YES please update soon!  Loving this story, I know I've already said this, and I can't wait to get into the actual competition part of the strory!

Wow, what a great idea for a charity!  That's such a cool idea.  :)

Hanging out for the next chapter, great work, and I'm glad you found a beta.  They always rock your world right when you're feeling down about your fic, and the fact that your beta found you means that she clearly already loves your story!

Jess xo

Author's Response:

Lol, will do! Bella and Edward meet in chapter 9, which continues in chapter 10. Almost like part one and part two.

Thank you! :)

Thanks for your review, it means so much to me!

Rose

Hey this sounds like a cute story, I will be adding it to the fave list :)

Author's Response:

That means a lot to me, thanks. And thanks for reviewing!

Rose

i cant wait to see where youre going with this, good job!!!

Author's Response:

Thank you so much! And thanks for reviewing! It means a lot to me! :)

Rose

You pulled me in :)

Author's Response:

Glad you like it! :) Thanks for reviewing.

Rose

I really like the premise - it is great to see an original plot on this site!  I can't wait to see where you take the story and how to intertwine all of the various characters.  Some friendly feedback though - you include a lot of small details that could be eliminated without taking away from the story.  I found myself skimming over parts like her shower (describing the smell of one product is a nice touch, three is a little overkill).  Just my personal opinion though - I definitely don't mean to offend you :)

Author's Response:

Thank you so much. Glad to hear you think it's original.

I agree with you, three is a little overkill. My writing has gotten better since I wrote the first chapter. Or at least I hope so. :) I think I wrote the first chapter about two months ago. Though even then I thought it was it bit long-winded. Not sure why I never changed it. Maybe because I've read a couple of stories that were so rushed. I guess I went a little overboard with making sure that this one is not. :) So don't worry, I'm definitely not offended. Why would I be? You took the time to not only read what I wrote in my spare time, but to review it too. So thank you.

Rose

 

Great first chapter...can't wait to read more

Author's Response:

Thanks, glad you like it! Thanks for reviewing.

Rose

I read this chapter, then I had to come go to work and didn't have time to submit a review.... so I thought I'd come back now and do it!

 

I loved it!  It's really original.  One question though - are you planning on using present tense the whole way through?  There's nothing wrong with it, I was just wondering, as sometimes it can get confusing.  Maybe I'm just not used to it!

Is it going to be from multiple POV or just Bella?  There are just so many characters, I'm worried they won't all get adequate "storytime" lol.

AND I love your Edward.  Gah he's hot in my imagination already.  I'll live in Bella's room while she's away, if that's alright!  Just so I can stare at all her posters.  Yum.

Waiting anxiously for the update - have you tried the forums for a beta?  There's a whole thread devoted to it.

Jess xo

Author's Response:

Thanks for going through all the trouble, I appreciate it. Thank you very much for reviewing!

Great to hear you love it!

Yes, most of the story will be in present tense. I started writing this story and realized it was easier to imagine her reactions and emotions, in present tense. Not sure why though. I think it's 'cause I really get caught up in it. Like watching a movie you really like.

It will only be from Edward's POV and Bella's. So far chapter 3, 4 and 7, is written in EPOV. This story is mostly centered on Edward & Bella. Emmett and the rest will be in it, but there won't be chapters on what's going on at their houses. I'm thinking about doing outtakes. That is, if people are interested.

Wow, I'm happy you love Edward! And sure, lol, her room is vacant. Go ahead. :D

Thanks for the advice, I'll definitely try the forum.

Next update will be soon.

Rose

I'm Hooked! Continue soon Please!!!!

Author's Response:

Wow, that's great to hear! Will do, I'll be uploading the next chapter to the Twilighted queue as soon as possible.

Thanks :)

RoseInTheTwilight

I'm intrigued! I'm curious to see where this is going to go. Great start!

Author's Response:

That's great to hear! :) Thank you so much! And thank you for reviewing! It means a lot to me.

RoseInTheTwilight

Just a little starstruck?  LOL.  Looking forward to see where this goes.  :-)

Author's Response:

Yes, lol. Okay, maybe more than a little. :D Thanks for reviewing and reading this story.

RoseInTheTwilight

 

 

its lookin good.. she's kind of obsessed though... i really hope she doesnt think that she is plain, cause if your using megan fox, she is defiantly not plain.. haha! cant wait to read more.

Author's Response:

I already responded to your other review, but decided to respond here, too. In case anyone else is wondering the same thing.

Glad you like it so far. :) No, she's not plain. I guess you could say, it's based on Edward's words. "You don't see yourself very clearly."

So, definitely not plain.

Thanks for the review.

RoseInTheTwilight

Sounds like this could be great fun :D

Author's Response:

Thank you so much! And thanks for taking the time to review, it means a lot to me.

Thanks :)

RoseInTheTwilight