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Reviewer: Costa (Signed) · Date: May 20, 2012 01:21 PM · On: 6. She Decides
"Do you want to go on a date with me?" It was out on my mouth before I could stop it.(...) She had taken a sip of water and she had looked me in the eyes. "I'm not that kind of girl. Maybe someday. With someone. But not with you. Never with you. Sorry." Geez! Talk about cold water buckets.
'She smiled. "I am going to move in, and you will be the one to carry my things into my room."' WHIPLASH!! Ow, it hurts! What? She will move in after chapter four's little show? Duuuuh... 8-P
'I wore fancy-looking clothes because they were like me, but Nessie? She needed something more like... casual, but comfortable and easy. Something to describe her personality. And I could see that she didn't like wearing them. I was going to change everything. I was going to make her feel comfortable in her room and wearing her clothes.' Hey, hey, what was that? Do I see a chink in her black armor? P-)
Reviewer: Costa (Signed) · Date: May 19, 2012 01:43 PM · On: 5.She Makes A Scene
'Maybe there was blood. Maybe there wasn't. I couldn't tell, because in that moment, I cared about everything but blood. I watched the place she had been sitting, and as I replayed the previous minutes in my mind, I knew I had to do something.
(...)
'Why couldn't I forget what he did to me? It would've been so much easier if I could just get those images out of my mind. I wouldn't need to worry every minute of the day that someone would find out my secret; I wouldn't need to harm myself; I could be happy, just like anyone else.(...) Yeah, sure. Not only had he taken any happiness that had been inside me, but he'd taken away my tears, too.'
Ah, Bella and her good heart... She have my sympathy. And good luck trying to pass through the walls Elizabeth raised. She will need it. :-|
I can't imagine what happened to her. We hear about abused women that managed to heal, even after such horrible event. All I can think is that Elizabeth suffered something even worse. *shiver*
Author's Response: Thank you for reviewing!
Yeah, I tried to keep Bella in character as much as possible.
Elizabeth suffered something, I don't know if it's worse than abuse, but she sure thinks it is.
Reviewer: Costa (Signed) · Date: May 19, 2012 01:17 PM · On: 4.She Gets Angry
"It's your fault this happened to me."(...) "You're the damn reason why I wanted to get away from that fucking life." ????
'"If you're as idiotic as your both parents are, then yes." Elizabeth knew Bella was an idiot just by looking at her. She had almost hidden behind Edward, which meant she was shy. And her face was an open book, Elizabeth could see pretty much her entire being in her eyes.' Are you sure they were ever friends at some point? She is so poisonous... :-[
'"No, you won't," she whispered, then, before Edward could move, - without jumping or anyone shoving him - he flew like five miles and when he landed, a thunder literally slammed into the ground very close to him.' You mean, a lightning bolt? Geez, as if she wasn't bad enough with her tongue...
Author's Response: You read fast.
Yeah, those sentences are confusing, because it wasn't really Edward's fault, it was all Elizabeth's, but she needs to blame someone.
They were kind of friends... once. She may be poisonous, but she doesn't really hate anyone. She just wants to think she does, I have a reason for that, and you'll see why she's so poisonous.
Thank you for reviewing!
Reviewer: Costa (Signed) · Date: May 19, 2012 12:36 PM · On: 3.They Find Her
'My eyes fell on Jasper, and I exploded. "You! Why did you let her go? Why didn't you keep her here?" He looked taken aback at my outburst, but I couldn't care less, because I wasn't done yet. "You're going to get my sister back, right now! Unless, of course, you want me to kill you with my own hands!"' Rose is quite taken by Elizabeth, despite the fact she is... was... human. OOC indeed. :-]
'"You're not going to believe what we found!" Cam exclaimed, stroking my husky's head.' Silver is a very unusual dog, isn't it? To be able to be so close to a vampire like this... :)
'"Lizzie, be careful and don't forget what happened to Natalie. I don't want that happening to you, too." Puzzling...
"Last night, they all started to pack and didn't even tell me why. Seth and Leah didn't know anything either, and the leeches seemed like they were in a rush." Still leeches, huh? Looks like forty eight years of living together didn't mellow Jacob toward the Cullens. :-T
'In a blink, Alice was before her with an angry expression that Bella had never seen before. "Because it's none of your business. She's only coming here to fix some stuff with the family, and she'll leave as soon as it's done. You'll have nothing to do with her. You shouldn't even care." Then she was gone, leaving Bella completely and utterly confused.' Wow. :-o
"Oh," Elizabeth gasped, realizing that she had completely forgotten about the dog. "Jacob, that's my dog, Silver," she introduced them quickly. "Silver, this is my dog, Jacob." *chuckles*
Elizabeth's reunion with the Cullens. Such strange vibes in the air...
Author's Response: Thank you for reviewing!
Yes, I don't want to make them that OOC, but I just wanted Rosalie to be somewhat close to Elizabeth, you'll see why.
I think I will include a flashback about how Elizabeth and Silver 'met', maybe it clears up some things. And, just so you know, I don't understand why the animals shouldn't be able to be close to vampires. It doesn't say anything about that in the books, and, even though in many fics I've read it is mentioned that the Cullens can't be close to animals, I don't understand why. Can't they have a dog or something? I mean, having a dog would make them feel better, because they are 'monsters', but dogs don't care if you're good or bad, smart or dull, pretty or ugly, you just have to give him your heart and he'll give you his. And now I'm rambling. Anyway, the point is that they should have a dog. Or a cat. Or a freaking bunny.
What Christopher said is puzzling, but you'll find out about that later.
Yes, well, in my opinion, Jacob is a werewolf, and it's only natural for him to not like them, despite living with them forty eight years. He only agreed to live with them so he could find Elizabeth, anyway.
I guess the Alice scene is a 'Wow' scene. OOC much, but you'll see why I needed it.
That scene where Elizabeth introduces Jacob to Silver, I'm glad you found it funny. That's what I intended.
Thank you again for reading and reviewing! You totally made my day. Week, even.
Reviewer: Costa (Signed) · Date: May 19, 2012 10:51 AM · On: 2.He Stops It
'Flashbacks about what?'
Hmm... The past? You know, how she came to know the Cullens, the Wolves... And, mainly, the story of what is wrong with her. I mean, her actions, her attitude, it didn't came out of the blue, yes?
Author's Response: They won't necessarily come out as flashbacks, because I don't want to use them that much, but I am planning on writing a flashback about how she came to know the Cullens. As for the story of what is wrong with her, we will find that out, but I don't think a flashback would be good for that. I think I'll just have her explain it and then write it as an outtake.
Reviewer: Costa (Signed) · Date: May 18, 2012 04:28 PM · On: 2.He Stops It
'There was still a bit of venom left in her blood, enough to start the change, but I knew it wouldn't change her completely into a vampire, so I decided to stay with her and watch.(...) Elizabeth's transformation didn't take long, only three hours or so, but it was enough to make some differences. Her skin was paler, the small scar that had been on her neck was gone, and the way she moved was more graceful, more confident. Even the color of her eyes changed a bit.' Why didn't she change fully? Is she really human?
'I was supposed to be dead. But if I were dead, I wouldn't feel this kind of shitty pain. When you're dead you're not supposed to feel pain, unless you go to Hell. I didn't think I would be in Hell, though. I'd been a good girl, hadn't I?' Good girl? She is a bit delusional, isn't she?
You know, I feel like I began to watch the movie in the middle. I really hope for some flashbacks later.
Author's Response: Thank you for reviewing!
She didn't change fully because there wasn't enough venom left in her blood. And yes, she is really human.
Well, now that I think about it, she may be a bit delusional :)
Flashbacks about what?
Reviewer: Costa (Signed) · Date: May 18, 2012 04:03 PM · On: 1.She Wants It
Elizabeth seems to be a... very disturbed person. Will we know how she got to that point? So far, it looks like she hates Carlisle. Something very hard to understand, IMO. :-/
Author's Response: Thank you for reviewing!
I promise that all of your questions will be answered, eventually.
Reviewer: dkgors (Signed) · Date: May 08, 2012 05:21 PM · On: 6. She Decides
Ok, so Elizabeth doesn't love Jake and wont ever love him but uses him to do her bidding....Poor Jake is being held prisoner by the imprint and is stuck in a horrible situation with a selfish girl who only is interested in herself and her own happiness?
Ness wants to be her friend, is letting her stay in her room but Elizabitch only see how she can't possibly sleep in "that" room because it doesn't meet her standards and is already looking at ways to change it all while picking out which of Ness's clothes she will wear becauuse they soot her better......
I swear to god I'm trying to like this girl but I can't. I'm sticking with the story only to see if she ever redeems herself....lol
Take care, Dixie
Author's Response: Thank you for reviewing!
I understand why you can't like Elizabeth. It was kind of what I was going for.
But she will redeem herself, I promise.
Reviewer: carrieann83 (Signed) · Date: April 05, 2012 09:10 AM · On: 5.She Makes A Scene
WOW great chapters cant wait for the update it a little confusing but im sticking with it x
im thinking she's took some shit in froster care to be that bitter and maybe that's her problem she kept it in all these years.
Does jake know about her past ? xxx
Author's Response: Thank you for reviewing!
I'm glad you like it.
Jacob knows something about her past, we'll find out about that in chapter 6.
Reviewer: dkgors (Signed) · Date: March 24, 2012 09:30 AM · On: 5.She Makes A Scene
I can't wait to see what her deal is. Why she is so unhappy and hostal.
Take care, Dixie
Author's Response: Thank you for reviewing!
I promise you'll get the answer to all of your questions in future chapters.
Reviewer: dkgors (Signed) · Date: March 15, 2012 09:32 PM · On: 4.She Gets Angry
Well I see Mary miss sunshine was her wonderful self while meeting the new Cullen's! I can't wait to find out what the hell Elizabeth's problem is! lol
I'm so curious about her and Jake...Why arn't they in a relationship? How can she be so indifferent to him? Why doesn't she feel the imprint's pull? If she doesn't love Jake why doesn't she let him go, to be happy with someone else?
Take care, Dixie
Author's Response: Thank you for reviewing!
Elizabeth doesn't have a problem, it's just the way she is.
The sixth chapter is going to be Jacob POV, so I think it's going to answer all of your questions about their relationship and about the imprinting.
Reviewer: dkgors (Signed) · Date: March 09, 2012 09:54 AM · On: 3.They Find Her
I have to say I am soooo confussed by your story! lol So many questions!
Who is she living with now? Are they human? wont they notice that she doesn't seem to age?
I'm still not liking her very much, maybe as the story goes on I will start to like her. Also why did Seth and Leah move in with the Cullens.
Can we get a Jake POV? What does he thing of Liz?
The story is very interesting I can't wait to see where you take it.
Take care, Dixie
Author's Response: Thank you for reviewing!
I'm sorry your confused, but it a way, I wanted it to be confusing in the begining. Just not so confusing.
She's living with two vampires, Camille and Christopher, and they know everything about her past with the Cullens. I will explain that, too in future chapters.
She's meant to be unlikeable, at least in the begining, but I think you will start to like her as the story goes on. At least, that's what I hope.
Seth and Leah moved in with the Cullens because, as we saw in Breaking Dawn, the wolf pack split in two. And the chapters starting with chapter three are some sort of a continuation to Breaking Dawn. So in my story, they chose to stay with Jacob instead of Sam's pack, and Jacob moved in with the Cullens, so Seth and Leah had to move in with the vampires, too.
I am planning to write a Jacob POV sometime soon, I can't tell you when, but I think maybe we'll get a Jake POV in chapter 8 or 9, maybe 7. We'll see. And you'll see what he thinks about Liz.
I'm glad you find the story interesting. I hope you won't be disappointed.
Reviewer: dkgors (Signed) · Date: March 09, 2012 09:32 AM · On: 2.He Stops It
Why does she hate Carisle so much? Why is she so cavalier about hurting others? What is the connection between Liz and the Cullens? If she hated the Cullen's so much why didn't she just leave them? Whats the deal with Her and Jake? If she is Jake's imprint how could she leave him? Doesn't she feel the imprint? Why would she be so willing to kill herself if she knew Jake would kill himself after she did? Hell why was Jake so seemingly indifferent about killing himself after Liz killed herself?
Why did she only 1/2 turn?
Author's Response: She doesn't hate Carlisle. You'll get your answer for all the questions in future chapters.
Jake was so seemingly indefferent about killing himself because he thought if Elizabeth died, then so did he. It's how I picture the imprinting, like Edward and Bella's love. If one dies, then so does the other.
She turned only 1/2 because there wasn't enough venom left in her blood to turn her completely.
Reviewer: dkgors (Signed) · Date: March 09, 2012 09:16 AM · On: 1.She Wants It
I don't really like Elizabeth at the moment. She ssems very selfish.
Author's Response: Thank you for reviewing!
It was my goal to make Elizabeth unlikeable, we'll find out in future chapters my reasons for making her this way.
She seems selfish because she is, at the moment.
Reviewer: PunkieMama (Signed) · Date: February 24, 2012 09:14 PM · On: 1.She Wants It
Good Start. I'd like to see where u take this...could be interesting. :)
Author's Response: Thank you for reviewing. I'm glad you like it. I hope you won't be dissapointed.
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