of course this is getting hotter and better, i love the fact the edward i come more comfortable with himself.  and i love the outing they go on.  very hot and romantic

 

You do write them so beautifully and HOT!  I love reading it!

I felt like watchin vampire porn...is that even possible?.  The way you wrotte this is very intense but I find it very appeling for their relationship...so full of love and desire.  This was good work, I just don't know how you have such naughty ideas. Jeje.

You are such a talented author!  I really enjoyed reading your story.   Your writing reminds me a lot of SM except you include things that we are all curious about.  Keep writing, I have a feeling you will be very successful and go places!!

Holy fuck!

That was the most erotic thing I have ever heard. The hairs on the back of my neck wre...oh my god...fucking amazing. If my husband does half of what Edward does to Bella I will die a happy woman... content... sated... satisfied.

Now I'm off to have a cold shower...LOL.

This was really the best chapter ever!  Its so nice to finally be able to read all the things I really wanted to happen in the books.  To be able to see all of these ideas that Ms. Meyer never got around to, but that we all were desperately hoping for.  I know her young adult audience would never be ready for all of this goodness, but there rest of us were just sitting here, waiting and waiting!!  Because of you, we need wait no longer :-) THANK YOU

Keep up the great work--can't wait to find out what happens next!!

hmmm will edward hold out till their wedding day if bella kepps this up you actually pant a picyure with your words that i can see in my mind this last chapter Bravo

Wow, ya know I really didn't think it would seem right to imagine Edward giving up so much control. I am pleasantly surprised!

there should be a rating above 10

I really, really love your story! Yours is the first fanfic I've read that has retained the true characters of Bella and Edward as SM created them. You've managed to not only retain their essential character makups, but also develope them even further.

Thank you so much for writing about all the intense sexual discovery portion of their relationship. I enjoyed SM's series very much, but was very annoyed at the excessive amnt of mental self torture she wrote about(you have just enough, without going overboard), by both Bella and Edward, and even more annoyed that she didn't include more details of the few sexual scenes she "almost" included. It really sucked that she set up the scene just up to a point and then jumped directly to Bella's afterglow and Edward's self loathing. She wasn't brave enough, IMHO, to tackle the mysteries and intracies of how they would tackle and overcome the unique aspects of a human and vampire having sex (and both of them for their "first time" too, to add to the complexity) in all it's forms.

Kudos to you for having the guts to do so, and also for writing it exceptionally well. Thanks for sucessfully writing in enough animalistic lust and dirty talk to make it real, without going overboard into vulgarity. Most writers tend to fall into the vulgarity trap and ruin otherwise good stories.

I went looking for fanfic for this exact purpose -- To fill in the gaps that SM left out. Even if she had chosen to write more for the "adult" part of the young adult genra, I doubt that her treatment would have been better than yours.

I'm glad that I'm late to the Twilight party(and to fanfic), so I was able to read the entire series rapidly, and then found lots of fanfic already out here to discover (it would be torture to have to wait for your next chapter, so I'm glad that I have 17 chapters of your story to enjoy before I have to wait for more (or is it complete at 17?).

O.K. I've halted my reading for as long as I can stand. Gotta get on to the next chapter!!

dells

Author's Response:

I couldn't not respond to such a wonderfully thoughtful review.  I am so glad you're enjoying.  I came to the party a little late myself--didn't read Twilight for the first time until two weeks before Breaking Dawn was to be released last August.  So I went pretty seamlessly from the books into fan fiction as well, specifically because I was so frustrated by the lack of sexuality in the books.  So glad you're enjoying (it will go beyond 17 chapters for sure, just not sure how much--it's already a much bigger beast than I ever initially imagined, and people keep talking me into writing further and further into their relationship!)  LOL

Oh My Edward!!!!   seriously..  you are amazing...   I love you for writting this..  it is what every twi-fan has ever wanted!

OMG.  that was.  Amazing.  like.  I dont even know.  wow......

Wow, this says all the things that leave me hanging in other stories!