I really like this so far-very well-written.  One small suggestion-if you cant stand something anymore, it is "bear", not "bare"-common mistake, no biggie!

I've been reading this story nonstop. I LOVE it!! =D I don't know how many times I've laughed out loud (which I never do when I read) and there are times where it is painful to read on because something horrible is about to happen (well, not painful or horrible but I just cringe). This is excellent writing and judging by your AP classes, you're still in high school which is amazing. I would have never guessed that.

I love how you make one small thing happen and it just snowballs up in amazing Bella/Edward drama, romantic goodness. I think a lot of authors, and not just in fanfiction, have one set plot goal and when that is accomplished, they are done. You just seem to have all of these great ideas that magically come together.

Also, thank you for not doing what half of twilight fanfiction authors do...I kind of started to yell at the computer screen because there was a huge chance of Bella turning into a vampire after the accident. And she's still human!! Yay!! Having her stay human makes the story so much more interesting and you didn't take the obvious plot route. Major brownie points!! 

I'm so excited about seeing Jacob- that is going to be fantastic. I really look forward to your reviews!!

Happy New Years!

Author's Response:

Wow, what a review! Thanks so much!

I'm glad you found it funny :) And yeah, I'm still in High School in England.

Yep, I'm kind of determined not to go down the traditional 'ohmygod Bella got a scratch, LET'S CHANGE HER' route.

And a reader who's excited about Jacob! I can barely believe it! ;)

Thanks for reviewing! :)

okie, im crying.

 

because seriosuly, I would have quit. Quit my job and ran away with Edward. That would be it. I actually feel my chest tight. AHHH greattt amazingggg love it

 

i hope they end up together, though =(

wow.  Rialle~I've waited a long time for this chapter and let me just say--it was well worth the wait.  I adored every single second of it.  Thank you so much.  Wonderful wonderful wonderful job. 

 

the podcast sounds fun!

Yay I was afraid you had forgotten about this story. I am shamlessly addicted to it. It's just so enticing and damn intriguing. The plot is exciting and moves along nicely.

I certainly hope the next update doesn't take as long, but I'll be waiting patiently nonetheless. I need to find out how this ends. It's an addiction...what can I say?

Xoxo- Sendmeonmyway <3

Suspence!!! Please update soooon!!!! Great work =]

yay! i am so glad that this is up! i am so excited to see what happens next!!

yay, finally!  that chapter was definitely worth the wait!!! i'm so signing up for the updates email.

oh my! well, firstly you cannot fathom my delight when i saw you'd updated. (although let me say i'm truly sorry 'real life' has been rough on you lately and i hope you're entering into an easier time. your story is a gift to us, so please know we don't take your efforts lightly.) anyway - wow! this was so intense! my heart breaks for edward; he's just like the edward in the original twilight books. excellent portrayal. i cannot believe jacob is at the hospital, ugh. please don't let him or charlie try and take bella back to forks or wherever!! that would be awful! sigh. i am praying for update soon....you left it on such a cliffie.  <3

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I am going to be completely honest with you....I hate that you have a life outside of writing this story. I know that is completely selfish of me but your writing is just so amazing. I began reading fan-fiction after I read your story. This story made me interested in other fan-fiction. Your style of writing is so much more fluent than others that I have read. While it is honestly a pleasure reading the other fan-fictions I found it hard to find a story that matched your level of skill. Now after saying that I have to say an author on this site under the penname magan bagan has made me see that there are others out there that are just as talented. So although I have been checking back to see if you have updated daily I have found solace in other authors such as magan bagan. I enjoy your story so very much. You’re true to the characters that Stephenie Meyer created and you add your own interesting twist to them. You are a true story teller because you don’t rely on Bella and Edward’s misunderstandings to guide your story. You also don’t overly stress words that Mrs. Meyer used in describing her characters: Alice-that evil pixie, while I watched the pixie, pixie this and pixie that. Edward-dazzling features, Mr. Dazzling, he dazzled me. That can get quite annoying and you stay away form it. I love your story so much and I don’t care how long it takes you to update I will read it until you announce it is complete.

 

Oh and BTW although I love your fan-fiction stories you should really write some of your own stuff. I know that it is time consuming but your talent is way too superior to only venture into “borrowing” other peoples characters. Create your own characters and your own new world, because that is something I would definitely be interested in reading.

 

xoxoxoxo

Ahh this is torturous.  i love it though :)

Woohoo!! So glad to see this one going on. Thanks for this.

Wow, do you think, if we sent Bella to England, the baggage retrieval system at Heathrow would be Edward's fault? Or if she went to Palastine, the middle east would be Edward's problem?  Oh! I'll bet she voted!! Election mystery solved, Edward did it!!

This guy REALLY needs to get his obsessiveMe! stick surgically removed from his arse!

Awesome!  I am so glad your going to keep working on this story.  I look forward to your next update.  I hope it is soon.  :)