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Reviewer: Ryansmama04 (Signed) · Date: July 02, 2009 12:17 PM · On: Chapter 3- Here Comes the Bride...
I would have preferred that Edward and Bella went somewhere else for their first night alone, or at least had charlie and Renee leave long before...other than that I loved it
Reviewer: jbluvs2sing (Signed) · Date: July 01, 2009 10:01 PM · On: Chapter 16 - Vile
This was an awesome chapter!! I loved how you portrayed Bella during the time when the officers were there. I felt her thirst...it was that good.
Reviewer: aylah50 (Signed) · Date: July 01, 2009 08:24 PM · On: Chapter 10- Decision
Wow, this is the first story on here I truly cried while reading...I wish I didn't have to get up so early tomorrow or I'd stay up until I finished all the chapters that are left... This is really beautiful.
Reviewer: ambersky (Signed) · Date: July 01, 2009 07:50 AM · On: Chapter 16 - Vile
love this chapter good work
Reviewer: Bebo (Signed) · Date: July 01, 2009 07:40 AM · On: Chapter 16 - Vile
wonderful. beautiful. continue.
Reviewer: Bebo (Signed) · Date: July 01, 2009 04:26 AM · On: Chapter 15- Rapture
this was amazing. beautiful. i'm kinda warming up up to edward reading bella's mind. i like it here. lol
this is a beautiful story. i hope that the next chapter isn't the the end?? we'll see... well i'll see.. u already know. lol
Reviewer: Steph29 (Signed) · Date: July 01, 2009 04:21 AM · On: Chapter 16 - Vile
My god, I've just caught up and for a moment, I thought Bella was going to rip Edward apart, the way she was struggling like that, I really thought she was going to kill him. So glad he managed to hold her back.
Can't wait for more :)
Reviewer: Bebo (Signed) · Date: July 01, 2009 03:57 AM · On: Chapter 14- 20 Questions
ok i like this. ahah "make me remember" nice. good job. sorry but those last couple of chapters were hard to get through.. i guess that was the point.
Reviewer: Bebo (Signed) · Date: July 01, 2009 03:40 AM · On: Chapter 13- A Love Worth Fighting For
i don't really like the way this is playing out.. not that it isn't good.. i just don't like it.. oh and i really don't like that edward can read bella's thoughts. in some way u've made them less...special.. they were different...
i mean this story is good but... i just don't like that part. =/
Reviewer: Bebo (Signed) · Date: July 01, 2009 03:36 AM · On: Chapter 13- A Love Worth Fighting For
i don't really like the way this is playing out.. not that it isn't good.. i just don't like it..
Reviewer: Bebo (Signed) · Date: July 01, 2009 02:17 AM · On: Chapter 12- Opening My Eyes To the Sun
it was good.. but i prefer breaking dawn's version of her waking up to a new day; she was supposed to be react different to this life than other vampires. but this is ur story so i'll live and continue reading.
Reviewer: Bebo (Signed) · Date: July 01, 2009 01:25 AM · On: Chapter 10- Decision
OMG i wanted to cry. this is how imagined her change would be in the books. omg i wanted her to be changed but at the same time i was like "NOOOOO" ahahah
great job!!!
Reviewer: silentred (Signed) · Date: July 01, 2009 12:37 AM · On: Chapter 11- Burning
There was no twilight to have stars twinkle above me, not even a new moon to shine heaven upon me. I lived without the burning flash of blinding light from an eclipse, and ever reaching out for my horizon, my breaking dawn
that line made me laugh so hard, it's perfect!
Reviewer: Snowball Sniper (Signed) · Date: June 30, 2009 11:45 PM · On: Chapter 16 - Vile
That was really good! Nothing is perfect in this world that you have created, and its GOOD to not be perfect. I love that we, the audience, is getting the chance to see Breaking Dawn through a different light. Very well written. Can't wait for more. :-)
Reviewer: Love_Twilight (Signed) · Date: June 30, 2009 10:39 PM · On: Chapter 16 - Vile
Thank you so much for the update! It was more than worth the wait :) Glad to hear that you're enjoying your summer (and that chapters will be coming more quickly now!)
Reviewer: Love_Twilight (Signed) · Date: June 30, 2009 10:39 PM · On: Chapter 16 - Vile
Thank you so much for the update! It was more than worth the wait :) Glad to hear that you're enjoying your summer (and that chapters will be coming more quickly now!)
Reviewer: syrXrys (Signed) · Date: June 30, 2009 10:19 PM · On: Chapter 16 - Vile
Fantastic! I love the angst! Keep on writing I need to know what happens next!
Reviewer: Bebo (Signed) · Date: June 30, 2009 09:30 PM · On: Chapter 9- Warmed By the Fire
wow that was amazing!!! now i want another call from renee so bella can tell her that he's definitely NOT gay! LOL
Reviewer: Miss Poison (Signed) · Date: June 30, 2009 05:02 PM · On: Chapter 16 - Vile
Excellent chapter.
Reviewer: Steph29 (Signed) · Date: June 30, 2009 02:37 PM · On: Chapter 12- Opening My Eyes To the Sun
Oh god, I'm feeling Edward's pain and am crying with him!
Reviewer: jordynnem (Signed) · Date: June 30, 2009 01:30 PM · On: Chapter 15- Rapture
That was your best chapter yet. I didn't like your Edward at first. I thought he was a total ass actually. I think I understand better now why you'd written him that way. Great job!
Reviewer: jordynnem (Signed) · Date: June 30, 2009 01:07 PM · On: Chapter 14- 20 Questions
You almost lost me at the last couple of chapters, but I'm back now! I think I may like where this is going....hmmm, we'll see.
Reviewer: syrXrys (Signed) · Date: June 30, 2009 12:34 PM · On: Chapter 3- Here Comes the Bride...
Awesome-ness!!!
Reviewer: Mom of 2 in WI (Signed) · Date: June 30, 2009 12:30 PM · On: Chapter 16 - Vile
Great chapter, lots of action and emotions. I forgot for a moment that Edward can read Bella's mind now.
There are a few typos in the chapter. Simple things like extra pronouns and stuff. Go back and reread it and I think you'll see them. No biggie, I'd just want to know so I could fix them!
Keep writing!
Reviewer: Steph29 (Signed) · Date: June 30, 2009 12:04 PM · On: Chapter 9- Warmed By the Fire
Fuck me! That's about all I can say right now. Oh, and I need a cold shower and I NEED Edward Cullen!!!
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