a great start, I love your writing

Again, wow. Your writing is phenomenal. It's hard to find a fic that maintains its story when a LOT of lemons are thrown in. I think you pulled it off perfectly.

I loved Bella and Edward's escape from and defeat of Laurent; it was really well-written. Some might say that the wording and feel of the paragraphs is too choppy during that part, but I think it presents as aspect of quick thinking and desperation that brings the reader into the action. And as for Leah's anger in this last chapter, I honestly didn't feel the tension from her character earlier in the fic. That being said, her hostility was a little surprising, but I think it fits well. I almost want to see some Bella/Leah backstory.

Another really great fic! I look forward to reading more of your stuff! (I think I recovered from my speechlessness...)

-A

Thank you for writing. I have enjoyed reading your story.

i am glad she is pregnant..maybe they wont run aroud now and stay with family in seattle and help charlie

i feel bad for alice...she cant be at her own brothers weddinb because of all the mess and edward talked to his mom like that when his mom is a therapist cant discuss that shit...he should know better,,,,i hope alice can get over this and can be close to bella even if jasper always will be a dickhead,,,and he is!

ok ,,,this is irritating,,,he would kill himself???that is fucking healthy!  suicide is not a freaking joke i know that personally and i think that is a fucking stupid thing for him to say....

He didnt seem overly concerned about his sister after how jasper treated her on the peir...i am sorry but he shouldve punched jasper...

Does jake know the stupid shit that jasper pulled with bella? he is a sick fuck with the replacing birth control pills thing,,,having her committed etc,,,,he needs to be gone by the end of this story,,,alice deserves better!

If they meet and jasper acts like an asshole about bella in fron of alice then edward better be that protective brother and hurt him!!!

What a bunch of shit...damn jasper!  How can he be mad that bella is sleeping with someone else? he chose to end it and moved on quite quickly pooe alice is being treated like shit,...if i was her i would leave him...and now that bella knows this ,,,wow

Wow what a freakin soap opera....i mean poor edward has had the worst love life ever.....either obsessive women or women that would rather get there rocks off then be in a relationship with him and then bella has all these ppl who love her,,,kinda weird,,,and then jasper barely knows alice and is already engaged to her after leaving his other fiancee,,,he falls in love at the drop of a freakin hat...i have never hated jasper in any story till now ...wow...

Well fuck! i knew that james was behind tanya's murder earlier...or his friend laurant but jasper wow....he met someone that quickly after bella pushed him away??? she was only 4 months preggers with their son and he already found alice? what a piece of crap he is...you dont get over someone that quick...and then she loses the baby and then kills herself because everything she had in her life turned to crap in such a short time...that is depressing.,,,i can see why she did it,...i hope edward punches him in the face ,,,,he may feel bad for what happened with bella but the fact that he was engaged to be married and had a kid on the way only to be with alice in that short amount of time .......he shouldve grieved that failed relationship a bit longer before jumping on alice

Omg JAsper is her fiancee....ex fiancee?  wow,,,didnt see that one,,,and he is fine with hurting her and moving on to edwards sister,,??? that is cold....what a douche and she was pregnant too?  yikes!  wait till edward and bella find out who eachother is,,,small world indeed

he cant seriously think that by telling his stupid ex to go to hell that he caused her to be raped??? i get guilt but she was the f@%* up not him....Already some serious action  between the two! woot woot!

i was a good story but i dont like the way it ended but other the that it was really good ty for taking your time to write this