its ok ok ok

Quite honestly, I read the stories but i've never reviewed one. not one. I feel like I'm a terrible person, like I'm depriving the writers of what the crave the most. BUT this story is the best- and trust me, I've dedicated all of my free time to reading fan written stories. you have captured the characterization of stephenie's original characters perfectly but at the same time giving them a hint of your own stlye. it's absolutely mind blowing how many different events your mind can form. I'm anxiously awaiting another chapter from this story and am desperately hoping that this is not the end. I just have a minor suggestion, only because I'm an editor and have been working in the field for a handful if years. make sure you proof-read. I know that it is an extremly daunting task that nobody likes to do, but quite frankly, it needs to be done. there were a few mistakes that stuck out in this chapter, not so many in the previous ones. also, I wanted to tell you about your word choice. it's very good, your level of sophistication sky-rockets with some of the complex words you use. all-in-all, it's a fantastic story line and is written very well. congratulations on recieving my first ever reveiw and I appologize that it is so long, I just enjoy writing. good luck with the future chapters, although I'm feeling a little like Alice since I know they will be great.

Jebus!

That was so freaking HOT! Out of control Edward is just...WOW! This was an amazing chapter. All of the gifts were so perfect! And that was a Merry Christmas for Edward. The end was just heartbreaking though.

Sorry about all your RL problems. I hope your feeling better now.

You did great!

I think these last few chapters have been great. You build drama and atmosphere very well. And yeh, big scare...though I am unsure whether Edward would really have broken up a chair so close to Bella. But then again, he thought he'd lose her so...

A truely beautiful chapter! I'm loving the tenderness and sincerity of your writing.

Wow awsome story I just couldent put it down I can't wait for the next chapter

I love this story, especially since Bella is starting to express her emotions.  I thought Bella should of told Edward that putting his hands around her head in anger was unacceptable.  

You are a great writer.

 

Loved the wedding. And loved this part - 

He looked smug almost, his stone lips pulled into his crooked smile. And yet, the second our eyes locked and he really saw me, his eyes were exultant. A brighter gold then I’d ever seen them, his smile pulled across his face into a full beam. He went from content to overjoyed in seconds, and I could see from his somewhat heaving chest that he was breathing harder. I laughed inwardly at this; so much for not needing to breathe, Edward.

WOW!  I am LOVING your description of the transformation.  Better/different details than SM gave in BD.  Thank you

Terrific first chapter. Glad I found this. Have to run out, but will favorite your story so I can come back for more!

dont think the rating is a reflection of ur writign because it isnt u write so fluidly. i just dont exactly like what is happening here at the moment. no rocks or anyhting just well ok i will keep reading now

wow ok one of the things that i missed in BD was that she was never actually bitten. i mean i love the way the book is written and all it just would have been nice if she had been bitten so thats really cool