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Reviewer: millefiori (Signed) · Date: January 06, 2011 10:52 PM · On: Chapter 10 - Bad Boyfriend

Oh my God hot hot hot!!! I'm dying over here! How do you make dialogue so sexy? Wow. OK, they totally belong together. I don't feel they are betraying Rose at all, either way. After that phone sex I don't think I would be able to resist having a secret affair if I was either one of them. I thought I was looking forward to Bella & Claire, but now I just want some E & B lemons! They have insane chemistry. You are a great writer, and dialogue is definitely your strong suit! I <3 Discordia!



P.S. LOVE the vampire stuff you threw in there for the last 2 chapters. Very clever! :)

Author's Response:

Aww, I'd be blushing if I could actually...well...blush. (laughs) as far as how I make dialogue so sexy...uh, apparently I have a smutty little mind cause that's just how I used to talk with a lover.  :)  I wouldn't blame them for a secret affair either!  Thank you so very much for all of the compliments.  I have a stupid grin on my face now.  Dialogue definitely flows the most naturally for me.  I struggle more with narrative.

I am glad to hear you are looking forward to Bella and Claire, that's the part of the story that makes me the most nervous.  Eeep. That's a ways off, but you won't have to wait long for E/B lemons.

p.s.  SO glad you liked the vampire stuff.  I was hoping people would like it!

Reviewer: raighn-on-me (Signed) · Date: January 06, 2011 10:26 PM · On: Chapter 10 - Bad Boyfriend

Arghhhh! That was unbelievably hot! So much tension, cant help but think we are being set up for a fall though. You really know how to keep a girl engaged. Thanks for the quick updates x 

Author's Response:

Aww, thanks!  I am so pleased to hear that.  Definitely not being set up for a fall, at least not a Bella/Edward fall any time in the near future.  There is going to be a spectacular amount of scorching hot lemony goodness coming your way for those two. 

Reviewer: acey (Signed) · Date: January 06, 2011 08:51 PM · On: Chapter 10 - Bad Boyfriend

I say...Fuck Rose..she hasn't come around after how long??  She is not a true friend so why should they be?  I say on with the show!!

Author's Response:

At this point it's been a little over a month.  Ridiculous, huh?  Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: mscope (Signed) · Date: January 06, 2011 08:07 PM · On: Chapter 10 - Bad Boyfriend

Well I won't be writing a thesis on this chapter.  These two do not stand a chance of staying away from one another.  "Was it any less of a betrayal of Rosalie than actually having sex?"  Rosalie?  Rosalie who?  And how can she possible resist him?  She's a saint to have gone this far to begin with.  I have no idea what will change her mind.  Maybe something Alice will say.  Maybe new and improved rumors will cause her to call off the truce.  Maybe Rosalie will give her blessing.  Yeah I doubt that one.  Maybe just seeing Edward again will do it.

I did tube Dale Chihuly.  OMG!  What beautiful pieces of work.  I could get lost in an exhibit like that.


Author's Response:

(laughs) aww, but I love the thesis reviews!  Actually, this is a pretty straight-forward chapter.  And you're right, even if you didn't know they'd get together again, it would be pretty obvious. 

Love your response to Rosalie.  Ha!  And Bella's restraits is admirable.  I can't wait to see what your response is to what finally makes her cave.

Yeah, I'm completely smitten by glass blowing.  A Color and Design prof I had suggested I check his work out based in the drawings and paintings I'd done and I fell in love.  What I wouldn't give for an obscene amount of money to spend on a piece of his...especially the old-school stuff he did.

Reviewer: belled_70 (Signed) · Date: January 06, 2011 07:44 PM · On: Chapter 10 - Bad Boyfriend

Great chapter - very hot. But I must say fuck Rose, she has no claim on him - she and Edward have split up and she has even been with other guys. I don't think Bella should let that come between her and Edward. Bring it on!!!

Author's Response:

Thanks! Love hearing your opinion on it.  Don't worry it wont' be long...

Reviewer: crazykatwp (Signed) · Date: January 06, 2011 06:23 PM · On: Chapter 2 - The Things You Said

OMG.  Love it.  But Rosalie should get over herself.  She didn't want Edward.  I think they should go for it.

Author's Response:

(laughs) thanks!  And frankly, I agree.

Reviewer: mscope (Signed) · Date: January 06, 2011 05:26 PM · On: Chapter 9 - Not Myself

What a chapter, huh?!!!  I don't even know where to start....maybe a deep breath as I gather my thoughts.

For starters Jacob suprised me with his revelation(s).  I grew up in a small town and know for a fact that nothing is sacred and keeping a secret is damn near impossible.  I feel bad for Bella that everyone knows about her first time and yet they don't know anything at all.  They believe what they want to believe and it is so unfair to her.  I am not real happy with Rosalie right now.  I really wish Jake would have come to Bella right away but ya know what, he's a kid.  Maybe in his mind he was protecting her, hell I don't know.  Maybe he wanted to spare her the humiliation.  His admission of having feelings for her were cute but, yeah he is still just a kid.  On the other hand had Bella known how wide spread the gossip was there is nothing she could have said or done to stop it.  What we have here is a Catch 22 and SNAFU all tangled up as one creating a clusterfuck of the worst kind.

Alice.  Now here is another surprise, well maybe not.  Again I chalk it up to her youth.  Bella and Rosalie are her friends.  She is wise not to take sides  Besides how would that work.  Bella obviously did not have the whole story from Rose so why would Alice.  And it is possible that Alice is privy to information that Bella does not have.  Maybe Rosalie told Alice more.  Maybe Jasper did.  We do not know.  I just wish she could have done a little more to defend and or share her info with Bella so she could have been better prepared.   Again I will chalk it up to youth and inexperience.  Realistically how many people are born with this kind of knowledge.

So many woulda, coulda, shouldas and this instance is the perfect example of the saying, It is what it is.  Had Rose been up front an honest from the very beginning it could have been different.  But here we have this beautiful girl.  To gaze upon her one would think that she has it all ... the beauty, the body, flirtatious personality, lusted after by the boys, envied by the girls.  Yes, she has everything and yet she has nothing at all.  

In this chapter Edward is the one that unkowingly enlightens us the most of the mystery that is Rosalie.  Everyone has a story to tell and I realize her story will not be told until BC is complete, however, Edward has given us a between the lines glimpse into her mind.  We find out that E/R may have fooled around that first night but did not do the deed.  Well gasp, how can this be, all men want to tap what she has to offer and yet here is a guy that can resist her wiles.   That had to be a downer.  Here she is the ultimate siren and PianoGod is not going there?  E.x.c.u.s.e. M.e.?  Now I would have to go back for her exact wording but she did allude to the fact that they were together intimately and none of us had any reason to question that.  And she was truthful about the no strrings, calling it off at anytime - mutually.  But in a effort to save face, and this is speculation on my part (well all of it is actually), she tells Bella she called it off, mutally of course.  At this very moment, I mean as I type this, I wonder if Alice knew that.  Just because Rosale moved on to another does not mean she is fine with her friend moving on with the one that called it off first.  I think, now more than ever, that Rose saw the E/B interaction and may even be a little jealous that of the relationship Bella has with Edward.  I have to wonder if she has ever had a healthy relationship with any of the guys she has known.  She certainly has no life experience to draw upon to have one.  Could it be that she is a bit envious, not that B/E were together, but the get to know you phase that she has witnessed between them?   Please understand that I expect no response to this I am simply giving you a glimpse of my mindset.

Now for the continuing E/B saga.  I love the relationship that is building between these two.  The gentle conversation of their past, the present, the teasing, the inuendos - there is a little bit of everything.  They share more and more of what makes them tick, their aspirations, their fears.  The ease in which they speak makes my heart warm.  This is what Rosalie has never had.


Author's Response:

As always, I adore your reviews.

Yeah, I debated about a thousand times if I should put in the Jacob crush or not.  Ultimately I decided to, because Bella needed to feel completely isolated and literally have Edward be her only friend for a little while.  She’s pissed at Jacob, Alice is on vacation, Angela is at camp, Rosalie won’t speak to her, etc.  I know what you mean about him telling her about the gossip, but at the same time…it doesn’t change anything.  You’re very right, it’s pretty much just a clusterfuck all around. 

I have been really surprised by people’s reaction to Alice. I feel like Alice is kind of in an impossible situation.  If she takes sides, she loses Rose completely and any chance of smoothing things over eventually.  She didn’t know any more about the situation than Bella did.  Rosalie has confided in no one.  And yes, Alice is young and inexperienced, and has never had to deal with a situation like this before.

Yeah, Rose really is a sad character in so many ways.  The good news is, she gets her HEA eventually, she just has to go through a lot of shit to get there. 

Yeah, Rose is about as pissed as you can get.  You’re going to see just how much over the next five chapters or so.  (laughs) I can’t say I blame you for reaction.  The compliment to Bella is appreciated, but I’m not entirely sure it was class and maturity as much as shock.  She was really too stunned to react, because she never expected a betrayal of that magnitude. 

You are absolutely right that Rose was over Edward but not alright with him moving on.  I’m not quite sure what you mean about Rose still being with Edward if he hadn’t been interested in Bella while they were together.  Can you explain?

I am so glad I’m no longer a teenage girl.  I never intentionally caused drama but I sure found it a few times.  Nothing like being 18 and oblivious, right?  Trust me, you will LOVE Rose’s take on this, but you’re going to have to wait until the end of the story to get it.  Hope you can be patient!  She will realize Bella is important, but it’s going to be a long, slow road.

(laughs) I am glad the virginity conversation caused such a reaction!  As I’ve said, I lived this portion of the story and oh man was my “Edward” thrown for a loop.  He had no idea.  I know some people have really horrible/painful first times but mine was absolutely about as good as you can ask for.  He really did scold me for not telling him.  Whoops.  Again with the oblivious 18 year old thing…  

They are both going to go a little crazy wanting each other and not being able to act on it.  Especially now that they know just how good it can be.


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