Very echoey of New Moon. Very good read but I'm looking forward to when it all blows up really.  Masochist I know.*WC68*

I'm always dissapointed when I see 'Completed- No' but the plot was too good to resist and I just finished reading 'Power of Destiny' so I thought I'd give it a go. (No,sorry,I didn't review,I'm in too much of a rush to get onto the next chapter with completed stories but at least you'll get plenty of reviews with this one holding updates to ransom =])  Really enjoying so far,can't wait to read on.*WC68*

“I don’t want to be your friend! Do you get that?!”

Edward wants MORE than friendship, but Bella thinks he doesn't want her in his life.  Can't wait to see how this plays out.

“Please, don’t turn away from me again. Tell me what you’re thinking.” Edward turned then and I could see the pain and fear building in his eyes. “You can tell me anything.”

This was very sweet.  I'm enjoying their obviously close and loving relationship.

He moved once more to my neck and jaw and I moaned a little louder, letting his name fall from my lips. At that, Edward moved with more fervor and slid his hand under the waistband of my pants and underwear. I screamed at the feeling of Edward fingers circling my most private spot and felt my stomach start to tighten.

“God, Bella, I love you.” I could only kiss him and scream his name in response as I felt my entire body contract with my orgasm.

I have never been more glad to be cockblocked in my life.  It was hawt as all hell how you wrote it - but I'm glad you're such a tease and have left us with this.

“It’s very nice to meet you. My name is James.” I tried to get my legs to listen to my mind and walk away, but something in this man made me very afraid and he smiled like he knew it. “May I have your name?”

-Ew and creepy. 

The last thing I remembered was a pair of arms grabbing me around the waist before unconsciousness took me.

Ah... cliff hanger and I'm so glad that I don't have to wait to find out.

I'm greatly enjoying all the twists and the turns to this story!

 

Edward's been a mess without her, but he sure managed to make it worse the moment they speak again! Not the best Bday. Enjoying this story. 

Love what you are doing with these characters...

" I was in love with Isabella Swan "   Isn't that the crux of all of our obsession?  <sigh>

umm, should I  let you know where there are typo's remaining?

"“I think I told you that my parents died in a car accident just after I turned sixteen?” Emmett nodded. “Rosalie was nineteen and about to start her second year at NYU in the fall. She stayed long enough to make sure I was emancipated and then took off and never looked back. Our parents had money, so I was able to live comfortably. Still am.” I laughed without humor. I would have given all the money in the world to be able to change the past."

Poor Edward is very emotionally messed up.  I can see why he'd be fragile to the feeling of abandoning Bella considering his past.  I can now see what it was so difficult for him to do that.

Rosalie sounds great and I can't wait to meet her.  Good job.  I really enjoy how you depict Edward as an emotional being.  I am still loving that their relationship is progressing slowly and thoughtfully.

"To say that I was stuck between a rock and a hard place was an understatement. I was screwed."

Yes, very screwed!  Poor Edward.  It must be so hard for him right now.  I think it makes the story much better, taking your time with it and showing how well they fit together and how deeply they already love each other.  It helps the reader to have respect for both of them.

I think, perhaps, what makes this story so great is the supporting characters.  Alice and Emmett are truly fantastic.  They are lovable, real, and fleshed out.

Good job.

 

"“Edward, you can’t mean that.” I said nothing. “Fine, I’ll take over LitMag this week, but that’s it. You’ve got to separate yourself from her. You are the teacher, she is the student. Remind yourself of that every second. And her too if need be."

Good advice from Emmett.  Very well constructed guy talk.  Brief, to the point and with a resolution.  Very authentic!

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I cut her off because I didn’t think I would have been able to do it if I listened to her talk anymore.

“It’s Mr. Cullen, Bella.”

I watched as her face changed from confusion to comprehension. Her smile faded and she looked absolutely devastated. I braced myself. This was it. This was the end of my life."

I'm very proud of him for this.  It makes him a much stronger character for trying to keep her at a distance for her own good.  It doesn't make him appear weak and unprofessional for us giving in.

"I felt myself slump over on the couch and just let myself cry. I didn’t know how someone could feel so much pain without being physically hurt. I had never been more broken in my life and I knew that it was only going to get worse."

I'm glad you vocalise Edward's emotions.  Too many people portray unrealistically stoic men and I feel like it generates a perception that men aren't allowed to feel things and certainly aren't allowed to react to those feelings.  More authors should feel confidant in embracing such a view of masculinity.

Good job.

Love your first chapter. I'll favorite so I can come back for more...

I love this story!  I can't wait for more updates.  Please don't keep us waiting for long!

I'm glad to see you are back in the swing of things. This chapter was great and I enjoyed my read.

I'm so glad you updated this!!! I squealed with joy when I saw the email!

Great chapter! I think it had some intimate moments in it. It's the little things between Bella and Edward that make them intimate. Poor Charlie! To have Bella come home and then drop that! I got all teary when he got up and went over to her!

Can't wait for the next update!!! Thanks!