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Reviewer: Padme1899 (Signed) · Date: February 12, 2009 03:52 PM · On: Chapter 8: Reunions, Part III

So sweet... Awesome writing as usual...I got all choked up for a minute...I was wondering what happened to Jake...that was my favorite part...their re-union.



Author's Response:

Yes--Jake was not forgotten.  Bella just needed time.  I liked how she made it clear she would brook no interference with her reunion with him.

Reviewer: madasabrush (Signed) · Date: February 12, 2009 03:47 PM · On: Chapter 8: Reunions, Part III

I was just going to bed and then this update came in.  Damn damn I just had to stay up and read it.

So glad Jake got his reunion, he deserves it.  I have an oul soft spot for him, so I do.

And Edward deserves to suffer a bit more for being such a git. I hope you're not going to be letting him away too lightly, a few more slaps in his direction will soften his cough for him ;-)

Brilliant..as always...NEXT!



Author's Response:

Glad you liked the balance of the reunion with Jake and Bella working through her anger at Edward.  Thanks!

Reviewer: xoTinyxo (Signed) · Date: February 12, 2009 03:47 PM · On: Chapter 8: Reunions, Part III

awww I feel bad for Edward.  Well, not that he deserves it easy after what he did, but still... i feel for him ...im such a sucker for love lol. Its great for Jake tho! he always got the short end of the stick in the book.  its nice that he's being appreciated now... it makes me wonder if ur gonna have bella fall 4 jake ... not that i would object ... but im team edward ... lol :) Can't wait for the next chapter ...



Author's Response:

NONONONONO.  This is a ExB story.  But that doesn't mean, in my book, that Bella shouldn't have the opportunity to acknowledge, communicate, and work through her anger and trust issues with Edward.  For me, in the books, they never did the hard work of actually working through what happened.  If you're going to spend eternity with someone, I just think you would have to trust them implicitly.  And that means things will be a little messy before they're resolved...

Reviewer: LovesSparkles (Signed) · Date: February 12, 2009 03:45 PM · On: Chapter 1: The Meadow

oooh this is a really cool idea. I can't wait to see what happens next!



Author's Response:

Thanks--stay tuned!

Reviewer: twogoods (Signed) · Date: February 12, 2009 03:43 PM · On: Chapter 8: Reunions, Part III

That was a sweet reunion. Also, I'm glad Bella wasn't just a pushover like in the real NM. SHe should be pissed, but she kissed Edward back (she's may be pissed, but she's not stupid:)

I'm really interested to see where this goes. Keep going!!



Author's Response:

I like that line:  she may be pissed, but she's not stupid.  That's win.  Besides, angry kisses (and other things) can be quite, um, stimulating anyway.  Ahem.

Reviewer: BloodRedNight (Signed) · Date: February 12, 2009 03:41 PM · On: Chapter 8: Reunions, Part III

Good chapter    I am glad she didnt flat out forgive Edward    he needs to suffer for what he did.



Author's Response:

Maybe just a little bit, anyway!

Reviewer: littlebit (Signed) · Date: February 12, 2009 03:28 PM · On: Chapter 8: Reunions, Part III

I'll be damned! This is the first story where I actually like Jake. Even in the books he made me ill, but here I really LIKE him. I don't feel sorry for him. Its not pity. I LIKE him. That is a feat in itself!

Great job on the Story! I can't wait for the next chapter.



Author's Response:

Wow--that's cool.  I wasn't necessarily going for a particularly sympathetic Jake.  I have just really been trying to imagine what he'd be thinking and feeling in this situation.  And, at this point in the books, Jake was still generally a good guy type character.  He hadn't yet started being the manipulative douche that he turned into later in the books.

Reviewer: angelicwish (Anonymous) · Date: February 12, 2009 03:17 PM · On: Chapter 8: Reunions, Part III

Aww I love your Jake, I'm so glad they had their reunion! It almost brought tears to my eyes, but that's because I like a world where Bella and Jake can be friends, with none of that romance crap haha.

The Alice and Bella moment by the creek was absolutely beautiful.  Thank you so much for that.



Author's Response:

Friendship, yes; romance, no.  Just to be clear!  Glad you liked Alice and Bella.  In the books they're emphasized as being like sisters, but then it seems mostly Alice is either dressing Bella or running interference for Edward.  I think they deserve some moments just of their own that build their separate relationship with one another.

Reviewer: just1morechapter (Signed) · Date: February 12, 2009 03:12 PM · On: Chapter 8: Reunions, Part III

I liked this chapter. Answered a lot of questions. I'm glad Charlie is going to be okay. I am anxious to see what Sam has to say. I would love to see Edward have to court Bella now that she is a vampire. He didn't really get to give himself over while she was human, you know, always kinda wanting to kill her and all. I hope she makes him work for it, not angry at him all the time, but hard to get.

Continue to love this story. You are doing an amazing job.

Thanks!



Author's Response:

Thanks--you commented on a couple of important things here and I appreciate your perceptiveness!

Reviewer: kimpy0464 (Signed) · Date: February 12, 2009 03:08 PM · On: Chapter 8: Reunions, Part III

One other thing I forgot:  I always watch the side of my page to see how much more of the chapter I have left to read, and it bums me out royally when I realize it is almost over. Sigh. And I have to agree with madasabrush, don't forget "The List!!" I guess you've just created a bunch of Laura Cullen whores in all of us!!  (Not that that is a bad thing, mind you...)  Lovies to you and your works!! :)



Author's Response:

I think we all watch that sidebar and think, no, no, it can't be over YET!  Not to worry, The List will not be forgotten.  I'm trying to get 1-2 chaps out for each story per week.  Which is doable right now because I'm still home sick.  Now, when I'm back to work in a week or two things will likely slow down.  RL can be a real bummer like that!  "Laura Cullen whores"--I love the sound of that!

Reviewer: kimpy0464 (Signed) · Date: February 12, 2009 03:00 PM · On: Chapter 8: Reunions, Part III

Oh, now, I cannot refuse you a review when you beg like that!!  First, I have to admit, I'm purely an Edward/Bella girl, so I didn't really mind that Jake hadn't had his reunion...I like Jake, just not Jake with Bella...having read the JPOV section, however, I readily acknowledge that it needed to be written, so well done there.  Second, I am really grateful, though, that you allowed Bella to be angry with Edward; I always felt she needed her "You Oughta Know" by Alanis Morrisette moment, and boy did you ever give it to us! And Edward!  I'm still feeling angsty over where this will all lead for Bella and Edward, but I do have faith that you'll make it all work out in the end...right?  Right?  And finally, I think you made a very true choice in empowering Bella; I always felt like her separation from Edward made her stronger, better, and more self-confident, even if it wasn't always evident to her in the book.  So, well done, as always, I'll keep the faith, and will faithfully review each of your most anxiously awaited chapters!  Mwah!



Author's Response:

I really appreciate this thoughtful review.  I like your song choice there too--great fit with where Bella is.  Not to worry, this is an ExB story, so...

Reviewer: Siamecho (Signed) · Date: February 12, 2009 02:58 PM · On: Chapter 8: Reunions, Part III

Thanks for the update! I liked the re-union without the any outside influence (other than adult cullens)



Author's Response:

Yeah--they needed their moment for sure.

Reviewer: notmyself (Signed) · Date: February 12, 2009 02:52 PM · On: Chapter 8: Reunions, Part III

That was so much fun to read. I loved the Edward got handed his ass line by Emmett. You rock babe. Keep it rolling and make me happy, and ignore my stupid cliche comments. I'm not the brilliant reader. That's be you, love.

 

~Mia



Author's Response:

Yeah, so Emmett!  Glad you're enjoying!

Reviewer: madasabrush (Signed) · Date: February 12, 2009 12:35 PM · On: Chapter 7: Reunions, Part II

I've discovered a whole new obsession now with this story!  Astounding..yet again! I can totally believe this to be an alternate new moon, Adding it to favourites immediately!  update update!

...*whispers*...don't forget "the list" though ;-)



Author's Response:

Hi again--glad you like this one too!  The newest chapter was submitted on Wednesday night, so stay tuned.  And, don't worry, I won't neglect that other little story you're referring to!

Reviewer: Vanity Fair (Signed) · Date: February 12, 2009 12:33 PM · On: Chapter 7: Reunions, Part II

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Author's Response:

Ugh.  I'm so bummed you didn't love it.  XD

Reviewer: Vanity Fair (Signed) · Date: February 12, 2009 12:33 PM · On: Chapter 7: Reunions, Part II

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Reviewer: Vanity Fair (Signed) · Date: February 12, 2009 12:22 PM · On: Chapter 6: Reunions

I'm still loving it!!



Author's Response:

And that's still awesome!

Reviewer: Vanity Fair (Signed) · Date: February 12, 2009 12:16 PM · On: Chapter 5: Waiting

I still love it!!!! =-)



Author's Response:

So glad!

Reviewer: Vanity Fair (Signed) · Date: February 12, 2009 12:11 PM · On: Chapter 4: Revelations

iT'S GREAT! I love it!



Author's Response:

Thanks so much!

Reviewer: madasabrush (Signed) · Date: February 12, 2009 12:04 PM · On: Chapter 6: Reunions

ooohhh. FAB. FAB. FAB. I'm engrossed! On to the next one!



Author's Response:

Glad you're engrossed.  A good story should suck you in!

Reviewer: madasabrush (Signed) · Date: February 12, 2009 11:20 AM · On: Chapter 4: Revelations

can't believe you had so few reviews for so many reads up to this part of the story! Loving it so far, but then again everything you write is great!

I continue with baited breath!



Author's Response:

I know--my peeps made me drop to my knees and beg!  And I, of course, am not above doing so...

Reviewer: Cold Fire (Signed) · Date: February 12, 2009 07:09 AM · On: Chapter 7: Reunions, Part II

Whoa! FINALLY!! Edward and Bella are so cute together!

your story RRRROCKS man!! Well done! and update soon 



Author's Response:

Thanks so much!  Next chapter has been submitted!

Reviewer: kimpy0464 (Signed) · Date: February 11, 2009 11:26 AM · On: Chapter 7: Reunions, Part II

OK--you have me hooked on another of your stories (damn it!!)...I think the adjectives you used to describe their first kiss--all the mix of emotions they were feeling--was brilliant. Their dialogue is just so similar to what it would be in SM's world (except with nicely chosen additives, esp. the swearing! Yay!) Also well done was how you described Edward's being less gentle with her, her being more durable--magic.  New chapters, please?  



Author's Response:

Thanks for all of that specific feedback.  With the kind of passion SM described, I just always felt like their relationship would have been more physical (in all the good and bad ways) than she was able to portray it in a YM format.  I am working on the 8th chapter tonight (Weds) and will submit it later tonight or Thurs a.m.

Reviewer: kimpy0464 (Signed) · Date: February 11, 2009 10:59 AM · On: Chapter 6: Reunions

Sigh. So lovely, that reunion!  Thank you for that.  Just one eensie, weensie question: it says Bella lands on her bare feet from the couch, but I thought Alice put flat ankle boots on her after the bath?  Call me anal, but I tend to obsess the details....loved it!



Author's Response:

Hey there--you're the only one to catch that!  Yes, it says Alice picks out the ankle boots because she wants to avoid having to use Bella's hiking boots, but it never actually describes her putting them on.  In my mind, after Alice sorta hurt Bella with putting the jeans on after which Carlisle entered immediately, she didn't put the jeans on.  I much preferred the image of Bella awaking bare footed and flipping off the couch and landing bare footed.  So, you're right that there was a minor mistake there, but more by way of implication.  I love a careful reader!

Reviewer: kimpy0464 (Signed) · Date: February 11, 2009 10:41 AM · On: Chapter 5: Waiting

All righty, E is back, so that's good...I think, under these circumstances, his swearing is also very true to character.  It's all good.  Keep going...



Author's Response:

Yes, couldn't go without E.  I'm all about E myself, so writing a story without him doesn't hold as much interest for me.

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