasts, especially Carlise's, were so great. Tear jerking.
The dirty talk was sooooo good. They are passionate people and it shows in the way they communicate with each other. It could not have been better written!
I just love the way you write Edward's point of view. He's so real. He's true to the character SM gave us. You do a great job with it.
I seem to favorite a lot of stories. But if I could just pick one, for Absolute Favorite, it would be this one! From the beginning I have loved it, and you never dissappoint!
Reviewer: LoveStoryFan (Signed) · Date: May 13, 2009 11:49 AM · On: Chapter 21: The Wedding
Wonderful as usual.
Reviewer: mskohl (Anonymous) · Date: May 13, 2009 11:42 AM · On: Chapter 8: Slight Change of Plans
Great job with writing Bella's embarrassment. I was really feeling mortified right along with her. Ugh. I can't even imagine having to deal with that.
That dancing was fantastic. Great descriptions. I wonder how Jasper was handling all of that. I would wonder about Alice, but I imagine she had her hands full with/of Jasper. hmmm.
"Vow" wasn't working for me. I know, it's very 1900s, but it's a mood killer. It worked for Bella, so that's ok.
Reviewer: mskohl (Anonymous) · Date: May 13, 2009 11:09 AM · On: Chapter 7: Awkward
Anxious for the weekend. Alice shouldn't be so cryptic. Bella needs an experienced girlfriend to talk with. Well, at least she offered some help decyphering good 'ol Moodward.
Nicely done.
Reviewer: JShay (Signed) · Date: May 13, 2009 10:58 AM · On: Chapter 21: The Wedding
Oh my gosh!!! IT was beautiful...amazing. The wedding and with the pictures to accompany it I absolutely loved it!
Then Jacob...finding his match. That was awesome.
Then of course the best part...That was beautiful and sensual all at once. I think even my toes tingled. I can't wait to read more!
Reviewer: mskohl (Anonymous) · Date: May 13, 2009 10:49 AM · On: Chapter 6: Unexpected
Yeah, that was good. (understatement, but I'm having a difficult time with coherency.)
God, leave it to Edward to think about how his cumming on her might effect her humanity. Personally, I don't think I would have been able to not climb up on top of him.
Reviewer: iblong2edwardcullen (Signed) · Date: May 13, 2009 10:45 AM · On: Chapter 21: The Wedding
:::::sigh::::::: Thank you so much for updating! It was perfect! I am jumping up & down waiting on the next chapter.
Reviewer: onyx8514 (Signed) · Date: May 13, 2009 10:43 AM · On: Chapter 21: The Wedding
I love it! Way too much to comment on but you did this perfectly! Can't wait to read on I do especially love how he takes care of her and how she made a recording of her heartbeat for him! I cried!
Reviewer: Cleigh (Signed) · Date: May 13, 2009 10:32 AM · On: Chapter 21: The Wedding
The honeymoon dress is beautiful! I actually like it better than the wedding dress. The blue sash is very Bella.
This was such a great chapter - the first night of their honeymoon was hot, Edward in his silk boxers creates such a nice mental image :)
I love this story, I wonder how many chapters you are planning on writing? Once she's changed they can do so much (maniacal laughter) Gawd, we are all such pervs when it comes to Edward HA HA
Reviewer: mskohl (Anonymous) · Date: May 13, 2009 10:19 AM · On: Chapter 5: Consequences
I was laughing out loud again at Jasper's and Alice's thoughts. That's great. When reading the series, I never thought about how strongly they'd be able to smell arousal and how it might affect them. Good job, you!
Ok, I just want to read the next chapter....
sorry for a lame review, but at least I'm not begging for updates. :)
Reviewer: imloki (Signed) · Date: May 13, 2009 10:05 AM · On: Chapter 21: The Wedding
so worth the wait a 30 and did i mention sexy?
Reviewer: katstrat (Signed) · Date: May 13, 2009 10:01 AM · On: Chapter 21: The Wedding
Wow...what can I say?? ;o) We waited for this awhile... and it was everything I could have wished for! *sigh* In fact you made their wedding night so romantic and so sweet that the thought of myself not being able to go back and have my own first time with a man who loved me as much as Edward loves Bella kind of makes me sad. Well, what's done is done... and I know it's just ridiculous ;) but when I'm reading your wonderful story I wanna believe that EVERY Girl deserves a man who appreciates her, loves her and gives her such an experience - at least for her first time.
Well, I better stop rambling now! You're just hugely talented and made me and a lot of other readers very happy with your story of those two lovers once again! Thank you!!!!
Reviewer: Susan Hails (Signed) · Date: May 13, 2009 10:01 AM · On: Chapter 21: The Wedding
The wedding chapter was brilliant, cannot wait for the next one xx
Reviewer: Becky03 (Signed) · Date: May 13, 2009 10:00 AM · On: Chapter 21: The Wedding
Hey I thought it was awesome!!!! I really loved how u had Sam for Jake!
I cant wait for the next chapter! & I cant wait till she is turned! ur awesome!!! I criead at the begining!! the toasts were beautiful!!!!!
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