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Reviewer: obsidian (Signed) · Date: November 30, 2008 04:39 AM · On: Chapter 6- Mrs. Edward Cullen: Part I
i like the angst. they can't be happy all the time! good plot twist.
Reviewer: sweetmahogany (Signed) · Date: November 30, 2008 02:55 AM · On: Chapter 6- Mrs. Edward Cullen: Part I
I think it's an awesome story and I can't wait to read more!
Reviewer: IntoTheTwilight (Signed) · Date: November 30, 2008 02:21 AM · On: Chapter 6- Mrs. Edward Cullen: Part I
WOMAN... You CANNOT leave me there. Seriously, I am in physical PAIN. I absolutely LOVED this chapter. I love an asshole Edward because for some reason it makes their reconciliation that much sweeter. I think I just love the dramz, too. CANNOT wait to see where you're going with this. Pretty please with Edward on top, update soon? PS- LOL about the "Edward wnting to kill his unborn child' statement. So true!
Reviewer: Platinim13 (Signed) · Date: November 30, 2008 02:07 AM · On: Chapter 6- Mrs. Edward Cullen: Part I
I guess I don't really see him as being much of an asshole. Bella seems extremely immature, although bad self esteem is one of her major character flaws. So it all evens out.
Reviewer: GothicTemptress (Signed) · Date: November 30, 2008 01:28 AM · On: Chapter 6- Mrs. Edward Cullen: Part I
Holy Moley, what an ASS! Can't wait to see how he manages this one!
Reviewer: flute_genevive (Signed) · Date: November 30, 2008 01:14 AM · On: Chapter 6- Mrs. Edward Cullen: Part I
I just read this all in one sitting, and I'm hanging on the edge of my seat for more. Update soon, please. I love this!
Reviewer: twilightfan4ever2009 (Signed) · Date: November 30, 2008 01:09 AM · On: Chapter 6- Mrs. Edward Cullen: Part I
Whats with Edward? Whatever his problem is i hope his attitude is changed.
Reviewer: Twilightlvr (Signed) · Date: November 29, 2008 11:52 PM · On: Chapter 6- Mrs. Edward Cullen: Part I
Wow, does he have some serious making up to do to Bella. Not overly surprised by his attitude here. He is way over protective where Bella is concerned. So I can definitly see him reacting that way. Hell in BD he stopped making love to her because she had some bruises. Poor Bella broke my heart here. I like the way the family rallied around her. I like the way you are mixing the humor (like in the last chapter) with the angst and romance. Great job. I hope you'll update soon as I can't wait for your next chapter.
Reviewer: missjanelle (Signed) · Date: November 29, 2008 11:37 PM · On: Chapter 6- Mrs. Edward Cullen: Part I
oh wow, great chapter! the ending killed me but was perfect! more soon
Reviewer: icrodriguez (Signed) · Date: November 29, 2008 11:34 PM · On: Chapter 6- Mrs. Edward Cullen: Part I
I'm so excited with this you can peal me off the ceilng! I love their first fight as newlyweds! And I love that Bella is furious! Seriously, she's almost too forgiving of everything she's gone through. I hope she makes Edward squirm atleast a little. But not too long though. I can't stand to see Edward in pain. Please post more ASAP! It's fantastic! Woo-hoo!
Reviewer: venomousgal (Signed) · Date: November 29, 2008 11:11 PM · On: Chapter 6- Mrs. Edward Cullen: Part I
Well Wow. What can I say...boy Edward can really be an insensitive douche. How did he think she was going to take that assbag comment. Poor Bella. He had better suck up real good, and make up sex had better be forthcoming.
Reviewer: angelicwish (Anonymous) · Date: November 29, 2008 11:10 PM · On: Chapter 6- Mrs. Edward Cullen: Part I
I was not expecting that and holy shit I am stunned! What a jerk! (but your right the whole BD killing the child was much worse) I can't wait to see how he digs himself out of this one. Great chapter, I was completely enthralled with it :)
Reviewer: historicvampirelover (Signed) · Date: November 24, 2008 12:04 AM · On: Chapter 1- Preparations
I really like that this story was realistic. I'd love to read it from Edward's POV, but like in the books, your story does a good job of showing what Edward thinks and feels, even if we aren't in his head. More chapters please!
Reviewer: Salanna (Signed) · Date: November 19, 2008 08:58 AM · On: Chapter 5- Betrayal, a Threat and Some Really Good Cinnamon Buns
I really liked this story very much, the description of Edward's and Bella's first time was realistic and credible, there is pain and uncomfortable feelings, sweat and body fluids and generally it's not that great the first time! At the same time it was sensual and tender and hot, you pulled off quite an amazing chapter there! The morning after was both sweet and hilarious, I loved the way Bella was welcomed and accepted in the family, and Emmett was ... Emmett! Always the very big mouth (but also with a very big loving heart). The idea of him being taken down by vampire Bella is downright hilarious (except not in his opinion). Before you have Edward change Bella you might want to let them have a few more rounds as soon as Bella is recovered, you know, practice makes perfect... LOL! Great story, update soon!
Reviewer: sweetmahogany (Signed) · Date: November 18, 2008 01:49 AM · On: Chapter 5- Betrayal, a Threat and Some Really Good Cinnamon Buns
I love it. I love the interaction between the Cullens and Bella and how accepting they are of her into their family. Edward and Bella deserved some happiness and I'm glad that he was able to "love" her and it not tear him apart. Great job!
Reviewer: RMCC (Signed) · Date: November 18, 2008 01:29 AM · On: Chapter 5- Betrayal, a Threat and Some Really Good Cinnamon Buns
More, please. As soon as possible. That was incredible.
Reviewer: Jennifersardas (Signed) · Date: November 17, 2008 08:37 AM · On: Chapter 1- Preparations
This is a great read. Keep on writing! I can not wait :)
Reviewer: Salanna (Signed) · Date: November 17, 2008 08:29 AM · On: Chapter 3- Here Comes the Bride...
So far this story has been beautiful and emotional, I preferred your wedding to the version in BD. Looking forward to the wedding night!
Reviewer: sandyk199 (Signed) · Date: November 17, 2008 07:33 AM · On: Chapter 5- Betrayal, a Threat and Some Really Good Cinnamon Buns
s'wonderful ... s'marvellous ... s'more please ...
Reviewer: sandyk199 (Signed) · Date: November 17, 2008 07:20 AM · On: Chapter 3- Here Comes the Bride...
This is WONDERFUL writing. So beautifully descriptive without being over the top, your grammar and syntax are spot on, and your writing style is just fanbloodytastic. More please!
Reviewer: crystalstars88 (Signed) · Date: November 17, 2008 03:05 AM · On: Chapter 5- Betrayal, a Threat and Some Really Good Cinnamon Buns
I love how you show the honest realities of sex. It is not always flowery and perfect; there is sweat, bodily fluids, soreness. Having Bella discover the reality of what sex is with Edward is very sweet to read. It was also awesome to see Bella take on Emmett. I am secretly hoping you don't turn her into a vampire too soon, because you do such a good job of humanizing Bella's character. Since the reader is reading the story from Bella's point of view, the reader can feel her innermost thoughts, desires, and insecurities. She can be both fragile and strong. Her vulnerability as a human makes her relationship with a vampire that much more intense and exciting to read. I love your portrayal of Edward too. It's very in character for him to beating himself up over Bella's pain. I look forward to whatever direction you decide to take this story in!
Author's Response: The realities of sex is what makes it beautiful- two people trusting each other enough to share their innermost beings and not be embarressed by its normal responses. Edward and Bella deserve this experience, it's beauftiful to them. SIGH...Bella and Emmett...love those two =) Alyssa Cullen
Reviewer: Twilightlvr (Signed) · Date: November 17, 2008 12:22 AM · On: Chapter 5- Betrayal, a Threat and Some Really Good Cinnamon Buns
Another good chapter. Like that you're keeping it real with poor Bella and getting used to how do I put this...using an area she's not used to using?! Obviously love the tenderness between her and Edward and how lustful he is towards her. Amazing how that self control gets so easily chpped away. And of course, the bit with Emmett, freaking hysterical! Looking forward to your next update!
Author's Response: Thank you so much for your review!
Reviewer: Dulcinea21bella (Signed) · Date: November 16, 2008 06:27 PM · On: Chapter 5- Betrayal, a Threat and Some Really Good Cinnamon Buns
I love it. LOVE it! I have read the entire story three more times today. I love the playfulness between the Cullens. I think you hit it exactly right. The entire "Emmett" exclamation during sex was classicly funny. And I love that Edward is wanting more sex!!!! Great chapter. I can't wait for the next one. Please update soon!!!
Author's Response: Well firstly, thank you for your continued reading! and thank you for your acceptance of the love in the Cullen mansion. It goes so much deeper than protection in the face of danger...why not play it up? yes...subconsciously, Edward has become addicted, moreso than Bella. It's because he's always so used to consistency and doesn't deal well with change. maybe? i dont really know. It felt right, it just had to be. that's how i write =) I will update as soon as I can...writing and revising comes naturally when it's right; to force it before it's ready is a seriosu error. It throws off the process, and makes you despise the piece when it doesnt feel right. Or that could be just me... whatever =) Be safe... Alyssa Cullen
Reviewer: Jenbarn76 (Signed) · Date: November 16, 2008 04:20 PM · On: Chapter 1- Preparations
First of all very well written, just enough of pain and pleasure. Please keep writing. Good Emmett and Edward interaction.
Reviewer: sedrax (Signed) · Date: November 16, 2008 03:43 PM · On: Chapter 5- Betrayal, a Threat and Some Really Good Cinnamon Buns
that was freaking hilarious! and amazing and sexy and everything else all at the same time. love it.
Author's Response: hahah thanks so much!
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