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Reviewer: ZephyrEffect (Signed) · Date: May 20, 2009 06:30 PM · On: Chapter 21: The Wedding

This was WAAAAY better than the real version.  I liked how you brought aspects from the book in at different times in this chapter, I would have to say it really improved the story line and made alot more sense considering the characters.

Please, please update as soon as possible!  I want to keep reading!!  :)

Reviewer: fabandfriendly (Signed) · Date: May 20, 2009 05:40 PM · On: Chapter 1: Frustrated

wow what afantastic start

Reviewer: nettie (Signed) · Date: May 20, 2009 04:42 PM · On: Chapter 21: The Wedding

I loved loved loved this story fan friggin tastic! and now i want MORE. MORE. MORE. LOL so..... when do we get more?

Reviewer: Avaleigh1 (Signed) · Date: May 20, 2009 04:40 PM · On: Chapter 8: Slight Change of Plans

Wow.

Reviewer: hannahbrit (Signed) · Date: May 20, 2009 02:48 PM · On: Chapter 2: Brainstorming, Interrupted

OMGOMGOMGOMGOMGOMG!  this is fantastic!  I love it!!!  Please please please write more, I love the way you kept almost completely true to their characters and can tell that this is just going to get better and better!  thank you so much for these two chapters and I look forward to reading more!

Reviewer: DaniG (Signed) · Date: May 20, 2009 06:36 AM · On: Chapter 8: Slight Change of Plans

"It felt so good to have Bella in my arms, I could hardly stand to let her go.  It had been a strained week, which was entirely my own fault.  I had allowed myself to lose far too much control with her on Tuesday morning.  And though I was pleased that we had been able to be intimate with one another in a way that posed her no harm, I was frustrated for giving in to such base needs and talking to her the way I did.  And encouraging her to pleasure me like she did, exquisite though it had been, was demeaning.  Bella was a beautiful, loving, pure lady.  She deserved romance and candlelight and sweet words of adoration.  I had not treated her the way she deserved to be treated.  It was clear that Bella sensed my emotional quandary and I knew that it was upsetting her.  But I was trying to steel my resolve for being with her alone this whole weekend.  I wouldn’t let things get so out of hand again until she was my wife."

 

Just a quick question.  This paragraph suggests that once married, anything goes, but until then, it is all demeaning.  Normally, I would just ignore it, but things get steamy fairly quickly.  I am hoping Edward does not mean it like that. 

 

Otherwise, very saucy and wonderful story.  I enjoy their journey to each other.  I also loved Jasper and Alice, lovely.  And Carlisle, what fun. 

Who is going to find their conversation?



Author's Response:

In the paragraph you quoted, Edward is debating with himself:  what he thinks is right versus what he feels.  He's also struggling with his sense of what a woman would want/enjoy.  This experience proved that he could be with her intimately, but he can't help but overthink it.  Okay, so maybe the control issue isn't as significant as I thought, but just because I CAN do it, SHOULD I do it?  Emmett's words help him work through this, as does Bella in the next chapter or two, plus his possessive instincts get triggered at the nightclub, and he also is learning just how much he needs their physicality and just how linked intimacy in various forms is to love.  And of course all of this is exacerbated by the fact that Bella is going through her own sexual awakening at the same time, most highlighted by her willingness to think about and record what sexual experiences interest her.  Hope this helps!

Reviewer: myfantasy (Signed) · Date: May 19, 2009 10:55 PM · On: Chapter 21: The Wedding

I have to say that i love it so far. once i started reading it i just couldn't stop. Can't wait for the next update.

Reviewer: amp23 (Signed) · Date: May 19, 2009 10:44 PM · On: Chapter 21: The Wedding

your nerves were unjustified - you were perfect, just like Edward!  Thanks for another awesome, lemony chapter.  I had to have sex in the middle myself - my husband was more than willing to oblige!

Reviewer: trulydreaming (Signed) · Date: May 19, 2009 04:46 PM · On: Chapter 21: The Wedding

My God you are talented!  I did not look away from the computer for over 24 hours (other than the necessary "human moments").  I am honestly sad and a bit disappointed to see the story end. 

I believe you really brought Stephenie Meyers' characters to life in a very respectful and enhanced way.  You captured not only their personalities, humor, frailties, and love, but also their SPIRIT.  It is not often one finds than in writing - especially in online fanfiction!   

You truly are a great talent and I am quite pleased to have "run across" your writing.  I hope you write more.  I am looking forward to every word! 

Thank you for sharing your look into the Twilight characters!  It truly was "inspiring!" 

Reviewer: Edwarda (Signed) · Date: May 19, 2009 02:00 PM · On: Chapter 9: Games

OMG! Bella is a profetional Bad Ass!

Reviewer: meyerjc2002 (Signed) · Date: May 19, 2009 01:10 PM · On: Chapter 21: The Wedding

I just reread the whole story.  I can't wait for an update.

Reviewer: Edwarda (Signed) · Date: May 19, 2009 12:48 PM · On: Chapter 8: Slight Change of Plans

I like the part were he didn't want to let it go to waist, after all of that hot sexy moment that was funny anFREAKEYYY!!! go ED.

Reviewer: jkmac3 (Signed) · Date: May 19, 2009 12:31 PM · On: Chapter 1: Frustrated

This is more of a comment for your whole story (so far) than an actual review. I've read every chapter so fan and I have to say I LOVE it! You captured every character and made them all so much more interesting. Don't get me wrong, I absolutely love every book Stephanie Meyer's wrote, but your stories have something her's lack. She never really looked at all of the characters in her books. I love that you give us little stories involving the whole family. I really loved reading about Emmett and Jasper. I even like Rosalie more in your books. You gave everyone a voice and I think that's amazing. Please, please, please keep writing!

I'm so spoiled. I just discovered you and dispite my family's protests I spent the last two days doing nothing but reading!  I haven't had to wait for the next installments. Now I'm addicted! Please don't make me wait too long;)

Absolutely amazing!

Reviewer: 5rockstars (Signed) · Date: May 19, 2009 11:49 AM · On: Chapter 21: The Wedding

I could read another 21 chapters and still want more! This story is awesome and you are very talented!

Reviewer: trudy_lowe (Signed) · Date: May 19, 2009 11:38 AM · On: Chapter 10: Control

So, I apologize for reading this far and not commenting before now, but the three-fer FINALLY did me in.  This is the hottest thing I have EVER read!  You GO, girl!  Truly well written. I think a quote from the above sums it up, "Damn.  She’s good., and, Fuck.  I’m screwed."

Reviewer: wren (Signed) · Date: May 19, 2009 09:44 AM · On: Chapter 21: The Wedding

Ahh this was wonderful! :)

And I absolutely loved your chapter for smut mondays...I read it yeseterday and it completely made my week! And that's saying something from the insanity I've been dealing with! :)

Reviewer: GataMoreninha (Signed) · Date: May 19, 2009 07:59 AM · On: Chapter 11: Music

I just started to read this (crazy, I know)...

All the post so far are the most sexiest things I have ever read.

It's totally INCREDIBLE....

 

Reviewer: naeo99 (Signed) · Date: May 19, 2009 06:46 AM · On: Chapter 21: The Wedding

Wow! This whole story has been beyond awesome and wonderful. What a great writer you are.

Reviewer: clumsy (Signed) · Date: May 19, 2009 03:54 AM · On: Chapter 21: The Wedding

Great chapter and i love the wedding dress can't wait for more

Reviewer: xxedwardforlifexx (Signed) · Date: May 19, 2009 03:47 AM · On: Chapter 10: Control

this story has effectively prevented me from finishing my homework.

great job

:D

Reviewer: MishKa1985 (Signed) · Date: May 18, 2009 06:59 PM · On: Chapter 21: The Wedding

O.....M.....G.....Speechless...literally speechless...:O...I'm... amazed... ur incredible...!!!...Hmmm...I definitely think u should write a novel :p....AMAZING chapter hun...keep at it!!!

Reviewer: bite_me180 (Signed) · Date: May 18, 2009 06:05 PM · On: Chapter 5: Consequences

eep. this is very......... uh... lets say..... interesting? lol hehehehehahahahahooohoooohooo

Reviewer: edwardluva84 (Signed) · Date: May 18, 2009 05:54 PM · On: Chapter 21: The Wedding

All I can say is you are rocking my world!  lol  I love this story and I'm so glad they are finally married!  Can't wait for the next chapter!  How many more chapters do you plan to write?

Reviewer: pipergirl (Signed) · Date: May 18, 2009 05:43 PM · On: Chapter 21: The Wedding

As I read all 21 chapters written to date, I knew I'd eventually have to leave a note. 

But how can I write anything that even begins to explain how fanfuckingtastic this story is?!  You've got all the magic elements to a great story--good grammar (don't laugh--it's a rarity), characters down-pat and a believable storyline.

Oh, did I mention the mindblowing smut?  Holy hell, my mind is spinning...  This is the hottest story I've read since the heydey of Spuffy fic :)

Glad to see it's not over, and that there will be more!! (can I beg for the absence of Renesmee?  Honestly, the story should have ended at the honeymoon...)

Reviewer: ZephyrEffect (Signed) · Date: May 18, 2009 03:13 PM · On: Chapter 12: Words and Letters

This is awesome!  I am dying to know where she got the tat...  Only thing that comes to mind is behind her ear..  or her inner thigh where he marked her... but that doesn't seem like something even this Bella would do!  Oh, I will be thinking about this for a while.  LOL

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