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Reviewer: NButterbob (Signed) · Date: April 13, 2013 05:56 AM · On: Beneath the Thunder (One-Shot)

You really have a way with words! I am honestly speechless! This was an excellent story and I wish you could follow it up with a full-on continuation!

Reviewer: JD Thorn (Signed) · Date: November 19, 2012 08:38 PM · On: Beneath the Thunder (One-Shot)

I stayed because I love BOTH of the boys. Was bummed when Edward didn't return to check on her, but was happily surprised when Jacob started telling her what he knew about her. He was letting her know she wasn't just a screw.

Reviewer: lyn_b (Signed) · Date: May 28, 2012 11:01 PM · On: Beneath the Thunder (One-Shot)

Def not a Bella fan; but up until I read your writing I would have said I was an Edward fan, I'm all conflicted now coz I love what you do with Jake!

Your writing, not just the story and content, is very good.

Reviewer: ninabella (Signed) · Date: April 30, 2012 03:20 PM · On: Beneath the Thunder (One-Shot)

Are u going to write more or is it staying a one shot? I would love to know how this plays out.

Reviewer: talkallthetime (Signed) · Date: April 03, 2012 11:51 PM · On: Beneath the Thunder (One-Shot)

Interesting and different. I wish it was more than a one shot

Reviewer: Jajl (Signed) · Date: March 29, 2012 11:09 AM · On: Beneath the Thunder (One-Shot)

As usual your storyline sucks me in and the great writing keeps me there. This Jake is so sweet and sexy and i have to admit he fueled a fantasy or two. I love everything you've written and like all of your fans I check back often to see what you've added or updated. Thanks for creating an even more captivating Jacob than SM ever could!

JustAnotherJacobLover

Reviewer: Covenmama (Signed) · Date: March 13, 2012 07:40 AM · On: Beneath the Thunder (One-Shot)

:)

Wonderful.

And I'm a Jasper fan!!!!

;)

Reviewer: Karmabites76 (Signed) · Date: February 20, 2012 01:16 AM · On: Beneath the Thunder (One-Shot)

I loved this story!!! it was awesome! It was hot and spicy with a touch of sweet!

Reviewer: angelseeker (Signed) · Date: January 28, 2012 04:29 PM · On: Beneath the Thunder (One-Shot)

Loved it!!!

Reviewer: Jajl (Signed) · Date: January 21, 2012 12:38 PM · On: Beneath the Thunder (One-Shot)

I just love the way you write Jacob. This one shot just leaves us wanting more.

Reviewer: mfoxee (Signed) · Date: January 14, 2012 01:17 PM · On: Beneath the Thunder (One-Shot)

No that leaves you with the curious and there are alot of us out here loved it.

Reviewer: ladykatharyn (Signed) · Date: January 13, 2012 09:43 PM · On: Beneath the Thunder (One-Shot)

Oh Ysar, how you doubt your fans. We stay for the wonderful writing :) Great story, as usual! I was a little surprised when Bella left with Edward, but I loved your description of Jake- very much my ideal man! Also fun that you had Seth owning the bar, I've always loved his character and I wish he had more of a storyline in the originals. I could picture the whole thing vividly- love it!

Reviewer: Ice_Sick_El (Signed) · Date: January 13, 2012 12:35 PM · On: Beneath the Thunder (One-Shot)

Or me, who tends to like cannon couples but Jake is adorable and this was well written and sweet...

Reviewer: iloverob32 (Signed) · Date: January 11, 2012 09:40 PM · On: Beneath the Thunder (One-Shot)

I must be a Bella fan, because I stayed to read the whole thing. :) I am an Edward fan, but just mostly love a well-written story. This was wonderful and hot and everything goo. Loved it! Thank you for sharing your talent!

Reviewer: sgk39 (Signed) · Date: January 10, 2012 09:35 AM · On: Beneath the Thunder (One-Shot)

You're writing is beautiful. I not only stayed but am going to look for other stories you've written.

Thank you for sharing.

BTW - Im an Edward fan. Didn't even think about bailing. :)

Reviewer: shelbielyncullen (Signed) · Date: January 10, 2012 12:10 AM · On: Beneath the Thunder (One-Shot)

I was down for whatever with you, Ysar! And I loved every word of it! :)

Reviewer: briandelight (Signed) · Date: January 09, 2012 11:12 PM · On: Beneath the Thunder (One-Shot)

Ha ha ok I stayed until she met with Jake in the rain. I started wondering what paring this was so I went back to look at the summary and info but got nothing really out of it until I really saw the picture that this came with. When I figured it was a Bella/Jake story I went to read the reviews. Since they gave me mixed signals I skim read the rest. I really liked your style of writing, it was very interesting, just like your story. I don't see too many stories that do what you did, pull a switch on us and make us stick around to really figure it out. Overall, I think I liked it, I completely skiped over the Bella/Jake action though, didn't mind his stalkerish ways, go figure. I'm very interested to see what else you've written, I'd like to see what else you've got floating out there.

Reviewer: clairesuter (Signed) · Date: January 09, 2012 09:13 PM · On: Beneath the Thunder (One-Shot)

Hey, I'm a story fan! And this was positively fantastic! I normally stick to E/B stories, but I can feel this one for sure!

Reviewer: riverspirit (Signed) · Date: January 09, 2012 06:05 PM · On: Beneath the Thunder (One-Shot)

I really enjoyed this, partially because I wasn't sure where it was going :)

Reviewer: Discordia (Signed) · Date: January 09, 2012 04:22 PM · On: Beneath the Thunder (One-Shot)

Hmm. I'm generally a die hard Edward fan, but no, I didn't bail. I'm still feeling hmm about it. And I'll be honest, I was really kinda hoping for a bit of a Edward/Bella/Jake thing, now that I would have enjoyed immensely.

You did a beautiful job writing it though, I liked Bella's "voice" and it was an interesting premise. I can't say that I loved it, but you did do an excellent job writing it and I'm not sorry I read it.

Reviewer: grneyedhulagrl (Signed) · Date: January 09, 2012 12:27 AM · On: Beneath the Thunder (One-Shot)

Go Bella! This was beautifully written. Thank you :)

Reviewer: goyt (Signed) · Date: January 08, 2012 07:43 PM · On: Beneath the Thunder (One-Shot)

LOL at the leach/eddie fans moaning, oh and the story was great too

Reviewer: jacks5jl (Signed) · Date: January 08, 2012 04:05 PM · On: Beneath the Thunder (One-Shot)

I really enjoyed this. Thank you. I read it as if this was a different story all together.

Reviewer: CaseyDoodle (Signed) · Date: January 08, 2012 12:42 PM · On: Beneath the Thunder (One-Shot)

It was interesting. I was so sure Edward would come back for her. In a way, its the condensed version of how I wanted the Twilight series to work out: Bella sees Edward, becomes entranced, willing to follow him anywhere, but he leaves her because of her weaknesses (her truck.) Enter Jacob, the hero, the warmth. He saves her, helps her, heals her. And in the light of day, he explains how he's always wanted her, always waited for her. And they live happily ever after.

Reviewer: leelator (Signed) · Date: January 08, 2012 11:32 AM · On: Beneath the Thunder (One-Shot)

Well, I consider myself a die-hard Ysar fan, so there was no way I was going to stop reading regardless. Your Bella seems genuine and authentic, but she reminds me much more of you, so I was interested to see what you were going to do next. You didn't disappoint me--and neither did your Jake. Thanks for letting us read something of yours again. It was a long awaited pleasure.

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