OK.. I'm reading through your whole story today and I was just going to post a review at the latest chapter but I must say something about this chapter...

HOT!!

Seriously.. At first I couldn't believe what I was reading... Edward, talking dirty?? You have really put together all my dreams in one big lemon... love. it.

Favourite line? “We could role play, baby. I’ll be the lion and you’ll be the lamb.”

You made me crumble... good thing I was alone, seriously.

Anyway I'm carrying on with the reading... This is loads better than Breaking Dawn, I must say. Although it was sad in the middle... you did good things that I didn't expect ... like this lemon for example....

Gonna stop rambling now because I want to read the rest!

whew.. that was really hard to read but i wanna thank you for writing that side of newborn bella. honestly, all the other fics i've read either not really focus on this side of her newborn nature or it would be that she won't have bloodlust at all. so this is the first one i've read where it is described how hard it is for them to go against their very nature. it was really painful.. i could just imagine...

i was wondering why jasper didn't have a say in this to further calm bella.. i mean of all the cullens, he was still the one who has some difficulty with bloodlust also.. i thought he would talk with bella and emphatize with her.

and OME. edward is really the sweetest. when he thanked bella for letting him protect/stop her.. honestly, i didn't expect that kind of emotion/response. it sort of knocked me breathless to know that after that intense of a situation, edward could still think that way. just really shows how much he loves bella. lucky her..

Author's Response:

thanks so much for your review! I was so concerned that everyone would roast me for it, but it seems you appreciate me for writing this angle...

Jasper's place in this whole world is a separate entity, and will eventually lead to a few one shots of particularly difficult scenes. Also, alot of his monologue comes on Edward's side, he being able to read thoughts. When I'm done over here, 9 or 10 more ch's, I'm starting Mine...At Long Last, which, in short, is EPOV of this WHOLE story.

 

thought it'd be cool =)

 

Thanks again!

Be Safe

-A

nice

Great as ever. Update soon!

I can't wait to see where you take this story!  I love it!!  I hope you get to upsdate sooner.

i love your insight into the struggle ot abstain from humans cant wait for the next instalment

I was totally not expecting an update notification for this story in my inbox, but alas there it was! And how very welcome a sight it was. I was hoping you would bestow us with an update and you didn't disappoint.

This was a heavy chapter indeed. It's interesting reading through the emotions of a newborn, seeing how lost they become within themselves and their need to find their identity when overcome with bloodlust. Finally, to see the loss and unrest that we never really got to see even though Edward always talked about it, was really intriguing.

I'm happy to see you writing once more. You write magic. Cannot wait to read on.

yay for summer vacation, glad to see an update. Will check out Risky Business

This was an amazing chapter!  So amazing!  Better than any I've read about newborn Bella!!  I absolutely loved it!!!!

Soooo happy you're back!!

Great update!

Very detailed, loved the wedding night.

just finished the entire story...well it's very well written, the way it is done you can feel it ! but for most of it i felt pain and fear...where sometimes i think i should i have felt joy and warmness... I am sure that if you will write thriller or horror story you will ROCK...Love need more joy and light... IMO

please go on ! :p