LOL  love this chapter can't wait for me!

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WOO HOO!!  I love it when Bella puts on her tiger face and plays with Emmett!!  That is deliciously funny!

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lolol thank youu!!

 

i needed some laughs..it was getting heavy. =)

WOW!!!!!  Shivers ran down my spine!

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what i love about this, is that you really went in depth in regards to the pain that both e and b felt with their first time.

 what annoyed me about BD was the fade to black and complete lack of explanation or detail of bella losing her virginity. 

 smeyer implied it hurt a bit, but then bam she was back on the horse.

 

i enjoyed this!

 

 

Author's Response:

I felt i needed to show the pain. So many writer's skim over that. For Bella, it is uncomfortable, it is painful; i mean i haven't met that pain yet, but i do know it's not like..."Ow...ok, i'm good; screw me". I haven't done a justice to Edward yet. He needs his own version, and it's going to come when I'm complete here-- another 2 chapters or so more. I'm working on a series though...I'm not stopping.

The fade to balck made me scream out loud at 3am...not funny when youre frustrated and parents want to kill you...

 

yEA...uhm Bella's not getting back on any horse lol...so prepare for angst ;]

 

thanks for your review!

Alyssa Cullen

I love how Rose is being such a good sister.

Wow. That was probably one of the hottest wedding night scenes that I've ever read. It was made even more realistic by the fact that you made a point to show bella's pain. When I read the fics where she acts like she's a pro, and edward has little to no concern, it doesn't sit right. That was perfect though. You didn't downplay her virginity- his either- and it made the whole thing that much better! AWESOME! not to mention, soooo hottt!

 

And the thing with Emmett?!?!?!?! LMFAO!!! I was like, cracking up at that. LITERALY. Edward's reaction was priceless. For a seond it's like he thought he was finding out about a secret affair or something. !!!! God, that was hillarious!!! he'll be teasing her about that FOREVER!! -pin intended- XD!!!!!

Author's Response:

Yeaa- they're not pros; they're actually nervous wrecks lol, and this was the only way to prove that.

uHM And as for Emmett...just wait and see what's happening w. our favorite coven in the abuse department. XD

Love it!

This chapter gave me tingles. It was the perfect combination of romance and sensuality.  I hate seeing twilight fanfiction that is just pure raunchy smut, and makes Bella and Edward out of character (ie.  alcoholics, sex addicts, womanizer, etc)  In this story, I felt all of Bella's emotions and feelings, as if I were in her shoes.  You captured the vulnerability of the moment beautifully, and stayed true to Bella and Edward's characters. Bella tripping out of her wedding gown and yelling for Emmett were moments that made me smile:) I will definately look forward to your next chapter:)

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I serisouly despise straight smut like that. Well, i mean, we've all wanted the smut, but to a certain extent. The hardcore stuff gets under my skin; that's not to say that i don't respect the writer's who write that way- it's all weel written, but not a personal preference.

 

lol ohh Emmett...don't worry...serious abuse is coming...

Very tastefully pulled off.  You made it realistic without losing the romance of the moment.  Your portrayal of Edward was wonderful.....Thanks for the awesome story!

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Woah... Edward must be huge!! Lol.. hey, he's welcome at my house anytime, I promise not to cry. ;o) LOL that was hot.

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LOL!!

 

we'd all like to think that...this is Stephenie's falt for leaving this all out.

Yea...if only he'd take a permanant residencey at mine lol

Thanks for the review!!

That was just beyond description.  I think it was one the best first time that I've ever read between Bella and Edward.  It was absolutly perfect.  Filled with love and need and fear.  I of course enjoyed the wedding and reception and Emmetts speach was funny and touching.  And I liked how you had Bella say Emmet's name and it froze Edward. It was amusing. I enjoy your writing and as I said the love scene was magical. I see this is marked as not complete.  I am hoping that means you are going to continue this into another chapter. 

Author's Response:

Thank you so much for your review!

 Let's try to respond to all of your points now, lol

I tried very hard to convey the love and fear, but still keep the need. I'm gald to see that you think i'd nailed it.

The reception..haha...ok, when i first wrote this, the reception was formal, tender, emotional; only Carlisle spoke. It needed to have some spice, a good laugh, some anxiety. Who better than Emmett?

And who better than Emmett to at least lighten up the tension in the wedding night scene? I was swreating bullets- all hot and heavy when i realized i'd combust if it continued =)

 Yes, it's incomplete...there is definately more...and it's really leaning toward a series. I'm already developing the ideas for a rewrite from Edward's perspective. There's alot missing from here that is all Edward.

 Thanks for your support. It means alot when i get some good reviews, but more so when readers tell em they want more. It keeps me going, and keeps the fire alive. My reader's do not know how much their supprot means to me.

 Be Safe,

Alyssa Cullen

waiting expectantly for the next chapter :)

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thank you for your review!

 

if all goes according to plan, I'll be posting tomorrow night!

 

Alyssa Cullen