This whole story is one of the best stories Ive ever read great job I can't wait for the rest.

What I Love most about your story is it is so close to the orginal story that I am just as sucked in as I was to the books the first time I read them.  But with yours I have to change my undersear more often.  hehehe

I like your story.. but the way Bella and Edward talk are not themselves. You might as well have changed the character's names...

Author's Response:

This is the way I see them...full of passion and urgency about one another now that their relationship has finally become sexual.  To me, that includes explicit language along with a lot of very meaningful and honest conversation about their relationship (and relationship growth:  trust, confidence, etc.) that they never really had in the books either.  But, I know it's not for everyone.

wow that ws good.  no that was great. 

Hey, just started reading this two days ago, and I'm totally caught up.  Loved this storyline - I think it might even be a bit more realistic than Breaking Dawn.  I'm still not sold on the idea of Renesmee, so.... well, you know.  Can't wait to keep reading!  Keep up the great writing.  :o)
-NK

So good. I started reading this story yesterday and I can't put it down. I can't wait to read more!!

Oh and I also wanted to say thanks for the no baby thing.  I really rolled my eyes in Breaking Dawn when Bella got pregnant.  What a cliche.

Oh and then Charlie was still going to be in her life and Renee and Jacob. My, my, she didn't have to give up anything? 

It was sappy and really un-lifelike, especially un-vampire life-like.

Sorry Steph

Just something I thought of.  Bella's venom in her eyes burned through the contacts..If there is venom in Edward's semen, how long would it take to burn through latex.  And there is no venom in pre-cum?  She swalled some of that right?  Picky picky.  I'll shut up now.

 

Author's Response:

I agree with your thoughts on Breaking Dawn expressed here.  On the contacts...it took a while before the contacts succumbed to the venom, so I'm taking the same idea here.  If he removes the condom right away, it should remain in tact long enough.  And in terms of venom in the pre-cum, my thinking is that it would be roughly the same amount as the venom in his saliva from when they kiss.  So, yes, she has likely been exposed to small amounts of venom over the two years of their relationship.  When Carlisle gives the advice to use a condom, he says to do it to be safe--as in BD, they don't really know what will happen if venom is introduced through intercourse.  So the condom makes sense as prevention, especially because during her first time a small internal cut was likely and a sure way for venom to be introduced into her bloodstream.  There's actually an interesting story where the venom she gets through kisses started her transformation in a piecemeal manner over a course of months, and it takes them a while to realize what's happening to her.  It's called something like I've Been Waiting For You For Forever.

Loved it, best chapter I think. Cried. Soooo good.

I LOVE IT, just fear that time is running out..I know it isn't but, it is that ANGST that your good at, really good at. This has to be my fave fan fic so far and I have read A LOT. Thanks

So creative, every chapter is different and original. Love it.

I found this story today and have not been able to stop reading... thank you for writing it, oh and my husband thanks you as well!!!  ;)

the best ADULT version out there!!!!!!!!!!!!!

ok, wow... there are so many things one could say about this chapter and its awesomeness but I will comment on my favorite towards the end, edward's little idea with the tree branch and his possessiveness, so HOT!!!