Love ur story :) please write again quickly, and include more EDWARD! ;P

ur awesome

Amazing story! I just love it. The characters are great: Esme and her mothering ways, Rosalie and her protectiveness, Emmett and his support, Alice and her eagerness and mild frustrations, Edward's brooding. I can't wait to see Carlisle and Jasper. Thank you so much for writing. I love it!

Hmmmm...sounds like this might be a bit dark. Maybe there is light at the end of the dark tunnel in the end or sooner, possibly? It reads very well so far and I am going to give it a chance. Dark does not mean bad fiction. 

I appreciate good writing and good fiction, dark, light,  humorous or mentally troubling. ALL can be very well written and great stories. I am hoping that the story does find some light for the characters eventually and  that goodness prevails. I am hoping  that romantic, good things happen for Edward and Bella, as well. That would be a great ending to all the darkness she has to suffer, as well as her friends the Cullens having to suffer for and with her because they care so much for her.. 

I am on board with you, I will follow the story. I will read it and enjoy the great writing and most likely the story itself as well. Dark stories  are much more interesting than all sweetness and llight. There is sometimes no substance to stories where everything is all good and right and all flowers and sunshine.

I like to read stories with movement, stories that move forward from a not so great place to a better place.  The summary makes it sound very dark. I hope it is not that dark all the way through.  

I will read it and see where you go with it. I have nerves of steel, so I can make it through the darkness. Besides it does sound like a great story!

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Oh, wow.  You convey brilliantly the sense of Bella's frailty, vulnerability, fragility.  Time is fleeing fast for this little one.  I hope your Cullens save her soon!

Thank you for writing!

i wonder what charlie will have to say about bellas truck? will she not come to school the next day because of the beating he'll probably give her? i think that carlisle should call charlie and let him know that rose and alice will give bella a ride to school in the morning. and have emmet look at the truck. will the cullens see first hand how charlie beats bella tonight after he gets home?

Lovely.  Simply lovely.  It's such a simple story, and yet so very complex already.  I look forward to reading more of your masterful plot-weaving.

Looks pretty good so far. I'm looking forward to see how you write the characters and how you handle the subject matter. I've seen it done well and I've read some really, unrealistically done pieces. Good luck with this!

And back they came with the tattered Thing, as children after play,
And they said:  "The soul that he got from God he has bartered clean away.

Kipling (one of my favourite authors).  Great story title.

I love it so far, i like that Rose is trying to help and be more friendly than she is in the actual twilight book. Please keep on writing because i think it's going really well. Also, I didn't read much about Jasper and he's my favourite character in twilight, so could you please involve him more please. This is going to go onto my favourite list soon if you keep up the good work. 

Well Done, I'l be keeping tabs on the story for when you next update.

Thanks for the great read,

shannitwilightmad/MrsShaniWhitlockXx

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I'm really intrigued by this story and look forward to seeing where you plan to take it.  I love your title, too!  Thank you for sharing.  :)