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Reviewer: Sarsacia (Signed) · Date: May 05, 2013 11:56 AM · On: Chapter 6 - First Date

Overall I enjoyed the story. The only criticism I have is with Jasper's accent. It was inconsistent, and a little over the top. Being from Texas, I concede we have a tendency to drop our g's, ya for you, etc. In Jasper's dialogue though you had both your and yer in the same passage.

Author's Response:
Thanks... I'm glad you enjoyed the story.

As far as Jasper's "accent", it was "inconsistent" on purpose. I didn't want to overexaggerate his accent, which is why yer and your are in the same passage. In fact, I (personally) do this often with dropping the g's inconsistently and when saying ya and you in the same sentence. I guess I just thought it was more fun and a bit realistic.

I don't want to make his accent seem like he is uneducated, a "hick", or that he is stupid (overexaggerated). I wanted him to sound relaxed and layed back, not worrying about his dialect... just casually talking. I also wanted to give the reader the added feel of his drawl... to give the "feel" of being part of the story.

I actually asked for a lot of feedback on writing his accent before I posted it. Many thought how I did it was good and not overly done, like some other authors.

So, it was meant for fun, as well as not making him seem "slow" or "dumb".

Thank you for taking the time to review.

Bell :D

Reviewer: morphinekisses25 (Signed) · Date: July 26, 2012 09:37 AM · On: Chapter 6 - First Date

This is a great story and I would love to see it continued!

Author's Response:
Thank you. I am glad to hear that.

Unfortunately, at this time I am not sure if it will be continued, but please feel free to vote on my FFn profile if you would like it to continue.

I am working on an outline and a plot. With any luck, some of my MANY ideas till come together and I will be able to get some chapters written. However, I will write out several chapters before I post, rather than write and post because I don't want to keep my readers waiting long periods of time between each update.

Thank you so much for letting me know and reviewing. I really do appreciate each review.

Bell :D

Reviewer: Mandarae0611 (Anonymous) · Date: July 24, 2012 09:56 PM · On: Chapter 6 - First Date

I'm really enjoying this story! Can't wait to see what happens next!

Author's Response:
I'm glad you are enjoyed it.

If you want it to continue, please visit my FFn profile page and vote.

Thank you for taking the time to review and let me know. It means a lot to me.

Bell :D

Reviewer: morphinekisses25 (Signed) · Date: July 21, 2012 02:57 PM · On: Chapter 3 - Chance Encounters

First I want to say that I have really enjoyed this story. I think the Carlisle/Bella pairing is very underused. However I am very dissapointed. I only read completed stories.I have illnesses that cause memory and cognative issues and cant keep up with several and their updates and such, so reading only completed stories is the only way I can really enjoy fanfiction. This story was marked as completed and obviously isn't so I'm dissapointed in that. I really enjoyed the story line and though it was very well written. I'm going to try to keep track of it for updates, but suggest you switch it from 'completed' to 'in progress'.

Author's Response:
I'm sorry you are so thoroughly disappointed.

However this story is complete to the prompt it was written for on Fanfiction.net. Here is the link if you would like to read the rest from there: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/8170711/1/Waterfall_Beginnings

I did not realize I had it marked as complete on this site. Thank you for chastizing me on this overlooked error. I will be sure to rectify it now.

The reason it was marked as complete is I went to post all the chapters when I had them to post. However, this site only allows us to post one chapter at a time. At the time, I had posted all the chapters, I had marked it as complete and forgot to unmark it. Finally, I do not get notices that the chapter has posted until I get reviews, such as this, alerting me that my latest chapter has posted. I submitted this chapter several days ago and just now found out that it posted because of your review.

Once again, I apologize for your extreme frustration in regards to this minor failure.

Reviewer: gr8k8 (Signed) · Date: June 21, 2012 05:48 PM · On: Prologue (Nikkipattinson)

Oh, good. Only 5 chapters. Does that mean you plan to update regularly and quickly? I do hope so. I love Carlisle/Bella stories. However, the authors either quit before the story is finished (an Unexpected Lady) or they only update monthly (sometimes longer) as in Moonlit. But I remain faithful and hopeful as I check Moonlit everyday. Please be kind. I'll be watching for you.

Author's Response:
The updates are only quick right now because it was written as a gift exchange for a Facebook group. The complete story is on my fanfiction profile: http://www.fanfiction.net/~bell1

Feel free to read what is posted there....reviews are also welcome. ;D

Finally, there is a poll on my FFn profile, if you would like the story to continue forward....or not.

Thank you very much for taking the time to review and let me know your thoughts.

Bell :D

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