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Reviewer: Micm (Signed) · Date: April 12, 2012 09:00 PM · On: Chapter 1
Bella certainly was annoyed to no end with the whole situation!
Reviewer: gabthebomb1 (Signed) · Date: March 04, 2010 03:48 PM · On: Chapter 1
Great job! I like the bit about Edward's breath not appearing as vapor.
Reviewer: EmoryB123 (Signed) · Date: December 18, 2009 01:10 PM · On: Chapter 1
good job!
Reviewer: TraceyJ (Signed) · Date: September 20, 2009 06:47 PM · On: Chapter 1
This was pretty funny! I love the title and I love that she shot him a death glare when she saw that he was in the passenger seat! Of course she noticed how the cold didn't effect him! LOL!
Reviewer: TraceyJ (Signed) · Date: September 20, 2009 06:47 PM · On: Chapter 1
This was pretty funny! I love the title and I love that she shot him a death glare when she saw that he was in the passenger seat! Of course she noticed how the cold didn't effect him! LOL!
Reviewer: Leilal (Signed) · Date: July 26, 2009 04:04 PM · On: Chapter 1
Good to Reminise.
Reviewer: ajendas (Signed) · Date: July 06, 2009 06:48 PM · On: Chapter 1
funny...lol
Reviewer: mscope (Signed) · Date: June 15, 2009 06:41 PM · On: Chapter 1
"....should have died today." indeed! Edward certainly fought fate to keep Bella alive. I always thought she was in Forks to lose her life to become a vampire and here was Edward always saving it. And to think he tortured himself over and over and over again in his fight. He truly is an angel.
Sandra
Reviewer: ali208 (Signed) · Date: June 02, 2009 01:35 AM · On: Chapter 1
Professional Critisism uhm so there was no spineboard and no head blocks and no tape across the forehead and what you call a gurney is actually a stretcher and the emt would never make fun of a patient or call her sugar. But since most (what we call civilians) wouldn't know any of that either then it really doesn't matter. I do enjoy the way you tell a story while I am not a good writer I do enjoy reading and I like your style.
Reviewer: Lilly Cullen (Signed) · Date: March 21, 2009 09:48 PM · On: Chapter 1
I liked it! My favourite line was 'Why couldn't Tyler's van have crushed me?' I laughed out loud at that. Was a good one shot. :)
Reviewer: elizabeth18 (Signed) · Date: December 21, 2008 12:25 PM · On: Chapter 1
Good.
I really liked the last line. It was funny :-)
Reviewer: Anna (Signed) · Date: December 15, 2008 08:15 AM · On: Chapter 1
Great story. Very believable characterizations.
Reviewer: christinemarie13 (Signed) · Date: December 09, 2008 05:51 PM · On: Chapter 1
I loved how stubborn Bella was being. It was totally something I would have wanted to do if I was being carted off unwillingly. :)
Reviewer: silly bj (Signed) · Date: December 06, 2008 02:23 PM · On: Chapter 1
It fits very well with the original. Bravo !
Reviewer: HopelessRomantic913 (Signed) · Date: November 30, 2008 01:49 AM · On: Chapter 1
Great Job! really well written! when i was reading I wanted to go find stephenie meyer and demand she add this chapter to her book
Author's Response: haha, if only we could find her, she's probably hiding from all of her crazy fans at the moment.
Reviewer: Lianna (Signed) · Date: November 25, 2008 11:10 AM · On: Chapter 1
Really funny and really cute! I love fluff! Great job, it really does seem like it fell out of the book, I"m impressed.
Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you think so!
Reviewer: Dulcinea21bella (Signed) · Date: November 24, 2008 11:50 AM · On: Chapter 1
Nice one shot. Great job!
Author's Response: Thanks!
Reviewer: rhepona (Signed) · Date: November 24, 2008 11:35 AM · On: Chapter 1
I love your flufftastic moments! My favorite stories are the ones that I can picture actually happening in the book and I'm a total sucker for fluff so the fact that you're writing missing moments throughout the whole book is just glorious!
Author's Response: Thanks! I'll try and post a fan fic from chapter 4, soon
Reviewer: twilightjie (Signed) · Date: November 24, 2008 10:29 AM · On: Chapter 1
bella's reactions are so funny,
Reviewer: NoMoreThanUsual (Signed) · Date: November 23, 2008 09:15 PM · On: Chapter 1
I loved Bella asking if they could drop her off at home instead. Very very Bella! LOL And I also loved the moments waiting to go into the hospital and how Bella noticed Edward's breath didn't show like everyone else's did. That was a very nice touch. All in all, I'm really loving this series you've set up. They truly read like they came from the book. I love them!
Author's Response: Thanks! I had to go all "biological analysis" to figure out if Edward's breath would fog in the cold and I used a bunch of complicated cellular respiration terms that I won't bore you with and figured that it wouldn't. Anyway, I'm glad you like this series, I'll be writing scenes from chapter 4 next.
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