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Reviewer: DaSrO (Signed) · Date: September 18, 2010 03:13 PM · On: Chapter 4

I really enjoy reading your story =-) sorry,I havent been paying much atention, as far as I understand, I see 2 eggs and that Alice & Jasper are waiting for other 2 eggs in a hundred years or so...how is it that Alice's already talking about Jasper Jr when he's still so far away from even being an egg? I just got confussed with the 4 babies and the chapter end note thing =-P nice prologue, do you plan to skip a hundred years per chepter to cover more than 2000 years?wow, thats a lot hehe but if so,it would be absurd to have a war when a touch to Alice from Aro would explain everything, besides, in 2000 years there would be several vampiric teenagers with parent to prove the point...anyway, hope you can post soon

Have a nice weekend

Daniela



Author's Response:

Jackson's egg was puked up between chapters 2 and 3. And, as soon as an egg is out, Alice can see its future, and some things (like the past and scientific principals) are set in stone, so Alice can see them this far in advance. ]

Sorry the chapter end note is confusing, I have actually already written the rough draft of this story, and am working on the draft for the sequel, in between editing and putting the final touches on this one. That is why I get the updates up so quickly :) So, in the part I am writing now Jasper and Alice already have all six kids.

I am not going to skip 100 years at a time, but there are two periods where I am going to skip more than a hundred years, so that I can cover the whole time span.

And Alice will not be able to touch Aro's hand because this will give away other secrets. You'll just have to wait a while to see what happens. Keep reading, and thanks for the review!

Reviewer: caiusaromarcus (Signed) · Date: September 18, 2010 06:15 AM · On: Chapter 4

Great chapter! I really like the part where Nessie and the Quileutes come for the party!



Author's Response:

Thanks!

Reviewer: silly sad sarah twilighted (Signed) · Date: September 17, 2010 09:03 AM · On: Chapter 2

Very curious how they will handle a human living with their egg inside of them how can they protect it and the secret.

Reviewer: silly sad sarah twilighted (Signed) · Date: September 17, 2010 08:58 AM · On: Chapter 1

Interesting if not bizare hehehe  good job!

Reviewer: silly sad sarah twilighted (Signed) · Date: September 17, 2010 06:47 AM · On: Prologue

I am curiouse as to how this will play out. 

Reviewer: OrchidFlowers (Signed) · Date: September 16, 2010 08:34 AM · On: Chapter 3

I like the Jasper point of view!



Author's Response:

Thanks! There will be another Jasper POV coming up soon :)

Reviewer: OrchidFlowers (Signed) · Date: September 16, 2010 08:34 AM · On: Chapter 2

Will Rosalie and Esme finally get children too?



Author's Response:

Yes, Rosalie and Esme are both already with egg! Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: OrchidFlowers (Signed) · Date: September 16, 2010 08:33 AM · On: Chapter 1

I like the human parasitism



Author's Response:

Thanks! I thought it fitting that vampires would parasitize humans!

Reviewer: halerosalie100 (Signed) · Date: September 14, 2010 03:37 PM · On: Prologue

I like how Jasper calls his kids by emotions for nicknames. Awesome!



Author's Response:

Thanks!

Reviewer: jasperalice (Signed) · Date: September 13, 2010 11:31 AM · On: Prologue

Jasper and Alice are going to have four parasites? cool!



Author's Response:

They are actually going to have 6 parasites...

Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: grayskiesatdawn (Signed) · Date: September 13, 2010 11:06 AM · On: Chapter 3

Wow, that was very scientific and informative.



Author's Response:

Thanks!

Reviewer: Dava_Luna (Signed) · Date: September 13, 2010 10:08 AM · On: Prologue

Hmmm Now I have to come up with another SUPER animal. Off to reseach superior animal species!!! : )

BTW... LOVE the prologue... I went to your fanfiction site completely prepared to spend my entire weekend glued to my laptop reading this story. Imagine my disappointment when I had to actually think of something else to occupy my time. Go outside?! Clean my house?! Get off the couch?!?!?! grrr.... I guess I will have to wait for chapter by chapter like everyone else.



Author's Response:

Thanks!

There are lots of types of cephalods...

I know, I'm evil for taking it down...but, I am revising it, so hopefully a better story will go up. But, the X-rated outtakes are still up! I do have another story over there you could read...it is totally different, but most of my readers like both...

Reviewer: jasperalice (Signed) · Date: September 12, 2010 02:35 PM · On: Chapter 3

Alice's egg can see the past? Awesome power. I love it!



Author's Response:

Thanks! Ii am fond of that power myself...comes in very handy in explanations :)

Reviewer: 78slayer (Signed) · Date: September 12, 2010 12:29 PM · On: Chapter 3

I lvoe this story even if I don't understand any of the biology talk in it I do get the genral idea. I really love that last sentance that is rather cute. I am eagerly awaiting the next installment to this wonderful story.



Author's Response:

Thanks! My goal is to make the science understandable, so if you don't understand some of it, make sure to let me know so that I can fix it!

Next I submitted the prologue, but it is rather short, so I was hoping to get two chapters up this week...but, after that we will get to see the pet humans!

Reviewer: vampires4us (Signed) · Date: September 12, 2010 03:43 AM · On: Chapter 3

this is so funny. It is ridiculous and just... just what i ned to brighten i bad day. Thank-you.



Author's Response:

You're very welcome. Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: eddie_lickmyas (Signed) · Date: September 11, 2010 03:50 PM · On: Chapter 3

YES. xrated versionn please.



Author's Response:

Yay! You are the first person to request it! Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: lizde (Signed) · Date: September 11, 2010 10:53 AM · On: Chapter 1

This is so bizarre. It's also totally awesome. Love the banner by the way.



Author's Response:

Thanks! I love my banner too...If I ever learn how to animate in powerpoint, I'll animate it so that the Jasper cartoon actually vomits up the egg and feeds it to the pet human...I also wish I knew how to animate it so that the egg looks like it is tearing it's way out of the human...

Reviewer: Dava_Luna (Signed) · Date: September 10, 2010 06:19 PM · On: Chapter 3

woo hoo am I  in the lead so far? hmm... now i have thinking to do. Im thinking cepholapod. : D



Author's Response: There can be multiple winners to this race, and each person can even when twice (this contest will carry through to the sequel, and between the two, there are more than 50 chapters)! I have a tempary list of hybrids, and it has 35 hybrids on it, so there can be 35 winners...If by some freak accident I have more than 35 winners, I will simply make more hybrids... As it is, the tentative list includes a cephlapod! So I thought I would paste the entry here for you, because if you choose a cephlapod, it would replace this one: Olivia Clearwater: Seth's kid. Animal: Octopus. Power: Can make two people attracted to one another (only in her presence though). I know, it's a lame name, which is why I need winners to replace all of the generic names and animals with cool ones! Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: jasperalice (Signed) · Date: September 08, 2010 04:28 PM · On: Chapter 2

Laying eggs is chick stuff- LOL



Author's Response:

Thanks for the reveiw!

Reviewer: caiusaromarcus (Signed) · Date: September 08, 2010 04:26 PM · On: Chapter 2

I love the new banner! The best part is the dead human at the bottom with the X-ed out eyes and hole in the stomach!



Author's Response:

Thanks! I'm glad you like it!

Reviewer: Dava_Luna (Signed) · Date: September 06, 2010 08:58 PM · On: Chapter 1

Menkes Disease

Menkes disease is a condition that affects copper metabolism. It is caused by a defective gene. A child with Menkes disease usually has normal development for the first six to eight weeks of life; however, after that point, symptoms such as a low body temperature and weak muscle tone become apparent. Additionally, the infant may have seizures and colorless, kinky hair that breaks easily. Treatment for the condition is copper supplementation. This treatment won't prolong life unless it is started shortly after birth, which is highly unlikely as there isn't any screening done at birth for the condition. Without early treatment, the child will pass away by his 10th birthday.



Read more: http://www.livestrong.com/article/21691-list-rare-fatal-diseases/#ixzz0yoR14Wlr

 

Good Luck : ) and if you have to have a boy name maybe Noah? My 1 year old son's name. <3



Author's Response:

That is totally perfect for Bella's egg's host! Oh, and I went back and looked at my story line and realized that the 1st disease you left would work perfect for Jasper's second egg's host, who is a female (Jasper gets 4 eggs- it's part of the objectives to knock-up Jasper; a lot). So, now we have Dava and Noah! Awesome! Thanks for the names/diseases and review!

Reviewer: Dava_Luna (Signed) · Date: September 06, 2010 04:05 PM · On: Chapter 2

Only 2 chapters in and I am IN LOVE with this story. Bravo... So heres my dying host.

Alveolar capillary dysplasia (ACD, also congenital alveolar dysplasia) is a very rare congenital malformation involving abnormal development of the capillary vascular system around the alveoli of the lungs. It is a rare cause of persistent pulmonary hypertension in infants.[1] It also may be a rare cause of pulmonary hypoplasia.[2] The outcome is neonatal death. One of the longest surviving infants lived 2 months.[3]

I also think she should be named after me. Dava : ) Pronounced Day-va



Author's Response:

Thanks for the review, glad you love my story!

Wow! they only survive for two months? That does not fit the time line for any of the hosts in this story...

I was so totally about to use Dava for Emmett's egg's host, but Emmett is going to take so long to upcheck his egg that the host almost dies...Dava would never make it...

Wait, I could use the disease for Edward or Bella's egg's hosts, but they are both boys...could I change your name to Dave? Wait, I can't use Dave, I use it for a vampire later...

Or wait, I could name Emmett's egg's host Dava and give the Bella's egg's host the disease. Does that work?

Reviewer: Musegirl (Signed) · Date: September 06, 2010 02:18 PM · On: Chapter 2

I love it!  So weird and wacky and outrageously tongue in cheek funny.  Keep writing, please.  I can't wait for Edward to chuck up his egg!



Author's Response:

Thanks for the review! I'm esctatic you like the tongue and cheek humor!

I'm not going to show the other vomitings in such detail: once you've seen you male vampire vomit up blood you've seen them all. But, if you want a spoiler: Edward's egg is a female mind-reader. And, when Edward bolted down his piano, preventing her from picking it up, lifting it over her littermate's head, and smashing it down upon said littermate's head, she simply picked up her littermate and smashed him/her down into the piano. Now Edward has no piano :( Oh, and she causes Esme to ban chairs from the house. But, what else can you expect from vampiric spawn?

Reviewer: caiusaromarcus (Signed) · Date: September 06, 2010 02:05 PM · On: Chapter 2

How about cystic fibrosis?



Author's Response:

That's not deadly enough anymore...

Reviewer: 78slayer (Signed) · Date: September 06, 2010 01:09 PM · On: Chapter 2

Well this is different, I love this rather funny story so far. I am eagerly awaiting the next installment.



Author's Response:

I'm glad you share my sense of humor. Stay tuned because the next chapter features such hilarity as vestigal breasts and egg-sitting. I'm going to upload it to the que today...

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