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Reviewer: dkgors (Signed) · Date: May 09, 2011 09:37 PM · On: Chapter 6 - I Can't Fight This Feeling

OMG I'm loving this story!  I hate to stop but I have to go to bed!  I can't wait for the next chapter!  If I was jake I would kill Quil!  lol

Take care, Dixie

Reviewer: dkgors (Signed) · Date: May 09, 2011 09:13 PM · On: Chapter 5 - Dream a Little Dream

What a sweet dream!  I wish Bella would get over the age thing.  Doesn't Jake turn 16 befor she turns 18? 

Reviewer: dkgors (Signed) · Date: May 09, 2011 08:32 PM · On: Chapter 4 - New Friends and Townies

I love this story!  I really like your Jake and Bella.  I can't wait for them to kiss!!!!

Reviewer: dkgors (Signed) · Date: May 09, 2011 07:44 PM · On: Chapter 3 - Bella's Back

I knew it!  lol  It's so sweet that he remembers what she did for him and thats why he infactuated with her!  I can't wait for Embry and Quil, I do love the wolf pack! 

Reviewer: dkgors (Signed) · Date: May 09, 2011 07:32 PM · On: Chapter 2 - The Beach

Bella's reaction to seeing Jake was so funny!  Jake got a boner didn't he? (when he put lotion on Bella's back) thats why he had to run into the water?  lol

Reviewer: dkgors (Signed) · Date: May 09, 2011 07:14 PM · On: Chapter 1 - The Return to Forks

I love the start!

Reviewer: mal005 (Signed) · Date: May 08, 2011 07:44 PM · On: Chapter 15 - Eternal Flame

I want lots and lots of Bella and Jake. Edward needs to go away!!

Reviewer: danimcket (Signed) · Date: May 08, 2011 01:59 PM · On: Chapter 15 - Eternal Flame

I enjoyed Edward's POV. I thought it was very realistic or as realistic as it can be with vampires and werewolves.

Reviewer: angel 057 (Signed) · Date: May 08, 2011 01:02 PM · On: Chapter 15 - Eternal Flame

OH SHAME ON YOU!!! YOU LEFT ME WITH A CLIFFY.  THAT JUST MEANS THAT YOU ARE GOING TO HAVE TO UPDATE ASAP.  I LOVED THE CHAPTER, (THE YOGA ROCKED).  EDWARD'S POV WAS GOOD POINT ON, IT SHOWED JUST HOW CAUGHT UP IN THOUGHTS HE CAN BECOME.  KEEP UP THE EXCELLENT WORK SWEETS!

ANGEL 057

Reviewer: peregrin (Signed) · Date: May 08, 2011 06:38 AM · On: Chapter 15 - Eternal Flame

Is there going to be a Dark&Evil!Edward?

Reviewer: sisteria27 (Signed) · Date: May 08, 2011 01:47 AM · On: Chapter 15 - Eternal Flame

Great chapter ...Edward in Jacobs mind creepy.. um very!The song was perfect for Ewards POV... But Jacobs POV  some of it cracked me up..

Embry dragged me off the truck bed. Then I think he took my clothes off.

 

Wait.  What?

 

“Embry, are you gay?” I mumbled. Then laughter, lots of it.

 

Right. I’ve been left in the woods naked, by a dead spirit.  Good times.

 

LOL loved it ...Im really hoping for a imprint when he does see her ..Its obvious his wolf wants her as a mate or he wouldnt have went all claiming and MINE on her...Cant wait to see whats next :)

Reviewer: Gelsamina (Signed) · Date: May 07, 2011 05:30 PM · On: Chapter 15 - Eternal Flame

EPOV was a bit creepy.  I guess things will get real interesting now

Reviewer: stephsmith (Signed) · Date: May 07, 2011 04:38 PM · On: Chapter 15 - Eternal Flame

When Edward experienced those things through Jake it was a little creepy but in a good way.  Edward didn't seem creepy at all.  He seemed mature and swept away with love/lust.  Now Jake didn't seem so cool.  I was hoping the wolf thing would mature him and maybe it will later on but he's such a little kid.  He's still sweet and very hot but not up to a competition with Edward's.  I know I say this in every review and it's probably boring by now.  I still love your story no matter that's she's with Jacob.       

Reviewer: tracish (Signed) · Date: May 07, 2011 02:17 PM · On: Chapter 15 - Eternal Flame

I like reading Jacob's pov, but I miss Bella's.  I didn't like reading Edward's. It makes me feel sorry for him. 

Reviewer: k1942 (Signed) · Date: May 07, 2011 01:56 PM · On: Chapter 15 - Eternal Flame

Any reason Bella seems the last to know? I never thought she was stupid, or unaware. The wolves are worried she's in danger, they better find a way to let her know. The mind reading was  about like I would have thought, and the lyrics were perfect. It is shaping up nicely and you are doing a great job.

Reviewer: Trina281 (Signed) · Date: May 07, 2011 12:30 PM · On: Chapter 15 - Eternal Flame

So excited to see the update. Great chapter. Edward was creepy, but that is just him!

Reviewer: leelator (Signed) · Date: May 07, 2011 09:28 AM · On: Chapter 15 - Eternal Flame

Enjoyed the chapter, girl! Personally, I loved hearing from both Edward and Jacob! Yeah, it's pretty creepy that Edward gets off from listening to Jacob's thoughts, but honestly, could you help yourself were you in his situation? Of course, listening to Jacob's thoughts must really increase his own appetite for her, so to speak. ;p

Personally, I'm not crazy about including song lyrics in stories. But I know everybody else is.

LOVED JPOV after he phased. It was just so wonderfully Jake like. I particularly loved that he was pretty calm about everything, just assuming he was dreaming. Typically Jake. Can't wait to see what happens next! Let me know if I can help you out with any of it. And congrats for being accepted in the Beta thing. What is that?

Reviewer: wordslinger (Signed) · Date: May 07, 2011 07:51 AM · On: Chapter 15 - Eternal Flame

Uh, I don't think it was too creepy at all. Edward always was a selfish bastard. What struck me most was he didn't even notice how he was affecting her. He just saw it as making progress. But Embry saw it. I'm glad he did too.

AND NOW I'M TOTALLY FREAKING OUT!!!

Moving on.

I was laughing at the guys doing their wolfy thing. I hope the next chapter isn't too sad, and I hope Jacob imprints on Bella. I really REALLY don't want Edward to get it in. LOL

Reviewer: Miaka1977j (Signed) · Date: April 29, 2011 02:26 PM · On: Chapter 14 - Just Dance

Awesome story!  I am loving this and I do hope you continue!

Reviewer: sheepish (Signed) · Date: April 23, 2011 10:35 PM · On: Chapter 14 - Just Dance

Like your story :)

Hope to see more soon.

Reviewer: sweeteternity8 (Signed) · Date: April 19, 2011 01:38 PM · On: Chapter 14 - Just Dance

awesome!!



Author's Response:

Thanks for the review! I appreicate you dropping me a line!

Reviewer: Amber20 (Signed) · Date: April 17, 2011 09:17 PM · On: Chapter 1 - The Return to Forks

I can't wait to see where this goes. Please keep writing, its awesome!

Reviewer: sisteria27 (Signed) · Date: April 16, 2011 08:59 AM · On: Chapter 14 - Just Dance

OH great chapter !! Loved Embrys point of view (Super Embry to the Rescue=so damn cute ) His inner monologue was priceless ..Jake and Edwards point of view would be awsome ..Please dont make Jake break her heart tho no matter what Sam says Jake is Alpha no way if hes that in love would he listen and stay away from her and Im hoping she is his Imprint in this story ..ok starting to ramble here so anyway ...cant wait for the next update:)



Author's Response:

Thanks for the review!  I really appreciate that you took the time to drop me a note! I think Embry is probably my fav wolf next to our dear Jake, and he's funt to write.  I'll try not to make the whole 'keeping the secret' thing too hard on our lovebirds.

 

Reviewer: EllieCullen (Signed) · Date: April 13, 2011 10:58 PM · On: Chapter 14 - Just Dance

Oh my gosh, the bits about Edward in this chapter were just.. disgusting! The way Embry put them... Please don't tell me Edward gets Bella - even for a second! I used to love Edward but then probably over a year ago i just started hating him! Especially when i started reading fanfics. Then i started loving Emmett, Jasper and of course Jacob.

But this just pushed me over the edge! He's so creepy, but you were right in one of your chapter end notes, outside of Twilight, watching a girl sleeping and stalking her is not romantic and it never will be. 

In the next chapter I'd love to see what happens with Jacob and when and how Bella finds out about him. I hope Edward doesn't win her over somehow because she freaks out about Jacob or something. I know you'll have to eventually write about what happens after the dance and Edward's thoughts and all that but i don't think i could even handle that right now! Haha.

Your work is great! Are you Australian? You actually spell centre with 're' and you use the term 'hook up'. I've never seen that before in any other fanfic, it's refreshing, because that's what i'm used to. (:

 



Author's Response:

Thanks so much!  Sorry to creep you out, but I'm like you.  When I read Twilight, I really loved their whirlwind romance, and then the more I read fanfiction, the more I realised that Eddie was a little stalkery at times.  I really love playing with that side of him while writing. 

I'm Canadian, so I do the Commonwealth spelling.  I'm glad someone can catch onto my spellings and terms.  I've had my validator ask me what words were before.

Thanks so much for reviewing, it means a lot to me.

Reviewer: EllieCullen (Signed) · Date: April 13, 2011 08:09 PM · On: Chapter 2 - The Beach

haha oh the v muscle, love it (:

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