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Reviewer: RebeccaJ1973 (Signed) · Date: April 28, 2016 08:52 AM · On: ONE SHOT

This story did a good job of capturing the spirit of the character Angela from Twlight (especially as we see her in Midnight Sun, New Moon, and Eclipse).  I did, however, have one aspect on which I wanted to comment (and this is something I've seen in every Twilight fanfic I've read and in SM's original series, so please do not take this personally).  All these stories seem to show the town of Forks and more specifially the high school in Forks as that of a larger town.  I looked up the population of Forks on the internet not long ago, and while I do not recall the exact number, I believe it was less than 1,500 people.  I lived and attended high school in a town of nearly 20,000 people, and our graduating class had just under 200 people in it.  So, seeing as how Forks in only a fraction as large, I keep wondering about the large number of students.  Also, while I cannot attest to exactly what classes are offered at Forks High, I can say that most small towns have a very limited number of electives (and they tend to be rather traditional ones like band, the various althletics, art, choir, etc.) rather than things like psychology or photography (I doubt many towns of 1,500 people even have enough students willing to take the course to bother with a calculus course - which SM has Edward taking while at Forks High).

You did get it right when you talked about how a new student causes lots of gossip for days in a small town (though, I will say - thankfully! - my small town wasn't quite that small...lol, but my sister did end up moving to a nearby town comparable in size to Forks.  Seeing the single campus that town had for Pre-K through 12th grade said a lot about how the school systems work in such tiny towns.  Often a teacher ends up teaching a wide spectrum rather than getting to focus on something specific like French or Senior English).  One fanfic I read here on twilighted had a hardware store in Forks with half a dozen customers loitering around out front and another couple dozen inside the store.  When I read that I laughed and thought about how a town that size likely wouldn't even have a hardware store much less have it that full (that author also gave Forks many more eating establishments than could realisticly be expected).  Anyhow, I don't want to go on and on about it - especially since, as I said, pretty much every author who has written something related to the Twilight series seems to give Forks more than a town that size would likely possess, but I did feel I should at least mention it for future reference. ;)

The only frustration I had about the content of this story was the way you skipped over the early part of New Moon (their Senior year just picked up when Edward returned with only a brief mention of the Cullens' absence).  I had wanted to hear more of how Angela felt about/for Bella during that time.  I know in the books, Jessica and other less loyal friends basically abandoned her feeling she should "get over it" but I know Angela, Mike, and a few others stayed true.

I also did not interpret Bella's security in her relationship with Edward during the end of New Moon/beginning of Eclipse the same way you have portrayed it here.  She was always insecure about it prior to his leaving, but I know when they got back from Italy (after she finally slept), they had a long talk and while traveling to have the vote at the Cullens' house, she had her epiphany where she realized that Edward truly did love her - all along.  That would make me think that she would then be much more secure knowing he loves her greatly and only left because he thought she would be better off without him (plus, he made it rather clear that he could never manage to leave her again). --- Just my take on it.  Everyone is welcome to his/her own interpretations, though, of course. ;)

Reviewer: SCWillson (Signed) · Date: March 27, 2013 09:04 PM · On: ONE SHOT

Charming. I've always loved Angela.

I'd love to see this story expanded into a multi-parter.

Reviewer: Aluap07 (Signed) · Date: October 19, 2012 10:08 AM · On: ONE SHOT

Lovely story !!!

Reviewer: Kendra (Signed) · Date: April 09, 2012 08:04 PM · On: ONE SHOT

Great, touching viewpoint.

Reviewer: JRParz (Signed) · Date: February 05, 2012 07:44 PM · On: ONE SHOT

Touching...

Reviewer: jessica-cullen (Signed) · Date: January 21, 2012 06:17 AM · On: ONE SHOT

That was really sweet. Thanks for posting.

Reviewer: Chnctgislnd07 (Signed) · Date: January 19, 2012 07:26 PM · On: ONE SHOT

I've always liked Angela, how sweet is she?!?

Reviewer: Mezek (Signed) · Date: November 26, 2011 12:49 AM · On: ONE SHOT

I feel like Angela was a very under-used and under-appreciated character in the series. It was nice see her view on things! Great work.

Reviewer: griff1au (Signed) · Date: September 19, 2011 03:01 AM · On: ONE SHOT

Yes I liked it.  You do seem to have a nice soft way with words

Reviewer: Moose (Signed) · Date: September 13, 2011 12:58 AM · On: ONE SHOT

I like the character of Angela too. And I remember that part in M.S. when Edward admires her for having "kind thoughts". I wish they'd given her more of a storyline in the books and in the movies.



Author's Response:

That is exactly the part of M.S. that inspired me to write this one-shot and two multi-chapter stories with Angela as a featured character. She should have had more of a storyline. She was very much underused, wasn't she?

Thanks so much for the review!

Reviewer: novelista26 (Signed) · Date: August 19, 2011 04:53 PM · On: ONE SHOT

loved it!

Reviewer: austoz (Signed) · Date: August 17, 2011 04:52 AM · On: ONE SHOT

That was great! I think Angela is an interesting character and I'm sure she would have had an interesting perspective of the Cullens. Such a kind girl with a different outlook on things.

 

Thanks for writing.



Author's Response:

You're very welcome. I'm glad you liked it!

Reviewer: pastel (Signed) · Date: August 14, 2011 09:27 PM · On: ONE SHOT

I really like reading stories in the perspective of Angela Weber. She's just such a pure soul, something that I strive for. She sees all the things that the Cullens have, and it's probably so easy to get lost in the gossip and rumors, but Angela does the right thing and respectfully minds her own business. Also, despite her shyness, she sticks up for Alice.

This was a very sweet story. Now I hope I can find more stories in the voice of Angela. I understand what Edward Cullen meant when he remarked that it was much more pleasant to listen to thoughts from Angela because of her nature.



Author's Response:

Thank you so much for your sweet words!

I identify with Angela more than anyone else in the books and that's why I wanted to write something from her point of view. 

As to other Angela stories, I know that my story "When It Rains" is in Angela's voice and "Built on a Lie" by FrozenSoldier is also in Angela's voice. Both put her in a pairing with Jasper and, I won't say anything about mine, but FrozenSoldier's is so very good!

Reviewer: ddcdragonfly (Signed) · Date: August 14, 2011 08:10 PM · On: ONE SHOT

Excellent ... You captured Angela beautifully.



Author's Response:

Thank you so much!

Reviewer: sheba (Signed) · Date: August 13, 2011 07:53 AM · On: ONE SHOT

Very beautiful, I love it!!!!!!



Author's Response:

Thank you so very much!

Reviewer: Nali (Signed) · Date: August 13, 2011 01:02 AM · On: ONE SHOT

I did like it. Thankyou! It tickled me pink every time I imagined Jasper being able to feel all these things :)

Author's Response:

Thanks so much! I'm really glad you liked it!

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