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Reviewer: Much2shy142 (Signed) · Date: April 02, 2011 02:53 PM · On: Retribution

Fantastic battle chapter! I am very curious to read the Alpha Jacob paragraph too. I've really been enjoying this story and looking forward to your updates every week

Reviewer: Queendel (Signed) · Date: April 02, 2011 12:30 PM · On: Retribution

Exciting update. The battle was satisfying. Edward's and Bella reunion was intense, and passionate, and his interaction with his family, great.

Love what Marcus did to Stefen and Vladimir, although I would have done worst.

Aribert died too quickly, I would have taken off his limbs and place him in the iron-maiden, holding him until he died, a long time, as I would feed him once a month to keep him alive. He really needed to suffer.

Nice to see Jacob find someone and I rellay like Evelena, she had Edward's back.

I agree with Aro, Edward did play his enemies masterfully, and his/their victory is to be celebrated as it is sweet. He was an ingenious plant and the downfall of the Romanians who orchestrated it themselves. What irony!!

Great stuff. Eager for more soon.

Reviewer: amhatfie (Signed) · Date: April 02, 2011 09:42 AM · On: Retribution

Oh, holy hell. that was freakin amazing. I can only imaging what everyone as went thru. I could almost feel the emotion as B and E were reunited. I honestly dont know what else to say about this chapter other than it was the best yet. Can't wait for more.

Alaina

Reviewer: Nikkycoly (Signed) · Date: April 02, 2011 09:22 AM · On: Retribution

Great job!

Reviewer: Bostonsunrise88 (Signed) · Date: April 02, 2011 06:39 AM · On: Retribution

I love this story.... thank you for keeping up with the posting. Can't wait for the next chapter.

Reviewer: Rahveryn (Signed) · Date: April 02, 2011 01:36 AM · On: Retribution

I would rather you write. Goodbye Romanians; may your souls rot and burn as your bodies had.

We gonna see some reunion lovin or are we gonna fast forward?

Good "fight". Worth it's own chapter.

Reviewer: badkfare (Signed) · Date: April 02, 2011 12:26 AM · On: Retribution

Bravo! What a battle. I loved everything about the fighting and how you brought us into it. I also loved the almost lemon in front of everyone and how they didn't even notice, ah young lost! I knew Jacob and Evelina were going to imprint on each other and I'm happy that he's no longer alone but that he might possibly get to stick around to be close to Edward and Bella. I had one small complaint, well not a complaint but what I had hoped happened. I knew that Vladimir and Stefan were going to die, it was a given but I hoped that Didyme woulld've been the one to kill them. I mean after all they did to her, it would've been nice to see her get the final say. Not that what Marcus did wasn't brilliant because it was.

I really wished you had written the final battle in Breaking Dawn because yours was a hell of a lot better! Have a great weekend and I cannot wait for the next chapter with all the hot lovin going on!!!

Reviewer: brittanyrayne (Signed) · Date: April 01, 2011 09:42 PM · On: Retribution

amazing chapter, of course my dear, lol....thank you for this incredible story, i love it, as you well know. and also your amazing!!

Reviewer: fellowsandfokies (Signed) · Date: April 01, 2011 06:32 PM · On: Retribution

AWESOME CHAPTER!!!!

Really loved the reunion and Jake's imprinting... just really great visuals throughout the whole thing... I felt like I was watching a movie :)

Reviewer: crmcneill (Signed) · Date: April 01, 2011 06:23 PM · On: Retribution

In response to my whining author, I will repeat my reasoning, both for her and for all who read the reviews. There was nothing in the battle scene to give Jake the motivation to step into the Alpha shoes. In BD, Sam used his Alpha voice to order Jake to attack the Cullens, which he knew was wrong. The only way for him to resist was to claim his Alpha heritage, so that he was no longer subject to Sam's commands.

In this situation, Jake is fighting vampires and protecting his newly discovered imprint; no one is forcing him to do anything. The only way he would've needed to step into the Alpha shoes would've been if Sam had used his Alpha voice to order Jake to kill Bella or something, which would've given him the moral imperative that he needed to claim his heritage. There is nothing like that here.

Now stop whining and start writing.

Reviewer: MaryMaryMary (Signed) · Date: April 01, 2011 04:47 PM · On: Retribution

Well I think this was an important chapter. Very Good for those of us who wanted revenge.

Reviewer: Debbie1870 (Signed) · Date: March 30, 2011 05:35 PM · On: Reunion

Jacob's found a mate? That Great! No screams from me. Maybe Leah will too!

Please don't let the German get away!

Reviewer: pachuu85 (Signed) · Date: March 30, 2011 07:36 AM · On: Reunion

the truth is I have no words to express how much I like this story. How you mix the story of Steph Meyer, literature and even legends .. Far one of the best I read so far.
I admit that I even made eyes water uncontrollably when Edward fell in the hands of the Romanians
I am looking forward the new chapter. It's next battle, but as a big fan of romance stories, I hope there is a place for the encounter of Bella and Edward!
XX

Paola

Reviewer: msKuhlena (Signed) · Date: March 29, 2011 10:59 AM · On: Reunion

oh my i can't believe you just left us. . . hmm ok i eagerly await your next update!

Reviewer: twihardacctant (Signed) · Date: March 28, 2011 10:49 PM · On: Reunion

wow!!! what a great chapter !!!

Reviewer: zaruka (Signed) · Date: March 28, 2011 09:17 PM · On: Reunion

great job!!!

Reviewer: JRParz (Signed) · Date: March 28, 2011 05:19 PM · On: Reunion

I disagree. A good battle does not need a whole chapter with you holding the pen... but knowing we'll be getting a whole chapter, in this upcoming battle, means we'll be in for a mind staggering masterpiece! :-)

I was not at all disappointed with this last chapter. It truly HIT the SPOT. It was emotional (in fact - that is an understatement), and you truly played it out perfectly.

It was a pleasant surprise to have the female werewolf's POV, for it provided an insight that made me smile. Marcus and Didyme's reunion was done incredibly well, and I thought the tribute you had Aro demonstrate was SPOT on!

I anxiously await your next chapter and cannot tell you enough how awesome this story is! Thank you for sharing your incredible talent!

Reviewer: amhatfie (Signed) · Date: March 28, 2011 04:42 PM · On: Reunion

OMG!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Sadly that required a whole line. I freakin love this. I love the moment with Marcus and Didyme, I love Evelina, I love the description of the army, I love Edward and Bella, I love the surprise that is going on.

Hell, I even love the damn cliffy. Great job yet again.

Alaina

Reviewer: brittanyrayne (Signed) · Date: March 28, 2011 01:52 AM · On: Reunion

wow, what can i say?? thank you i guess would be a good start, lol, i was shocked silly when i saw you dedicated this chapter to me, that really means alot, thank you....and i am sooo happy jake and evelina will end up together, thats awesome, i''m glad. i just happened to look earlier to see if another chapter was posted, and lucky me, there it was, and with a bonus no less! i was sitting by my husband when i seen your dedication, and grabbed his shirt at his arm and gripped tight, he looked at me like i was nuts, lol, then i said look baby! he said no way, thats awesome babe, and then i had to explain to him about the story, and about my guess, and then i told him you were the writter i had told him about a couple days ago, i was bragging on your incredible writting skills, and how you capture your reader and keep them hooked wanting more, he said i should feel honored you mentioned me, and i told him well of course i do! and i do, thank you once again, and thank you soooo much for this amazing story, i already can't wait for the next chapter, i know, i know you just posted this one, lol, but hey a girl can wish right!! lol! i'll send you another comment next chapter also, of course!! brittany gerlach (brittanyrayne)

Reviewer: Rahveryn (Signed) · Date: March 28, 2011 01:04 AM · On: Reunion

..... I agree, it does need it's own chapter. I'm looking forward to it. Soon please.

Reviewer: prudent (Signed) · Date: March 27, 2011 11:44 PM · On: Reunion

Wow - great chapter! And I love the quote from your Beta :) Looking forward to seeing how this all plays out...

Reviewer: griff1au (Signed) · Date: March 27, 2011 10:02 PM · On: Reunion

You got me wanting to jump up and pound something into the ground, and then you STOP!!!

Reviewer: zaruka (Signed) · Date: March 27, 2011 09:22 PM · On: Lost One

great job!

Reviewer: deborahlicious (Signed) · Date: March 27, 2011 09:01 PM · On: Reunion

Yay! I stayed up until midnight on a work night when I have to get up at 6am to get rteady for work. I just ran across this today and have to read all of it because I just couldn't walk awy from it.- Cant wait to read more.

Reviewer: zaruka (Signed) · Date: March 27, 2011 08:40 PM · On: Degredation

great job!

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