oh wow, they have more than made up. 

s'wonderful ... but I'm in a mad dash to get to the next chapter. I don't know what I'm doing to do when I'm caught up with you. I guess the nagging will have to start ... LOL

HOLY SNAPPING DUCKSHIT!  What's going on???

 

Can't review more, have to dash to the next chapter!

Ohhhhh, NOW the conflict is getting serious!  Hit of soap opera going on here, but you're still conveying it all really well.  Bella is young after all, so her reactions are entirely within the usual standards!

WOW.  I mean really ... just ... and the way you wrote the ... and the way they ... just ... yeah ...

 

WOW.

Hooo boy, is it hot in here?

That was ... well I don't quite know what to say, other than to say it was SENSATIONAL!  It was so sweet, and so beautifully done.  You conveyed Bella's uncertainty so well - I only wish MY first time could have been that good!

*happy sigh*

See, this is what Breaking Dawn should have been like.  Hot damn but that book annoyed me.  Don't get me wrong, I've re-read it a few times now and I can tolerate it, but I'm sure you'll agree it was a crushing letdown - and they're never going to be able to film it.

Still, your version more than makes up for it - I'm totally addicted already!

Oh this is just WONDERFUL!

I'm already hooked on your writing 'voice'.  You have a clear, crisp delivery, your dialogue flows very naturally, and your descriptions are great without being a case of 'too much information'.

All in all, this is a very pleasant read, and I'm looking forward to more. You hear me? MORE! LOL.  Hey, I may be 38, but I can still turn into a rabid Twilight fangirl with the best of 'em!

I love your story!!! I'm really excited for the next chapter. I hope that Bella remembers ALL of Edward soon.....I can hardly wait for the next chapter!!! Great work!!!

Awesome chapter.  I love the way you wrote that.  I love how vocal Edward was.  I believed he really enjoyed himself.  I am so glad you wrote it that way.  I get tired of people writing it like he still would have that much of a control problem with her blood. Most people write like he is miserable the entire time and can barely make it.   I am going to have to read it again.

WELL DONE!!!!

BREATHE. BREATHE. IN. OUT. IN. OUT. I can't type if I can't breathe right. And I can't see what I'm typing if these tears don't subside. I have to force the tears to stop. I have to take deep breaths to calm my thundering heart and still my trembling hands. And I must turn to my computer once again, ready to convey just exactly what has happened to me with this latest addition to what is undoubtedly a work of pure poetry.

Blessed Alyssa.....I’m at a loss for words.

I am shocked, frozen, dumbfounded, and just completely awed by it all. TRULY AWED. This was so different from what I expected. SO different. (I sigh…) I was, in confession, expecting a traditional “awakening scene” where Bella would immediately remember everyone, shield intact, and thirst in submission. I expected a tender and passionate reunion between our B&E. Basically, Alyssa, I expected everything to be tied up in a nice little chapter that would capture all of the basic elements with your style and flair for ardor. But my, oh my, how you’ve opened my eyes to something so completely and utterly magnificent. I should’ve known better.

I choked in confusion and disorientation with Bella. I looked on with fear, hope, and wonder with the Cullens. And I cried and sobbed in unison with Edward, my chest heaving in tempo with his heartbreak. I became them and lived it with them. And I don’t know exactly how to thank you for that. All I know to do is post you a review and give your story the highest rating I can. But all my heart can do is whisper it’s reverence for your writing, praying you understand just how amazing I think it is.

That Bella remembers Edward last is shocking and breaks my heart. But I think I understand why this is. When a person recovers from a tragedy or a traumatic event, it is often the most intense and consuming memory that is last able to break through the barrier that is erected to protect the mind and the soul. Bella remembers the easy, the comfortable, and the least jarring first. It’s what’s most accessible to her and within her reach. But Edward (deep sigh…)….he is ingrained so deeply within Bella’s very being that to bring him forth immediately would be too much for her to bear. Too much for her still fragile self to absorb. And so the memories of him trickle in slowly, painfully so. Excruciatingly for our beloved Edward. And this makes it all the more devastating to endure.

What I found most jarring was that it was the memory of him leaving her in the forest that served as the first real understanding Bella had of who Edward was in her life. Such a revelation can cripple her return to self, and simultaneously, torture Edward once again for his most grievous mistake.

I agree with you that the road to B&E’s reunion should be not easy. The struggle is what makes it all the more divine in the end. And I not only trust that such divinity will be conquered by our beloved B&E in your work, but I have complete faith in the love, passion, and devotion you conceive for them. They deserve nothing less. It is one word, RAPTURE. And it’s beautiful.

Okay.  No stone throwing.  But I expect a damn good lemon soimewhere in the upcoming chapters. ;)