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Reviewer: vittra (Signed) · Date: November 12, 2009 06:34 AM · On: Blissful Bargains (OneShot)

I read this, but can't honestly say that I liked it much.  The dialogue feels forced and somewhat unnatural, and it's difficult to tell who's speaking since they seem to have no individual character voice.  The other issue is that this really goes nowhere, I know that that's what fluff is, but there's no introduction to the conversation, and no real resolution at the end.  It repeats the same arguments made endlessly in the books.

This is basically how the books are written, they have all the same problems of flat dialogue and endless padding, but I read fanfiction over the books for a reason.

Sorry, please continue writing but work on style and feeling, perhaps moving a bit further out of canon would help and would let you play with the characters more.

Reviewer: humorme17 (Signed) · Date: April 14, 2009 01:25 AM · On: Blissful Bargains (OneShot)

mucho sugary sweetness. a much needed break from the serious fics out there. :)



Author's Response:

'preciate your feedback :)

Reviewer: georgiagirl (Signed) · Date: March 01, 2009 01:03 AM · On: Blissful Bargains (OneShot)

I think we all need more fluff too!!! its cute!



Author's Response:

I know 6 years late, but thanks for reviewing (a looonngggg time ago.)

:) MORE FLUFF!!!

Reviewer: agiismsxx (Signed) · Date: January 03, 2009 07:57 PM · On: Blissful Bargains (OneShot)

=] Too cute. 

you did a great job!! 



Author's Response:

thank you! (I know YOU only REVIEWED this so nicely, like ten years ago.) Better a late thanks than never!

:)

Reviewer: historicvampirelover (Signed) · Date: January 03, 2009 06:18 PM · On: Blissful Bargains (OneShot)

Very sweet conversation.

Nice job!



Author's Response:

it was a needed conversation. Thanks for reviewing :)

Reviewer: Jamieson (Signed) · Date: January 03, 2009 02:58 PM · On: Blissful Bargains (OneShot)

This was pretty good, especially for your first!  There were a few lines that stuck out at me as a little odd/off for the characters to say (at least, at this point in the series where your story takes place), but I still enjoyed it thoroughly.  And you're absolutely right - you can never have enough fluff!  :-)



Author's Response:

Thanks much, I know I had been slightly off on some points, but it was not distracting. Thanks for reviewing it! Fluff is the greatest :D

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