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Reviewer: Saxon23 (Signed) · Date: July 31, 2009 12:11 AM · On: Chapter 24: Countdown to a Change
oh Lord , new to this.
What an amazing story!1
I love the differnet points of view - seeing into Emmetts mind is delightful! mnay writers use Bpov and Epov however this is the firt i have read that includs the others...maybe after this story has ran its natural course you could do some "outtakes" of the other Cullen pov's.
You certainly captued Emmett as I think of him.
Not going to pretend, I love the smut however I love the fact that it has a place in a great story. I know SM owns the charcters howevr i love that you have remembered that they are teenagers, and behave as such!
Anyway, looking forward to the next chaper/chapters.
Dont ever stop writing!
sax
Reviewer: RAH08 (Signed) · Date: July 30, 2009 09:31 PM · On: Chapter 24: Countdown to a Change
That was great! I cannot believe she is going to be changed soon! Although we all cannot wait for that to happen, YAY!! Great job!
Reviewer: Bellas Humanity (Signed) · Date: July 30, 2009 09:21 PM · On: Chapter 24: Countdown to a Change
wow this is utterly fantastic. I'm on the edge of my seat, please please please hurry and update soon! You're writing is impeccable and I love every second of reading it.
Reviewer: Krinets23 (Signed) · Date: July 30, 2009 08:48 PM · On: Chapter 24: Countdown to a Change
This was absolutely one of your best chapters, if not the best! It made me stop lurking and finally write a review, lol! I laughed, I cried, and my heart broke for the two of them! I loved Stephanie Meyer's version of 'the change', but I loved your's more! I loved that they have such a stong emotional connection through it and I have to say.. I would chose your way of being changed over a bloody birth/death anyday! They didn't give her the morphine before he bit her though!! I think I stopped breathing when he read the notebook. I can't wait to read more about it! Powerful chapter!
p.s. As always, you write the best dirty little scenes ever! :)
p.p.s. Hope you are having fun at TwiCon!
Reviewer: sonecrackle (Signed) · Date: July 30, 2009 08:32 PM · On: Chapter 24: Countdown to a Change
Sooo goood!
Reviewer: sonecrackle (Signed) · Date: July 30, 2009 08:27 PM · On: Chapter 24: Countdown to a Change
Sooo goood!
Reviewer: foreverswt16 (Signed) · Date: July 30, 2009 07:53 PM · On: Chapter 24: Countdown to a Change
Totally love your writing, you keep me thirsting for the next chapter to come!
Reviewer: babyvampirex13 (Signed) · Date: July 30, 2009 07:49 PM · On: Chapter 24: Countdown to a Change
oh my gosh my heart is pounding! :D
this is such an outstanding story and it is always getting better and better :)
edward will stop right? :O if he doesnt... AHHHHH
i know he will. love the ending :)
Reviewer: loveism999 (Signed) · Date: July 30, 2009 06:46 PM · On: Chapter 23: Good-Byes
I think these last two chapters were my favorites...and oh.the vampire fantasy! I need more of that! That was so so so incredibly sexy. Oh I hope you publish more! Please please please I love you!!!!
Reviewer: rosita1254 (Signed) · Date: July 30, 2009 06:01 PM · On: Chapter 24: Countdown to a Change
That was awesome! Just read twilight for the first time finally a couple weeks ago and then started reading the fanfiction, (which is great because I never have to be done reading it). Love this story, so HOT! Keep updating please!
Reviewer: DeeZ750 (Signed) · Date: July 30, 2009 04:34 PM · On: Chapter 24: Countdown to a Change
Oh more but all I can say is I wanted them to have a child but as long as it has happy ending.
Reviewer: aers20194 (Signed) · Date: July 30, 2009 04:25 PM · On: Chapter 20: 5, 4, 3, 2, 1
"Bella grasping onto a tree branch in the woods, her hair wild in the breeze. She'd be screaming my name as I claimed her from behind. Jacob would see and I would mouth ‘mine.' Fucker."
Mean! But the possesiveness is fucking hot
Reviewer: EternalDusk (Signed) · Date: July 30, 2009 03:58 PM · On: Chapter 24: Countdown to a Change
Aha uh-oh, he gon' kill herrr !! (;
Just kidding, this fic would SUCK if all of a sudden OOPS Eddie got a lil bit out of control and sucked her dry! This is my predictino of something that happens next:
Edward's teeth sunk into my neck like butter, effortless and easy. I gasped as they sank in, reveling in the eroticness of it all. The blood rushed through me as I felt the pull of blood to his mouth. He was tasting my blood, and that aroused me further. More pulls, and I was beginning to wonder if he was oka, but I knew Edward would stop. I trusted him with my life. My last registered thought was picturing an upset Carlisle as Edward had not given me the morphine, but that was before Edward's teeth left my skin, before the venom rushed through my blood, before the intense burning captured my soul. It angrily lashed out as it was contained in the barriers of my skin. I struggled to remember why in the world I was causing myself such intense pain, but the image of Edward waiting for me when it was over kept me from crying out and begging for death. He would be there, and I would be too-- forever.
Yeyyy I just made that up. Woot!
Reviewer: terriberryc (Signed) · Date: July 30, 2009 03:43 PM · On: Chapter 24: Countdown to a Change
So worth the wait. Chapter was amazing. Can't wait for vampire Bella!
Reviewer: ccf (Signed) · Date: July 30, 2009 03:24 PM · On: Chapter 24: Countdown to a Change
Wow. That was hot.
Reviewer: read_all_over (Signed) · Date: July 30, 2009 03:16 PM · On: Chapter 24: Countdown to a Change
Wow, so she's actually having the change. I've got to say, I love the way you chose for it to happen. It suits the story so well and made the change that much more special and poignant. Anyway, brilliant chapter! I can't wait to read more!
Reviewer: jagoodman (Signed) · Date: July 30, 2009 02:28 PM · On: Chapter 24: Countdown to a Change
Edward in leather- thats was HAWT. great chapter. loved the changing scene. it was done very well. i like the book tha bella gave him.
Reviewer: Jessica1971 (Signed) · Date: July 30, 2009 02:23 PM · On: Chapter 24: Countdown to a Change
OMG, the leather thing reminded me of the Black Dagger Brotherhood book!! Especially the "shitkickers". I loved the chapter. I could see Emmett eating that pancake with Bella :) And the bucket list comment.... well, I can see how she would say it without thinking, and I can see how it would upset him. If I were him I don't know if I would have been able to pull off the fantasy thing before talking about that.
So I guess because Bella wanted him to turn her when he came, there would be no morphine like Carlisle wanted. Not that you're following the book, but in BD Bella said that the Morphine didn't help with the pain, it just made it feel like she couldn't move. So maybe the lack of morphine is actually a good thing....
I missed reading this. I know you've been busy with RL and I hope you're having a blast at TwiCon. How many chapter do you see this being when it's complete?
If I've askd too many questions, feel free to just answer them on the thread since I'm sure others are curious, too!
Author's Response: The leather and shitkickers were a total homage to the Brothers--I just finished reading all seven books in about two weeks and am so in love with them that I could cry they're not real. God, Wrath. No, Rhage. No, Z. Oh God, I want them all. How many chapters: if I do what's in MY best interest, two more; if I do what the characters are likely to want me to do, 3-4. I REALLY want to get to some of my own (original) writing before the summer's all gone and I'm back in front of a classroom. But we'll see. I also have to finish the last 2 chapters of While You Were Gone. AAAAHHH! Thanks for reviewing!
Reviewer: onyx8514 (Signed) · Date: July 30, 2009 01:59 PM · On: Chapter 24: Countdown to a Change
wow. first of all bout time. lol. second of all, naughty boy for spanking her with her list but so hot i squealed. i love the making love and him biting her. it's like lolashoes' let your light shine. i think its sweet how she wrote him something for every hour. i can't wait to read it!
Reviewer: aylah50 (Signed) · Date: July 30, 2009 01:19 PM · On: Chapter 24: Countdown to a Change
As always, I love this story so much. I love the book she wrote for him, that is genius! I can't wait to see you take the story through her change! And I can't wait for you to really write the scene that Edward was fantasizing about - Her hair would be wild from the speed of her running and when she was done feeding, she would pull away, a feral look in her eyes and her lips smeared with blood. You truly are so talented - please keep writing! Oh and btw, of course I voted for you in the Bellie Awards!! :)
Reviewer: laced (Signed) · Date: July 30, 2009 12:45 PM · On: Chapter 24: Countdown to a Change
this was great u always leave me wanting more
Reviewer: Vampmama81 (Signed) · Date: July 30, 2009 11:57 AM · On: Chapter 24: Countdown to a Change
The wait for the next chapter is going to kill me HURRYY!
Reviewer: fabulous face (Signed) · Date: July 30, 2009 11:22 AM · On: Chapter 24: Countdown to a Change
when oh when?!
Reviewer: Madeline Sullivan (Signed) · Date: July 30, 2009 09:56 AM · On: Chapter 24: Countdown to a Change
Laura,
I still have to say, YOU ROCK! This is the best story I have read to date, and it keeps getting better. Despite my anticipation of the next chapter, I hate to see it come to an end. I have thoroughly enjoyed every minute of reading it. This is the BEST. CHAPTER. EVER.
Much love,
Maddie
Reviewer: NimrodDookie (Signed) · Date: July 30, 2009 09:29 AM · On: Chapter 24: Countdown to a Change
Great! This is so awesome! MOOORE!!:)
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