Things are getting interesting! I like how you showed Jasper and Alice being intimate, I think it added a good layer to the story. 

The idea of him tasting her blood reminds me of a crackfick I read once... 

I wonder how Edward will react to the panties on his bed...

Oh Alice... I seriously thought that Edward was going to give in to her! Good Chapter!

OMG that was one of the best Outtakes I've ever read.  I'm not sure if you are still checking these notes or not but I wanted to let you know that I cried at a few points of this outtake.  It was touching reading that Edward finally got a look back at his "human" life.

Thanks again.

 

I love how you are sticking with cannon character traits, thank you for that. So many of these type stories stray from what makes Edward and Bella Edward and Bella. I am very much enjoying your story AND I am very much enjoying the Alice/ Jasper input as they are my favorite secondary characters.

Yay, I do LOVE me some Jasper POV. Thanks for that. ~M

Okay, I'm all for biting cock, but biting a rock cock with him thrusting... it just sounds like a recipie for disaster (and maybe even a lost tooth or two). And when your teeth graze against the rock [shudder] it would be like nails on a chalkboard... a very tasty chalkboard... but definately shiver worthy.

again, no finished yet, but OMG ive been waiting so long for someone to write about edward asking the cullen men for advice :D also, laughed out loud at emmett trying to rearrange his face. i meant to mention on the last chapter, that rose's 'i didnt know you had it in you' has got to be a fave line of mine

i havent finished this chapter yet but simply had to review - as i read more of your work i am amazed and jealous at how good your writing is! i love how you manage to thread complex plotlines, capture characters and get inside my head all at once! i love how you remember all the little details in the book as well - you are an incredible writer :D

sorry i havent been reviewing chapters - i got carried away with the story! i no longer care that edward and bella are ooc, because alice, jasper, emmet and carlisle are perfect!!! i love the bit with carlisle - gonna keep reading now - congrats again though

I just discovered Twilight Fan Fiction about a month ago, and I can't get enough.  I signed up for Twilighted two days ago and this is the 1st story I read (picked it off the "Top 10 Favourite Stories") and it is definitely my favourite so far!!!  Mostly I loved the changes you made from the books, which are all things I didn't particularly like in the books.  Of course they would try "other stuff" before just going at it (seeing each other naked for the FIRST TIME???) on their honeymoon.  Of course Edward would let Bella have some input on the car that he buys her.  Of course they would USE A CONDOM (not for fear of pregnancy as it's logical that they wouldn't think it's possible, but because his venom could harm her).  I liked that Bella got to see Charlie before "going to college" as planned.  I liked that Bella talked to Carlisle about the sex thing.  I LOVED that Jacob imprinted on someone other than Bella and Edward's child.  I loved that the subject of humans having their period around vampires was addressed.  I loved that Edward changed Bella as a part of lovemaking, rather than by injecting a huge needle of his venom directly into her heart when she was ripped open and about to die.  I loved that Jasper was able to feel that Bella was suffering during the transformation, even though she couldn't move because of the morphine.  I loved that Bella wasn't able to be around humans right away when she became a vampire.  I could go on, I'm sure there's tons of stuff I'm not remembering right now, but this story is awesome!!! I will totally read your other work.  Thanks for The List!!!

Becca

P.S. I've been insprired... I'm going to have to try playing their little "game" with my husband ;)

love the ending - i'd love to know if edward caught it through alice's thoughts or she hid it. either way - congrats. i'm not sure that this is quite the same bella and edward that meyer created, but i love it nevertheless. congratulations, you're a great writer :)