The story is hard to read. I´m sad and also hopeful that everything will turn out right.

Very true to characters though. I can almost believe your Bella here. It´s a story that could have happened over at BD.

sincerely,

Karina.

Ok. I don´t know how I feel about the turn the story is taking but, I´ll try to be open about it.

On the other hand there were two parts I loved:

1. I smiled appreciatively, though I had to ask the burning question. “You’re…you’re all wearing…pajamas…” I asked, dumbfounded.

 

“Just because we don’t sleep doesn’t mean we don’t own any,” Edward snorted.

 

“Yeah!” Alice chimed. "We may have no use for them, but they are cute!” Eyeing her bright purple robe, I had a sick feeling she had a hand in all of this.

 

“She did,” Jasper called over from his place besides Emmett on the couch. “She went through this phase a while back where we all had to buy pajamas and such so we could fit in with the humans.”

 

This was so Alice. It fit great. I could see it  on BD.

 

 

2.“Oh dear God, Bella…please…”

 

“What?”

 

“If a vampire could vomit, I think I would have…”

 

“What, Edward? Tell me!”

 

His eyes wide and skeptical, he stared at me, groaning. “Bella, please, please do not tell me that you have The Backstreet Boys on your iPod…”

 

I blushed furiously. I had about 200 songs on there, and the one song that slipped through the cracks, the one that was my dirty little secret had to be the only one Edward would see. “Edward…there’s only one there.”

 

“One is enough, Bella.”

 

Ha, Ha. I´m with Edward on this one.

 

Karina.

 

Wow that was some Hot chapter. I´m still catching my breath! Excellent writting too.

I laughed so hard at this:

"He was excited about the piano. The fucking piano. Oh, Edward".

SOOOOOOO Bella. LOL

Karina.

 

LMAO  Ha, Ha, I loved this:

"We both jumped at a knock at the door, Edward straightening up as Emmett opened the door. Rose quick on his heel carried a tray of food, and walking over to settle it into my lap, I grasped her wrist. Her gemstone eyes meeting mine, I smiled as she smoothed back my hair and kissed my forehead. “Thank you…” I started, yet she pushed her finger to my lips.

 

“Eat up. You must be starving.”

 

“Yeah, Bell, I made the eggs! You could have told anyway, though. They’re the most delicious thing on the tray. So warm, and delicious and cheesy and…”

 

I never heard the rest; Rose had rolled her eyes and pulled him out of the room as he continued on and on about his amazing eggs."

 

I couldn´t stop laughing.

I really love the way you keep us laughing and crying, and the emotional stuff too much. You are great at writting.

 

sincerely,

 

Karina.

 

 

 

All the emotions in this chapter, too much for me, but I loved it.

Good for Bella for telling Edward off! His nerve (ok. I forgive him. LOL).

Can´t wait for the making up!

Karina.

LOL. Bella will be Bella. Nice chapter, loved the banter, the laughing, the lust and Emmett! I just knew Emmett would tease and make jokes. LOL.

LOVED this Part:

"The screeching of the stool against the white tile floor lessened my bravado. Where had it come from, anyway? Lost in my complete satisfaction from last night, I had somehow become pigheaded about my impending strength, and desperate to hold my own, I had taken on the strongest member of the family. The pawn and pinned itself against the Queen. What a stupid pawn."

so incredibly written, you convey story, along with emotions so well.

sincerely,

Karina.

I love Emmett!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Very nice telling of the wedding details. Insecure Bella, Funny Cullens, Thoughtful Edward. I´m really loving your Edward.

great start.

Karina.

Hello, I just found this story a few days ago anbd didn´t have the chance to finish it all the way through. I promised myself as soon as I finished it (today), I´d review each chapter for you. So here it goes:

Up to a good start.. I like your writting. Character wise is spot on.

on to the next chapter.

Karina.

I am loving your story, I love the brother/sister relationships you're building with Bella and the other Cullens.  As angry as I am with Edward being a dipshit, sometimes... I think it is part of his character.

Please keep up the story, I am totally enjoying it :)  Your lemons are some of the more romantic, honest ones I have read and it is GREAT

hmmm.....I love it so far....but seriously, who would EVER have their honeymoon in their house with their PARENTS downstairs! Parents and siblings with SUPER hearing to top it off. 

Yeah, not the most romantic place, I would have though Edward, god of romance, would have come up with a better idea....Either way, love the story so far. Can't wait to see what happens next.

Author's Response:

thanks for the review!!

as far as the honeymoon is concerned....Bella never wanted all that hoopla. she just wanted Edward and her to consummate their love and then have him change hers. I tried to keep as close to the canon of the book as I could. The Cullen's aren't in the house, either...Edward explain it all in CH 4/5

amazing absolutely amazing

I LOVE SEXY DOMINANT EDWARD CULLEN

 

Awesome...thanks