I don't know what to say except KEEP ON WRITING.  Thanks, this is great.

LOVE it! I know reviews are supposed to be constructive and offer advice on things to change, but I love everything just the way it is. Can't wait to read the next chapter!

I love how he slowly comes to his realization that he loves her.  I love that he uses Austen to say it for him--like a teen who makes a "mix-tape" of love songs to express himself.

He is her first lover, but she is his first love--and what is stronger than that?

I really love how you work in lines from the actual book, but in totally unexpected places.

*sigh* I wish I had lost my virginity on a Twister mat in front of a roaring fire.

Just a spelling correction:

"in good conscience"  not "conscious."  I wouldn't bring it up, but it is in a paragraph about knowing big words, so I thought you might want to correct it.

 

Loving the story....

Please post more... this is torture.  I don't like having to wait!!! My imagination runs away with me.  You haven't updated this story since Feb?! That is NOT nice.  Please hurry!

well.... i believe i have read some of your writing under a different pen name.

this is, unexpectedly wonderful.... when I first started reading your story, I didn't know if I could relate to Bella and Edward, as essentially, different characters - but guess what - I have!

You write from an amazingly intuitive perspective - and I will admit, I have enjoyed your storylines enormously.

It is a nice change to have Edward and Bella on a more equal footing - Bella out of her depth physically, but Edward out of his depth emotionally - not unlike some of your other writing(?) but Bella is able to hold more of her own footing in this storyline.

I am keen to know what happens as this story unfolds. Human Bella and Human Edward make for an intoxicating read, and this version of Edward, more closely matches the image I had of Edward from the original Twilight storylines - I always had issues with Edward being a relatively inexperienced 17 yo - a mid-20's Edward with experience is much more in tune with my mental images created by SM original texts. 

I do find it a little to repetitive to relive the same story line from different perspective with each earlier chapter - I am glad that you limited this approach in later chapters - I found I was skipping over some of your earlier chapters to get to the new material.  But then again, I am short on time, and always skim read when I consider it necessary.

Bon chance!

 

looking eagerly forward to the next instalment(s)

 

Glorious!!!! Finally, this was what I wanted from the original. All the angst, all of the pent up, never quieted love (and lust) between Bella and Edward coming to a real and satisfying.... What... end or beginning?  This was very well written with both B & E more relaxed in conversation and actions.  I truly enjoyed the story and the new development of two beloved characters.  I am new to Twilighted, so I hope my review is not too overzealous.  I did enjoy your work.  Many thanks and congratulations to you.- TheHarper

Pretty good!

Can;t wait to see what happens!

 

Update soon!!

i love the movie quotes :) this story is the best please update!

i love this story its sooo romantic its gets better and better!!

andd edward geez mannn tell her youu love her for once and for all loool..

Ahahhaa my favourite sofar is "stop poking me" clasic :L

updatee :D