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Reviewer: letmesign (Signed) · Date: May 30, 2009 11:05 PM · On: Intermission: Electrocution
Oh man. Your writing. It makes me...wow. Such an amazing chapter. Alice, what a shooting star. I love her! I hated what she went through, of course, but her righteous, vicious love for Jasper and for Bella is just phenomenal. I absolutely adore how you worked her in and transformed some things. I'm so unbelievably excited for their reunion in the next chapter. I've recommended you from my own story, so I hope you are getting some new readers. Can't wait for a new update!
Reviewer: nwalto (Signed) · Date: May 30, 2009 10:59 PM · On: Intermission: Electrocution
Beautifully written chapter. Explains a lot. Really appreciate the care you are taking with all the characters and their individual atonements.
Please write again soon. We need to see the two of them make each other whole!
Reviewer: CherBella (Signed) · Date: May 30, 2009 10:15 PM · On: Intermission: Electrocution
You HOPE you got it right? I am just in awe of your writing! The whole description and tale of Edward discovering the venom throughout the house and then Alice and her story and her emotions and Edward's emotions...all so incredibly real and captivating and heartwrenching.
Wonderful wonderful job! And I'm so glad to see another chapter for this story. I hope you will continue because it is one of the best stories out there.
Reviewer: shadesofgray (Signed) · Date: May 30, 2009 09:11 PM · On: Intermission: Electrocution
Oh Alice. When will she see Bella again? Soon, I hope. Don't make us wait so long, ok? You have some of the most beautiful words I have ever read. It's a shame to keep them from us.
Reviewer: KnoKnayme (Signed) · Date: May 30, 2009 09:07 PM · On: Intermission: Electrocution
beautiful
Reviewer: enthralled (Signed) · Date: May 30, 2009 08:53 PM · On: Intermission: Electrocution
AMAZING chapter...absolutely one of your best so far! The story of Alice and her final days as a human - heartbreaking. And her taking care of Victoria...brilliant!
Glad to see a new chapter...made my whole night!
E
Reviewer: dazzled eyes (Signed) · Date: May 30, 2009 08:45 PM · On: Intermission: Electrocution
Thanks for updating! I love this story. It's great that Alice killed Victoria and I love the reasoning. I love the back story, but please do not hint at sex then interrupt with story again. You kill me. I hope they get some quality time soon.
Reviewer: Lee Cullen (Signed) · Date: May 30, 2009 08:37 PM · On: Intermission: Electrocution
"He craved her absolution - to do his penance between her thighs."
You floored me with that phrase. Just... breathtaking.
Reviewer: slg (Signed) · Date: May 30, 2009 08:00 PM · On: Intermission: Electrocution
It has been a while since your last chapter-I forgot how talented of a writer you are and how incredible this story is----I missed it!
You have to know that you got it right!
I think this story is tied for my all time favorite fanfic!
Reviewer: bitemegirl388 (Signed) · Date: May 30, 2009 07:58 PM · On: In Your Eyes
LMAO the environmentalists at the lodge are "polluted." That's a hilariously awesome assignment of adjectives.
I LOVE this story, especially Doggie!Jake.
XD
-bmg
Reviewer: BellaS (Signed) · Date: May 30, 2009 07:48 PM · On: Intermission: Electrocution
poor alice. At first glance, I would have never pegged Alice to destroy Victoria, however, it makes sense that she would be the fiercest protector of the family since she could never recall her human one.
Reviewer: denisehawes (Signed) · Date: May 30, 2009 07:47 PM · On: Intermission: Electrocution
it was good. is the story over? i was hoping they would have somme lemoning goodness .
Reviewer: enchantedreader (Signed) · Date: May 30, 2009 07:46 PM · On: Intermission: Electrocution
It doesn't matter how long you take because you always come up with a gem of a chapter. Well worth the wait. I love that Alice was the one to kill Victoria. It seems fitting somehow. You had the two people who loved Bella the most outside of Edward (Alice and Jake) help keep her safe.
As always, I can't wait to read your next installment. You truly have a gift with words. You write beautiful phrases without it being hokey or sounding like you're trying too hard. I think all fanfic writers should be required to read your stuff before they try to write in such a descriptive way.
Reviewer: squarepancake (Signed) · Date: May 30, 2009 07:46 PM · On: Intermission: Electrocution
Poor Alice. I find the motivation to not just protect her family but also to demonstrate that their strengths can be used compelling.
Reviewer: artsyfartsy (Signed) · Date: May 30, 2009 07:31 PM · On: Intermission: Electrocution
Thank you for another amazing chapter--I loved it!
Reviewer: JMCullen (Signed) · Date: May 30, 2009 07:25 PM · On: Intermission: Electrocution
It was well worth the wait. I absolutely loved it! I can not wait for the next update!!!
Reviewer: earelen (Signed) · Date: May 30, 2009 07:15 PM · On: Intermission: Electrocution
As usual, I enjoyed this chapter a lot! Go Alice!! And shame on Charlie for not even trying to look for Bella! I'll be looking forward to the next chapter!
Reviewer: be_my_escape (Signed) · Date: May 30, 2009 06:57 PM · On: Intermission: Electrocution
Thank you for finally updating. I've missed this story.
Poor Alice. I loved the flashback/memory. I'm glad it was Alice who killed Victoria.
Can't wait to read more. Please update soon.
Reviewer: spiritbard1 (Signed) · Date: May 27, 2009 06:34 AM · On: This Morning I am Born Again
Hi,
I've been reading this story and was wondering when you might be posting again. I'm hooked ")
This is well written and entertaining, I would like more please?
Looking forward to an update.
Author's Response: It's in the queue. Hang on!
Reviewer: blueeyeddemon (Signed) · Date: May 23, 2009 06:14 PM · On: Shangri-La
Loved the end of this chapter, it's good that Alice got some vengence for Bella. I like your version much better than the actual books. You made Bella so much more mature. I wont be able to read the Twilight series now and think of anything other than the Childishness of Bella and the what might have been. She's so much more beautiful in yours too. I love Jake dog and that you only involved the werewolves at the beginning and didn't have them slobbering all over her like you see in most New Moon AU's. My favorite scene was the night in Alaska when Edward and her met again. The whole balcony scene was amazingly well done. The fly trapped in the amber was a perfect representation of Bella's life up to that point. Its perfect how your not making Bella beg for immortality, making her actually think about it. It would be so uncharacteristic of this new and improved Bella to beg Edward to bite her at the first opportunity. I loved the bottle cap symbol, its so heartfelt that he kept it. But to give away the only physical memory he had of her, with only a slim hope of their love being rekindled truly showed the better side of him. You got Alice's personality just right. I wish I had been with her beating the shit out of him too. Also great was how Emmett broke his jaw. That too I wish I had done. Great job, keep up the good work as soon as you can.
BlueEyedDemon,
Phoenix.
Reviewer: kelmikmag (Signed) · Date: May 18, 2009 05:54 PM · On: Shangri-La
Wonderful! REALLY looking forward to more! Keep writing!
Reviewer: rah777 (Signed) · Date: May 16, 2009 02:59 AM · On: Shangri-La
Very much looking forward to more installments.
Reviewer: rah777 (Signed) · Date: May 13, 2009 04:49 AM · On: Shangri-La
Please keep writing this lovely story. Really enjoying the characterisations of Edward and Bella.
Reviewer: Wallace (Signed) · Date: May 11, 2009 06:32 PM · On: Showdown at the Cullen Corral
I like the violence directed toward Edward. You really showed how loosing Bella affected the "whole family."
Reviewer: candycane323 (Signed) · Date: May 10, 2009 07:07 PM · On: Shangri-La
GREAT fic. I love this Bella!
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