I adored this chapter, please update soon!

Um, yeah so I got back up - I had to finish this..

 

OK my honest review. Forgive me, I'm wordy.

 

I absolutely LOVE your writing. You strayed from Bella's nature.. the shopping? Not Bella, would never be Bella, could never be Bella.. but I can absolutely forgive that because to be honest I don't find those traits particularly endearing. You got Edward spot on though.

I found myself giggling uncontrolably, gasping, and more than once having to stop and wake up my boyfriend. He's not entirely sure who to thank yet but if I told him you would get a greeting card I am certain.

I can honestly say I enjoyed this story so far MUCH more than Breaking Dawn. Not to get off the subject too much, but for an author to build such a relationship and not show us at least some of the consumation - when she then proceeds to graphically depict the flesh-tearing, spine-cracking, bloody birth of a half vampire baby - well I think it is a double standard and I have major issues with the entire book because of it.

Alas, reading your depiction.. it had the same flavor, even some of the same characterizations, and I can easily forgive the straying from canon since Breaking Dawn strayed so much itself!

I will be following this for as long as you will keep writing it, but for me, in all honesty, it is perfect and beautiful as it is right now.

On a final note: I fucking LOVE the way your mind works!

this story has been AMAZING so far and i've proudly read it all in the past few days. i'll gladly trade my social life anytime for twilight. :) this chapter was the best so far! the part with charlie before he walked her down the aisle made me tear up, bella's present to edward was perfect, seeing through edward's POV for the part we've all been waiting for was a great decision...i wish i could see YOUR version played out on the big screen! it's so personal, with the details in all the right places, and you are doing an amazing job at this! can't wait for the next chapter...

xo

Hot hot hot hot HOT!!! You did a great job. And the wedding was incredibly sweet. Loved Jake's gift to Bella. Really, you wrote the wedding night beautifully. :)

I've just recently read your entire story, so this is my first review.  My husband has been very annoyed with me reading so late into the night..but too bad!  I've loved every minute of it!  Thanks for sharing your great talent! 

that was AWSOME!!!!!!

I love this Chapter, because she gets to take care of him. Something that is very important to her.

I'm sorry I haven't reviewed before now but I wanted to finish all that you've written first.  I am a Middle School teacher, mom with a husband and married daughter, Twilight crazy fan and avid reader.

I really like your writing.  This is the first erotic piece I have read.  Needless to say I couldn’t stop!  Thank you so much for the correct grammar and spelling as well as the incredible stories.

This reminded me of the beginnings of my married life.  Ok, it took us a bit longer to get to some of the wilder fantasies but we did have our little "list."

Ours was an ABC list.  We had to have sex though the alphabet, a new place for each letter.  I can imagine Bella and Edward playing this game.  The hardest letter to get though was "X".  With Carlisle having Xray table in the house they would be set!  I would love to see you take them though the alphabet!

Please keep writing!  Congratulations on a job well done!

Judy

what? no feathers?  jk... love the chapter.  The present of her heart beating, AWESOME and unique.  can't wait till she gives him the blood, I am sure that I will cry at that one. 

Thanks for the update

that was amazing, it made me cry with the speeches!

 

cant wait for more

Oh my gosh. That was so good! The POVs for the wedding were great, Jake's present was absolutely perfect, and I really liked that you had the most important scene (in my opinion) in the chapter from Edward's point. You really got what he was thinking as it all unfolded, and it was great. I'm also really glad that he finally realises that he won't hurt her. Great chapter all around! Can't wait for another! :)

That was fantastic.  It was a little disjointed there at the beginning.  The transition between the days, but I get that you were trying to get to the good parts.  It was worth it.  I think I need to change my panties.  LOL

I love the lab and all his mementos were so sweet.  And, I'm thankful Alice can calm that girl down and remind her that Edward knowing the list is a good thing.  It reminds me that I'm chicken to get my husband to read these.  Oh well, it still works for me even if he doesn't actually read the words, he knows where I'm headed.

 

That was great.