Poor Ness, thats just creepy.  She can't do anything with out them seeing if they want to?  And how is Nahual able to speak to her?  Very interesting, I can't wait to see how this all plays out!

This will make you laugh. My first thought was, if I was Ness i would have sex with Jake just to piss him off, that would show him! lol (I, for better or worse, unfortunatly, sort of have a "fuck you" kind of attitude)

Love the story!  Take care, Dixie

Author's Response:

LMAO! I had not thought of that, but ya know I would have trouble focusing knowing I was being watched. And I wonder how Jake would feel knowing his performance was being watched and critiqued.

I love your input, btw, you are awesome.

Voodoo.  :-)  It would make sense with Nahuel in South America.  :-)  Hell, if there are vampires, and shape-shifters, than of course it's feasible that there would be witchcraft. 

Time for the Cullens to come together as one force!  :-)

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No, sorry, not witchcraft exactly, but that is an interesting take on it. There is definately something up, but it is more related to Scientific advance ment than to witchcraft. Cool idea though.

Good Lord! Caus must be the one that wants revenge? but how can he be watching them? Is is protege'?

I hope Ness tells Jake about the dream!

Author's Response:

I am thrilled that you are enjoying the story. Please keep reaading and reviewing.

Oh man how sweet, that was perfect!  Plus a great first kiss!  I can't stop grinning! :)

Dixie

Author's Response:

Aww you made my night. I am so glad you are enjoying it.

Now the fun begins!

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LOL here comes the romance!!!

So sweet!  I agree with Ness Romeo and Juliet always bugged me too!

Take care, Dixie

Author's Response:

Thank you! I have always thought the poetry was beautiful, but the ending was dorkey.

Man that was close!  I'm sure Sue is glad Jake listen to Ness!

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Oh yeah, now she just has to keep charlie in check, he is NOT a good patient.

Wow, I love the start!  I can't wait to see where you take it from here!

Dixie

Author's Response:

I really hope you like it. Please keep treading and reviewing.

A divide amongst the Volturi, cool, will alice forsee this as well?

this was a very short chapter. Just a filler? Will you update again soon?

Author's Response:

not a filler, a nessasary bridge to what is to come. AND YES I will update as soon as I am validated. 

Ah, I had a feeling it was the Volturi!  The voice of each of the three brothers is distinct here.  Clearly, Caius is going to be the problem, and that is no surprise.  He dislikes the Cullens the most, is the most warlike, and dislikes anything or anyone connected with wolves.

I guess we shall have to see what plan he forms.  Poor Nessie and Jake.  They just can't get a breather, can they?

Please update soon!

Author's Response:

Thank you Soooooo much for hearing each brother. I struggled with this chapter, I knew it was short, but I wanted the tension and intrigue to grow. I am so glad you got it.

Hm...I wonder what's going on.  Is it the Volturi or a nomad maybe?  And why are they targeting Jake and Nessie?

Please update soon!

Author's Response:

Someone has chosen to watch them, because of who they are and what they represent... Duh duh dun!!!

read all 9 chapters of your fiction and it has literally been the only thing on here i found so far that i could keep reading - i love your writing and its so sweet and brilliant having nessie imprint too - great job - hope you'll keep sharing your story - you are doing a great job.

Author's Response:

That is one of the sweetest things anyone has ever said. There is more to come. Please keep reading and reviewing.