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Reviewer: AngelGoddess1981 (Signed) · Date: October 15, 2010 06:05 AM · On: Chapter 9: Games
I’d like to say I will eventually pick a favourite chapter…but they are all easily my favourites (so, basically you’re consistent :P)
This chapter was FUCK-HOT in so many unbelievable ways. I don’t even know where to begin…
I loved when Bella said she was so hungry she could eat a horse…then Edward joked about actually having had it and it wasn’t good! LOL!
This chapter was great (shocker). I loved the questions they asked each other. It was great to get a peek inside their minds.
And of course, because I have to quote:
“When we can, Isabella, I will have you on this piano,”
Guh. I…wha…did he…why not… GUH… Not only did he say he would take her on the piano (which was #21 on Bella’s list) but he called her ISABELLA. How fucking hot is that?!
“You showed me. I have to show you. You know, in the name of science.”
Saucy little vixen ;)
He closed his eyes and rested his forehead against my forehead. “Very much.” His voice was husky. “Do you like it when my fingers are inside of you?”
Oh my freaking God. He did not just ask that!
Me= :-O
Bella teasing Edward as she went up to have a shower…then he grabbed her and tossed her on the bed?! I was GOO…seriously. I don’t know that I will be able to walk. My legs are like jello.
And to learn that Edward is a fan of going commando… FUCK YES!
And, when she disrobed for the shower? His reaction to her new bra and panties was PRICELESS! LOL!
xoxo,
AG1981
Reviewer: AngelGoddess1981 (Signed) · Date: October 15, 2010 05:18 AM · On: Chapter 8: Slight Change of Plans
Another great chapter!
I loved Bella’s “conversation” with Carlisle. I loved his reassurance that she had nothing to be embarrassed about, and that it was actually mature of her.
Hot damn! There’s number twenty-one!
HELL YES!! OMG!
Man…it’s a good thing Edward can’t read Bella’s thoughts. Hee hee hee…
THEN…you go and pull out a sensible Emmett! SWOON! I’m glad Edward understood he was being ridiculous :P
And, the club. O…M…G…THE CLUB! How hot was that?! I mean, seriously… Not as hot as what happened in the Aston Martin, though. Am I right?? Am I??
xoxo,
AG1981
Reviewer: Mrs R-Pattz (Signed) · Date: October 15, 2010 05:12 AM · On: Epiclogue: A Million Tomorrows
Please, please, please write the sequel with Edward's list!!! Wow, this story is...well...I have no words :-) Two of my friends are now reading it and loving it!
MORE, PLEASE !!!
Reviewer: AngelGoddess1981 (Signed) · Date: October 15, 2010 04:38 AM · On: Chapter 7: Awkward
Aw, I was sad that Edward was pulling away a little. I get why, though. I do. It's just no fun. For anyone.
HOWEVER...that being said...HE'S A LITTLE PANTY STEALER!!
LMMFAO!! OMG! That was FANTASTIC!!
xoxo,
AG1981
Reviewer: albree (Signed) · Date: October 15, 2010 03:56 AM · On: Chapter 13: Teasing
Wow! This was HOT! I like animal Edward!
Reviewer: AngelGoddess1981 (Signed) · Date: October 15, 2010 03:45 AM · On: Chapter 6: Unexpected
Am I sounding repetitive yet? I feel like I am. I’d like to switch it up and tell you a chapter sucked…
LOL, okay, no I wouldn’t. But I feel the need to switch it up…yet I can’t.
The EPOV part of this chapter was sexy. Is that weird? I mean, I know y9ou must have thought it was sexy, or you wouldn’t have written it, right? But seriously… If you think about it…it SHOULD be creepy (well technically, SM was a little creepy by having a vampire who couldn’t sleep watch a human teenager sleep night after night…but whatever)
Anyways, it SHOULD seem creepy that he totally manipulated her while she slept by talking to her…but it wasn’t. At all. It was HOT.
And it was also funny when he asked if she had sweet dreams…and then more-so when Bella got all nervous.
Now, BPOV…
I don’t know that I even have the words… It was AH-MAAAA-ZING.
This was particularly hot:
I shook my head and tried to find that confidence I had had a moment ago. “I see…you got my…punishment.”
If possible his eyes darkened.
“Yes, but you lied.”
I was confused. “What?”
“You told me I wouldn’t like it.”
Then…you make it even hotter by adding:
“Harder, Bella. I would touch you harder.”
Are you TRYING to kill me?!
*groans* then…to fulfill number ten?? I did actually die. Just so you know…
xoxo
AG1981
Reviewer: AngelGoddess1981 (Signed) · Date: October 15, 2010 03:02 AM · On: Chapter 5: Consequences
LMFAO! You started this chapter off with a BANG! Jasper catching the scent of Bella’s panties had me ROLLING on the floor! OMGOMGOMG!!!
Jasper and Alice’s lovin’ was super sexy. I love those two.
And E’s POV had me dying!
IDK how you do it, but I bow down to you. I can’t wait to see what Edward has to say to Bella…and of course, what she has to say in return :P
Thanks for another great chapter!
xoxo,
AG1981
Reviewer: AngelGoddess1981 (Signed) · Date: October 15, 2010 02:42 AM · On: Chapter 4: Additions
OMG! EPOV! EPOV! Did you know the first half of this chapter was EPOV?!
*ahem* sorry…I was a little excited there…
I did notice one POV slip up early on though…right after Bella threatens him (weakly :P) you say “he rushed the words out…” ;)
I do love that she told him not to apologize, but he did so—but quickly with more to follow :P Sneaky bastard.
And he’s a swearing MACHINE. LOVE IT! And apparently, so does Bella. *giggles*
This:
“I’ll come as quickly as I can.” Her face blushed brilliantly and I looked at her curiously. I wasn’t letting her off the hook this time. “What?”
She was biting her bottom lip hard. I growled. “I swear, Isabella Swan, tell me what’s going through that beautiful head of yours right this instant.”
She pulled her shoulders back and took a deep breath. I hissed when she swatted me on the ass. “Not a chance, Cullen.” Then she slipped out of my arms, picked up the blanket, and calmly began folding it.
I watched her intently for a moment. She was specifically attempting not to look at me. I ran our conversation through my mind several times before my brain finally clicked. “I’ll come as quickly as I can.” The little vixen. I crossed my arms. Time to make her squirm. I struggled to make my tone innocent. “Bella?”
She finally allowed her eyes to move in my direction. “Hmm?”
“Coming agrees with you. You have never looked more ravishing than you did then, and now.”
I swear to god, you’re trying to kill me, woman…
Hee hee…Alice and Jasper “talking” to Edward…Loved that. Seems Bella’s not the only one who’s easily embarrassed :P
To do! Ha! To do: Edward!
LMAO! OMG! HAHA!
13) Whatever it takes to get him to say FUCK again
Oh! Even better:
14) Get him to talk dirty in general
The downside to that one is my brain may melt. So. Worth. It.
I don’t know if you realize it, but you ROCK!
My jeans felt so wet for a reason. I had removed my blue lace panties earlier. At Edward’s. And folded them up into a neat square. Which I left sitting on the middle of his huge golden bed.
My mouth LITERALLY dropped into a HUGE “O”… This. Was. AWESOME!
Oh, Bella… you saucy little thing.
Laura, I fucking love you…do you know that? This story is AMAZING. And I am disappointed in myself for not reading it until now…
xoxo,
AG1981
Reviewer: AngelGoddess1981 (Signed) · Date: October 15, 2010 02:13 AM · On: Chapter 3: Accomplice
This chapter was just delightful! (As if I’d expect any less :P)
I loved that Alice pulled over the car to talk to Bella… and OMG! HILARIOUS when she brought Jasper up. Talking about how Bella’s frustration led to Jasper feeling frustrated…LMMFAO! Bella’s humiliation was classic! LOVED IT!
EEEE! And the leather couch?! HELL TO THE YES!! And then to have Edward question “number nine?” LOL!!!!
And Emmett. I love me some Emmett. He’s such a smartass, and I wouldn’t have him any other way. I love that Bella stood up to him, and that even Rosalie thought it was funny.
I also love how you’ve managed to capture Edward and Bella’s love. He’s so sweet with her, and it takes me back to hating her for having him :P
Now..let’s get to the hotness that happened in the meadow, shall we?!
Bella…why you brazen little thing. Telling Edward to restrain her against the tree…HOLY DAMN!
This:
I felt his hands leave mine. But when I went to lower my hands as well, he stopped me. “Keep them up against the tree.” It was a command, roughly spoken. I almost lost it right there. I whimpered and his mouth twitched.
I DIED… Seriously.
Then…HE CURSED! LOVE LOVE LOVE!
Shit…I should just quote that whole tree-bit…I loved it. I will likely go and read it again and again and again and…well, you get the idea.
Fantastic chapter! But, poor Eddie. Guy has no one but himself to blame for the epic blueballs :P
Xoxo,
AG1981
Reviewer: penelopepm (Signed) · Date: October 14, 2010 04:45 PM · On: Chapter 6: Unexpected
HOT HOT FUCKN HOT- IM LIKN IT
Reviewer: albree (Signed) · Date: October 14, 2010 12:48 PM · On: Chapter 8: Slight Change of Plans
uhm, can't wait to read next chp but first me and Mr. Albree need to take care of something! lol
Reviewer: albree (Signed) · Date: October 14, 2010 10:59 AM · On: Chapter 6: Unexpected
Oh my frackin' gawd, I need a shower. Damn.
Reviewer: albree (Signed) · Date: October 14, 2010 09:55 AM · On: Chapter 4: Additions
hawt
Reviewer: albree (Signed) · Date: October 14, 2010 09:33 AM · On: Chapter 3: Accomplice
Oh my gawd that was h-o-t! This is my new favorite fic!
Reviewer: AngelGoddess1981 (Signed) · Date: October 14, 2010 08:23 AM · On: Chapter 1: Frustrated
HEY!
Okay, so I know I said MONTHS ago that I would read this, but then I got busy because I have this problem where I commit myeslf to multiple fics...which leaves me no time to actually READ anything. So, here I am. better than never, right?
Anyway...
This first chapter was GREAT! I loved how funny it was without being ridiculous, KWIM? And I think you conveyed her teenage sexual frustration PERFECTLY. I often wondered how Bella would feel after making out with Edward only to have him cock-block them both. :P
All of her little fantasies were awesome, and I loved her internal monologue...especially as she was imagining Edward having his way with her at her work with Mike watching...wait...what? LMAO! So great!
And I'm glad she was able to find her release. Our poor girl deserves it! I can't wait to see what hotness awaits from here on out!!
Moving on!
xoxo,
AG1981
Reviewer: albree (Signed) · Date: October 14, 2010 08:16 AM · On: Chapter 1: Frustrated
Nice start. It's grabbed my attention. Onward to chapter 2!
Reviewer: Margaritaville (Signed) · Date: October 10, 2010 12:29 PM · On: Chapter 10: Control
Great job!!
This is awesome :)
you did well in making it all realistic.
Reviewer: Mrs R-Pattz (Signed) · Date: October 09, 2010 06:45 AM · On: Chapter 15: The Weekend, Part I
I've been reading this ALL day! And, for the first time ever I listened to the Nine Inch Nails song, Closer, and absolutely love it! I've even posted it on Facebook to see what my friends think to it. Your story is by far the best Twilight fan fiction I have read...I guess it's another late night for me...WOW !!!
Reviewer: Mrs R-Pattz (Signed) · Date: October 08, 2010 09:54 PM · On: Chapter 8: Slight Change of Plans
WOW!!! I have been reading this all morning and can't stop...I'll have to pull myself away to eat at some point! :-)
Reviewer: Mrs R-Pattz (Signed) · Date: October 08, 2010 07:47 PM · On: Chapter 4: Additions
OMG, this is absolutely brilliant...I can't read it fast enough!
Reviewer: rhoupt11 (Signed) · Date: October 08, 2010 03:57 PM · On: Epiclogue: A Million Tomorrows
awesome! I read it twice and loved it both times.
Reviewer: MoeMoe712 (Signed) · Date: October 05, 2010 10:32 AM · On: Chapter 25: The Book and the Change
This is my favorite chapter, by far. Not only because it’s holy hot double damn, but because it truly captures how the Cullen family would support each other and Bella at this time. Your description of the family gathered around Bella singing happy birthday was both unbelievably beautiful and heart wrenchingly sad. I held my breath and released a tear when you wrote about the sacrifice Jasper had made to help Bella, and felt true anguish through the realization that Jasper was sacrificing himself out of love for Bella and penance for what he had done...that bit really got me. You have done a better job at depicting Bella’s transformation through the eyes of Edward (who got so lost in Breaking Dawn, don’t you think?) and his family then SM ever could have. The details you included and the style in which they were written were both true to the original works and entirely relevant to the characters of each individual (mind the liberties you have taken with Rose, which I quite enjoy apart from the original works). You wrote an insightful and beautiful side to this story that I will always remember as being vital to the twilight stories as a whole. Anyway, these stories have been unbelievable, truly, and you have done the twilight books a great tribute, lusciously filthy and sweet. Thank You.
Reviewer: tinkerbellpatten (Signed) · Date: October 04, 2010 06:32 PM · On: Chapter 1: Frustrated
Chapter one is a perfect start, captured my interest immediately. I've read this fic twice already and am finding I enjoy it more each time I read it. Completely entertaining, absorbing and fun. No dull sections... how do you manage that? Thank you!
Reviewer: Eddica (Signed) · Date: October 04, 2010 05:48 PM · On: Chapter 6: Unexpected
soooooooooooo hot!!!
so jealous of Bella right now
Reviewer: Eddica (Signed) · Date: October 04, 2010 07:58 AM · On: Chapter 1: Frustrated
can't wait to read the rest, good job!
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